Zelph vs Incredible - ZELPH WINS

[bleak]

SOL Season 1
Wk 1

Due Thursday, Jan 24th

Minimum - 10 lines
Max - 16 lines
Line limit can increase if both agree
24hr ext to be granted by opponent

NO biting
NO swaying
NO feeding
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2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in
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Agree on a line limit
May God have mercy on your souls

@wear shh @Incredible

[SHECK WES]

10-12 lines like the mag said I’d do

[SHECK WES]

@Incredible

I have a 16 line decoy verse ready & a 10 line real verse if you plan on showing

[Incredible]

Sent 10 to @Sharp and @bleak

[SHECK WES]

MOD WARS


Time to settle an old score. Type of shit u’ll get exposed for
Face it, u cnt compete with the Monsters Inc.. ur just a lil bitch behind closed doors
I own the streets + u aint as cold as me. Teach u a lesson - watch how I fold a G
The stick’ll put a hole thru ur lid & leave rounds at the bottom like a boba tea
Told the judge ur a bad dad. Now I stretch ur wifey out wen I tap that
BIG FACTS.. Mr. Incredible couldn’t keep a grip on his son like Jack-Jack!
U’ll always flop. Workin a $15 construction job & u think ur makin guap?
STOP.. wen I lift a beam over ur head u won’t live to collect the workers comp.
U tried to claw back for your son.. but when my paws grip - it's frightening
cuz wen the Scar roars its leaving a cub with a fallen father like The Lion King

[Sharp]

Incredible's Verse

Originally Posted by Wear Shhh

I can’t do it until @Diode unbans For Battling lol all the Alias info is on there

Originally Posted by Wear Shhh

You’ll catch me dead before you see me wear anything baggier than skinny jeans

Plz explain why u got banned fgt, figures u duck on the reveal
It's like when u meet a chick for the first time prayin she doesn't squeal
U wouldn't throw hands without a badge got no balls for dem skinny jeans
Only thing squeezin around u is my finger &&& u callin "I need backup plz!!"
This monster face loves when it's autumn, yeah Halloween time!!
People comparin make up n' he goes as is "hey guys what u think about mine?"
Them weird videos, deformed face, etc etc u ain't from a good home
So I got that strap ready on the shoulder & I'm no skate boarder w/ a broken bone
My squads loyal, don't talk to cops, never here us thru their speakers
Guess God IS just one of us, he decided not to give this cop any lip either

[Aero]

Wear Shhh

Time to settle an old score. Type of shit u’ll get exposed for
Face it, u cnt compete with the Monsters Inc.. ur just a lil bitch behind closed doors
this was an ok opener. cant compete with Monsters Inc made it seem like a Gimmick verse
I own the streets + u aint as cold as me. Teach u a lesson - watch how I fold a G
The stick’ll put a hole thru ur lid & leave rounds at the bottom like a boba tea
soon as I saw the word stick I was like here we go again lol. You niggas will use sticks to no end. The rest of the bar is actually good but 2-3 years ago good
Told the judge ur a bad dad. Now I stretch ur wifey out wen I tap that
BIG FACTS.. Mr. Incredible couldn’t keep a grip on his son like Jack-Jack!
I remember a member on this site didnt have custody of his kids if its him its a good personal. Bar could've been stronger but im not complaining
U’ll always flop. Workin a $15 construction job & u think ur makin guap?
STOP.. wen I lift a beam over ur head u won’t live to collect the workers comp.
LOOOOL i actually lol'ed. Wont be alive to collect workers comp hehehehe
U tried to claw back for your son.. but when my paws grip - it's frightening
cuz wen the Scar roars its leaving a cub with a fallen father like The Lion King
this was terrible because of how bad you tried to make it work lol. the Scar roars uh oh we all dont know its a lion king reference

Good verse. Thanks for using humor


Incredible:


