10-22-2023, 03:51 PM | #1 |
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A Tale Of Searing Solitude
In the confines of my isolated existence, I chose to live as a recluse, far removed from the ***ophony of human interaction. Each day was a slow descent into the recesses of my mind, punctuated by the hypnotic flicker of the hearth's flames.
One ordinary evening, as the wood whispered tales of forgotten forests and ancient secrets, a rat scuttled into my life. Its sudden appearance unleashed a torrent of long-buried fears, as though the past itself had awakened to taunt me. I succumbed to madness, tearing my own world asunder in an unrelenting quest to capture the elusive vermin. I never glimpsed the creature, but its ceaseless, mocking scurrying played tricks on my senses. Furniture became splinters, walls crumbled, and my laughter melded with anguished tears in a manic symphony of chaos. The rat's maddening squeals reverberated in my mind, an unending torment that made me disrobe, convinced the vile creature was crawling upon me. I turned to self-mutilation, slashing at my own flesh in a grotesque quest for an adversary that defied my grasp. As my own lifeblood painted the room in shades of crimson, my shattered psyche retraced the steps of a childhood memory. I was seven when I stumbled upon my sister's lifeless form, her flesh devoured by rats. The scurrying and agonizing squeals of that day had never truly left me. In one last, desperate gambit for salvation, I set my cottage ablaze, believing that by consuming the rat in the inferno, I could finally reclaim my peace and sanity. I laughed, a maniacal echo of despair, thinking I had gained mastery over my tormentor. But beyond the fiery veil, in the eerie glow of my burning haven, the rat remained, untouched and unfazed, a silent witness to my descent into personal oblivion. The flames danced, and my laughter turned to cinders in the chilling night air. It was a tale of a soul ensnared by its own demons, lost in a labyrinth of madness, and a rat that persisted as the spectral embodiment of despair. |
10-22-2023, 05:47 PM | #2 |
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Some repetitive wording holds this back a bit but I been on this Asian kick lately and this has sensei vibes so I fuck with that. Conceptually, this was really well thought out and paced. If anything you could've even made it longer but it works either way. Not a topical but a solid short story. I'd love to see more of this, just try to avoid using the same words too much (with the exception of the rat because that's the center idea of the plot).
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