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Old 04-22-2018, 07:46 PM   #1
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olddddd as fuck homey, stop actin like you official
Everyone knows your mid life crisis involved some Cuban missles
In the chat you really act soft, you’re far from the last don
You need to strap on a pair, then toss out your pair of strap ons
Thinkin this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride
Women won’t fuck you, must be small with a lazy finish
Bitches cry when they see Nic Unit you’d think there’s babies in it
Still rockin Jordans in your pics, stop forcin n stop it
It makes me cringe when you post ‘Js’ more then Barcotic
Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week
Yo gun bars are lame, act like anyone can’t snuff this dude
My shooter’ll have that stick to your stomach, that’s comfort food
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beaten u 6 times, man & now u drownin in ya own sorrows with lines that are not enticin
u got nothin but watered-down concepts... u even gotta pinch ur nose just to write them
Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium
u used to pm me for Jordan releases so don’t gimme that I’m too old talk again
If I wear em it’s & like the OG still has swag... when u do it’s like that wardrobe goes better with moccasins
u tried hookin up with an Indian chick online, yeah, nice try yo
But that’s not why ya champ match success rate... has u tied to the Browns bio
wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit
Wack bitch. My guns so big they make ya jerseys look small & my stick-ups great
Intimidate ya garbage... cans on the floor like gettin home on waste pick-up days
As a supplier the product never comes to a dead stop. As a shooter I let the lead pop
Im here multitasking cuz I’m on the block with the fire.... that’s also an Alvin Karpis head shot
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olddddd as fuck homey, stop actin like you official
Everyone knows your mid life crisis involved some Cuban missles
This was ok, the crisis part was ok connection, but it hit
In the chat you really act soft, you’re far from the last don
You need to strap on a pair, then toss out your pair of strap ons
Ehh wasnt clever or funny to me
Thinkin this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride
Lol. This was cool
Women won’t fuck you, must be small with a lazy finish
Bitches cry when they see Nic Unit you’d think there’s babies in it
NIC care, thought concept was cool, overall line was bland to me? iono still cool
Still rockin Jordans in your pics, stop forcin n stop it
It makes me cringe when you post ‘Js’ more then Barcotic
Light
Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week
Ehh Shingles/Shingles needs more, I did it before so hit light
Yo gun bars are lame, act like anyone can’t snuff this dude
My shooter’ll have that stick to your stomach, that’s comfort food
Recycled idea....didnt hit as hard

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Originally Posted by ill nik-A View Post
beaten u 6 times, man & now u drownin in ya own sorrows with lines that are not enticin
u got nothin but watered-down concepts... u even gotta pinch ur nose just to write them
Didnt much like it, was fresh tho but needed more aside from watered down imo
Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium
Cool, I fff with this
u used to pm me for Jordan releases so don’t gimme that I’m too old talk again
If I wear em it’s & like the OG still has swag... when u do it’s like that wardrobe goes better with moccasins
Eh, get it but meh
u tried hookin up with an Indian chick online, yeah, nice try yo
But that’s not why ya champ match success rate... has u tied to the Browns bio
Cool personal
wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit
wordy but coo persnl
Wack bitch. My guns so big they make ya jerseys look small & my stick-ups great
Intimidate ya garbage... cans on the floor like gettin home on waste pick-up days
played
As a supplier the product never comes to a dead stop. As a shooter I let the lead pop
Im here multitasking cuz I’m on the block with the fire.... that’s also an Alvin Karpis head shot
Ok.closer
some people might see it different but i got nik w/ the edge. alvin had cleaner executions but overall nik just had more, imo. both had some hits n eh stuff. but vote- ILL NIKA

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olddddd as fuck homey, stop actin like you official
Everyone knows your mid life crisis involved some Cuban missles
(Ok)
In the chat you really act soft, you’re far from the last don
You need to strap on a pair, then toss out your pair of strap ons
(I like rearrange lines like this. Reminds me of kung fu grip but eh this one was eh
Thinkin this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride
(I like this . its kinda corny but I'm Fucking with it)
Women won’t fuck you, must be small with a lazy finish
Bitches cry when they see Nic Unit you’d think there’s babies in it
(Eh)
Still rockin Jordans in your pics, stop forcin n stop it
It makes me cringe when you post ‘Js’ more then Barcotic
(Nah)
Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week
(Hahaha why have I not seen this . its way too easy but I like this )
Yo gun bars are lame, act like anyone can’t snuff this dude
My shooter’ll have that stick to your stomach, that’s comfort food
(I like this too )