Plz explain why u got banned fgt, figures u duck on the reveal
It's like when u meet a chick for the first time prayin she doesn't squeal
i dont get this and im afraid there's not enough to it for me to investigate
U wouldn't throw hands without a badge got no balls for dem skinny jeans
Only thing squeezin around u is my finger &&& u callin "I need backup plz!!"
okay this could've been decent if it didnt come off initially as extremely gay. You shouldnt say no balls for skinny jeans then immediately follow with only thing squeezing around you is my finger
This monster face loves when it's autumn, yeah Halloween time!!
People comparin make up n' he goes as is "hey guys what u think about mine?"
lolol I lol'ed at this bc of how incredible stupid it was
Them weird videos, deformed face, etc etc u ain't from a good home
So I got that strap ready on the shoulder & I'm no skate boarder w/ a broken bone
this was just terrible all around. no tie-ins. the I'm no skater drew no immediate comparisons. Worst bar structurally I've read in a minute
My squads loyal, don't talk to cops, never here us thru their speakers
Guess God IS just one of us, he decided not to give this cop any lip either
I like the harshness that was attempted it just didn't come together



Glad you both showed but this easily goes to Zelph. Keep battling guys loving it.

[DMS]

Originally Posted by Wear Shhh

MOD WARS


Time to settle an old score. Type of shit u’ll get exposed for
Face it, u cnt compete with the Monsters Inc.. ur just a lil bitch behind closed doors

Mine was better tbh, js not trynna brag out here but my play on Monsters Inc was better. Dece opener

I own the streets + u aint as cold as me. Teach u a lesson - watch how I fold a G
The stick’ll put a hole thru ur lid & leave rounds at the bottom like a boba tea

Ngl I don’t know what a boba tea is, kk looked it up. Dece

Told the judge ur a bad dad. Now I stretch ur wifey out wen I tap that
BIG FACTS.. Mr. Incredible couldn’t keep a grip on his son like Jack-Jack!

I liked the subtle Mrs. Incred ref, this was nice but nothing killer,

U’ll always flop. Workin a $15 construction job & u think ur makin guap?
STOP.. wen I lift a beam over ur head u won’t live to collect the workers comp.

Nice

U tried to claw back for your son.. but when my paws grip - it's frightening
cuz wen the Scar roars its leaving a cub with a fallen father like The Lion King

Best of the verse, ‘twas very nice

Originally Posted by Sharp

Incredible's Verse








Plz explain why u got banned fgt, figures u duck on the reveal
It's like when u meet a chick for the first time prayin she doesn't squeal

Idk what this means exactly

U wouldn't throw hands without a badge got no balls for dem skinny jeans
Only thing squeezin around u is my finger &&& u callin "I need backup plz!!"

Meh

This monster face loves when it's autumn, yeah Halloween time!!
People comparin make up n' he goes as is "hey guys what u think about mine?"

Kinda trash tbh, the concept itself lacks potential, not to mention how fucking garbage your use of it was.

Them weird videos, deformed face, etc etc u ain't from a good home
So I got that strap ready on the shoulder & I'm no skate boarder w/ a broken bone

Meh

My squads loyal, don't talk to cops, never here us thru their speakers
Guess God IS just one of us, he decided not to give this cop any lip either

This was dope

Zelph easy

[Flow]

This was a white wash in my opinion but happy to give constructive feedback @Incredible if my opinion is of interest


Plz explain why u got banned fgt, figures u duck on the reveal
It's like when u meet a chick for the first time prayin she doesn't squeal

I'm totally lost by this bar. Arguably I like making a bitch do that. That means she enjoyed the two in the pink one in the stink

Anyway this bar had no wordplay that I can see. No metaphor or idiom or double meaning. It's not insulting even as a statement. I'm not entirely sure what this is. A personal reference at best but not even a good angle an if it was you did little with it.


U wouldn't throw hands without a badge got no balls for dem skinny jeans
Only thing squeezin around u is my finger &&& u callin "I need backup plz!!"

ok I get this one. Set up is he's skinny an hasn't got balls. Punch is cus your so skinny my finger could choke you out and instead of fight the good fight your a balless peice of lippy trash an would ring your boys in blue. I also get the squeezing word was specifically chosen to follow on from set up

However.. it is just weak. It's not very insulting. The imagery is almost cartoonist in its execution. It's better then the opener but it's still very weak

This monster face loves when it's autumn, yeah Halloween time!!
People comparin make up n' he goes as is "hey guys what u think about mine?"

he goes as is... That was just sloppy. An given the set up which was at least a ok angle you really dampened anything you might have had with a very statemenish way of saying he is ugly without make up? Presume that was the idea here


Them weird videos, deformed face, etc etc u ain't from a good home
So I got that strap ready on the shoulder & I'm no skate boarder w/ a broken bone

I'm starting to regret doing a break down. I don't see how the punch ties into the set up at all.

