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Old 04-09-2015, 07:27 PM   #1
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I’m getting older by the minute, when I’m sober kinda timid
And barely drink anymore, because I know that I’ll regret it
I think before I talk... I think I’m more evolved
I don’t get too excited or too miserable, just calm
I’m good at saving money, cause I wouldn’t pay for nothing
Unless it served a real purpose, so I put away for something
I’m careful when I drive, apparently that’s why
My insurance rates are decent, plus I’m over 25
I always pay the mortgage, since economy’s important
And I’ve got some nice things, cause I can honestly afford it
I’ve got a solid job, and I’m not a friggin slob
And I’m never late for work because I’m always on the clock
I try to eat healthy so... I dine with an extra goal
And make sure all my meals have a variety of vegetables
I’m not on that drama shit, cause I gotta be honest when
I tell it how it is… and that’s probably obvious
I’m not attracted to girls, cause I’m attracted to woman
I like the natural curves, and not the plastic-y bitches
I have a steady pace, I don’t have to win the race
And as long as shit gets done, then I’m happy with my day
I take care of my lawn, and rake there in the fall
And if I see a pesky weed I’m straight tearin' it off
Keep my house neat and tidy, I ain’t about bein' grimy
My sink always sparkles and the spout’s even shiny
I stay clean cut, got no locks or a beard
And I shave each stub until I’ve got the appearance
I wear normal style fashions, it’s embarrassing to me
These phony type faggots when they’re wearin' skinny jeans
I like moderate volumes when I listen to music
And I’m not into coffee with vanillas and mousses
Hate the cold in the winter, I stay controlling the temp
Now that’s 50 reasons why I’m way too old for this shit..


aha verse from topical tourney that didn't go to votes
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Old 04-09-2015, 07:37 PM   #2
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Quit being so fucking depressing.
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Old 05-07-2015, 06:55 AM   #3
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Cool concept. Traipsed into somewhat foreign territory for you, without ever leaving your comfort zone. Solid competition verse

I really liked the opener/ opening few lines
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Old 05-15-2015, 03:05 PM   #4
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This seemed like a spitting image of Cam'rons 'I Hate My Job'
Its out of your comfort zone and adds a new twist to your writing
Really enjoyable stuff because your flow remains intact
the vibe you gave off made the read feel like ot was weaved together effortlessly
one of my faves among a few of your other pieces..keep it up coffee pot
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