My squads loyal, don't talk to cops, never here us thru their speakers
Guess God IS just one of us, he decided not to give this cop any lip either

praise be to Jesus. This was an actual bar. Don't get me wrong even 5 of these would of lost to zelph who came very consistent I thought in this battle, but this is the bar you should use as a template for future writing. Set up and punch tie in. The execution is good as I didn't see where your going with it until that last half of the second line and then punch baby. Yes. Do more of these.

[/QUOTE]




As for Zelph, consistent showing an a white wash win. Bob's tea was my least favourite by a mile. Opener was a solid nameplay. The Mr incredibe line was a funny personal with nameplay ties in. Very good. Closer was definitely LOTB. And finally - I liked the theme of kids movies as an added personal to your target. That was subtle and nice.

Vote Z

[Ryno]

Originally Posted by Wear Shhh

MOD WARS


Time to settle an old score. Type of shit u’ll get exposed for
Face it, u cnt compete with the Monsters Inc.. ur just a lil bitch behind closed doors
Told the judge ur a bad dad. Now I stretch ur wifey out wen I tap that
BIG FACTS.. Mr. Incredible couldn’t keep a grip on his son like Jack-Jack!
U’ll always flop. Workin a $15 construction job & u think ur makin guap?
STOP.. wen I lift a beam over ur head u won’t live to collect the workers comp.

Originally Posted by Sharp

Incredible's Verse


Them weird videos, deformed face, etc etc u ain't from a good home
So I got that strap ready on the shoulder & I'm no skate boarder w/ a broken bone
My squads loyal, don't talk to cops, never here us thru their speakers
Guess God IS just one of us, he decided not to give this cop any lip either

v. Wear Shhh. Didnt like a few of incredibles punches. The wording wasnt impactful. Zelph had better hits & attempts.

[Sinacog]

Wear Shh..

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Time to settle an old score. Type of shit u’ll get exposed for
Face it, u cnt compete with the Monsters Inc.. ur just a lil bitch behind closed doors

I haven't seen a punch this dope in a while..so props for that. Niice overall..cool bar..

I own the streets + u aint as cold as me. Teach u a lesson - watch how I fold a G
The stick’ll put a hole thru ur lid & leave rounds at the bottom like a boba tea

This is another dope bar..pretty dope man..niice..

Told the judge ur a bad dad. Now I stretch ur wifey out wen I tap that
BIG FACTS.. Mr. Incredible couldn’t keep a grip on his son like Jack-Jack!

This was okay..it was felt..but could be better..

U’ll always flop. Workin a $15 construction job & u think ur makin guap?
STOP.. wen I lift a beam over ur head u won’t live to collect the workers comp.

Lmao@ this bar..it was niice..good one..

U tried to claw back for your son.. but when my paws grip - it's frightening
cuz wen the Scar roars its leaving a cub with a fallen father like The Lion King

Nice one here..niice closer..cool bar..

Sharp -

Plz explain why u got banned fgt, figures u duck on the reveal
It's like when u meet a chick for the first time prayin she doesn't squeal

This was decent..I suppose..needs to be better in ways..but okay..

U wouldn't throw hands without a badge got no balls for dem skinny jeans
Only thing squeezin around u is my finger &&& u callin "I need backup plz!!"

This was funny..but needs to better in ways..but okay..

This monster face loves when it's autumn, yeah Halloween time!!
People comparin make up n' he goes as is "hey guys what u think about mine?"

lol..this was okay as-well..decent I suppose..

Them weird videos, deformed face, etc etc u ain't from a good home
So I got that strap ready on the shoulder & I'm no skate boarder w/ a broken bone

This was okay..niice one..

My squads loyal, don't talk to cops, never here us thru their speakers
Guess God IS just one of us, he decided not to give this cop any lip either

lmao @ this bar..was okay..niice one..your best bar..decent closer..

overall - decent battle here..but Wear Shh kind of overwhelmed Sharp with his verse. More better hits, and more efficiency..niice one guys..but I have to go with..

V/ Wear Shhh