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beaten u 6 times, man & now u drownin in ya own sorrows with lines that are not enticin
u got nothin but watered-down concepts... u even gotta pinch ur nose just to write them
(Ok)
Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium
(Oh word . slick)
u used to pm me for Jordan releases so don’t gimme that I’m too old talk again
If I wear em it’s & like the OG still has swag... when u do it’s like that wardrobe goes better with moccasins
(Lol the Indian angle reemerges)
u tried hookin up with an Indian chick online, yeah, nice try yo
But that’s not why ya champ match success rate... has u tied to the Browns bio
(Ok)
wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit
(DAMN)
Wack bitch. My guns so big they make ya jerseys look small & my stick-ups great
Intimidate ya garbage... cans on the floor like gettin home on waste pick-up days
(Nah)
As a supplier the product never comes to a dead stop. As a shooter I let the lead pop
Im here multitasking cuz I’m on the block with the fire.... that’s also an Alvin Karpis head shot
(block /Ksrpus head needed more than the fire%gun play )

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Thinkin this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride
Women won’t fuck you, must be small with a lazy finish
Bitches cry when they see Nic Unit you’d think there’s babies in it
Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week
Yo gun bars are lame, act like anyone can’t snuff this dude
My shooter’ll have that stick to your stomach, that’s comfort food

vs.

Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium
wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit

& almost water-down, but i didn't think the flip was enough from "so watered down they need a cap & goggles" type lines ive seen...

I've got Karpis here with a more direct & comical hard hitting verse... I usually fuck with Nika's concepts more than I did this week, even AK's non-quotes were typically chuckle worthy and not complete misses.. cool read, props to both

Vote - Alvin Karpis
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olddddd as fuck homey, stop actin like you official
Everyone knows your mid life crisis involved some Cuban missles
Thinkin this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride
Still rockin Jordans in your pics, stop forcin n stop it
It makes me cringe when you post ‘Js’ more then Barcotic
Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week
versus

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beaten u 6 times, man & now u drownin in ya own sorrows with lines that are not enticin
u got nothin but watered-down concepts... u even gotta pinch ur nose just to write them
Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium
wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit
As a supplier the product never comes to a dead stop. As a shooter I let the lead pop
Im here multitasking cuz I’m on the block with the fire.... that’s also an Alvin Karpis head shot
Very close & a crazy clash of styles, y'all made it tough for Me to call a winner, tbh. I actually prefer Karp's style over Nik's, cleaner & harsher wording, in most cases, but I'm giving the nod to the old man this time; the creativity of his concepts put him over, so VOTE ILL NIKA.
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olddddd as fuck homey, stop actin like you official
Everyone knows your mid life crisis involved some Cuban missles

This was okay. Kinda funny.

In the chat you really act soft, you’re far from the last don
You need to strap on a pair, then toss out your pair of strap ons

I didn’t like this.

Thinkin this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride

Lol I liked this. The wp it’s pretty nice and that’s a funny line.

Women won’t fuck you, must be small with a lazy finish
Bitches cry when they see Nic Unit you’d think there’s babies in it

I get the Nic unit wp and in itself was fine but the execution was off. The “bitches cry” and “babies in it” doesn’t tie in well.

Still rockin Jordans in your pics, stop forcin n stop it
It makes me cringe when you post ‘Js’ more then Barcotic

I don’t get the barcotic tie in.

Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week

AK funny af lol. This a good line, I literally laughed at this one. Solid af.

Yo gun bars are lame, act like anyone can’t snuff this dude
My shooter’ll have that stick to your stomach, that’s comfort food

I’ve heard similar lines but I thought this was decent.



beaten u 6 times, man & now u drownin in ya own sorrows with lines that are not enticin
u got nothin but watered-down concepts... u even gotta pinch ur nose just to write them

This was just okay. The concept is very basic.

Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium

This was cool.

u used to pm me for Jordan releases so don’t gimme that I’m too old talk again
If I wear em it’s & like the OG still has swag... when u do it’s like that wardrobe goes better with moccasins

Purely a statement bar but it still was a light jab.

u tried hookin up with an Indian chick online, yeah, nice try yo
But that’s not why ya champ match success rate... has u tied to the Browns bio

This is pretty dope. Those are two good angles (the record and the online thing) and you wove them together well for an effective punch.

wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit

This cool. I liked the personal. The wordiness took away from the bar a bit hit it hit.

Wack bitch. My guns so big they make ya jerseys look small & my stick-ups great
Intimidate ya garbage... cans on the floor like gettin home on waste pick-up days

Garbage can/cannon flips have been done s lot. I think if you use a played concept you have to do it in s particularly creative way but I don’t think you did that here.

As a supplier the product never comes to a dead stop. As a shooter I let the lead pop
Im here multitasking cuz I’m on the block with the fire.... that’s also an Alvin Karpis head sho

Decent closer.

I liked this battle and thought it was very close. I thought Ill nik-a edged it by the slightest margin.

AK’s verse was funny and entertaining. He slightly had more misses than Ill though. Ill’s verse was also a bit more well rounded.

Mvgt Ill Nik-a
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olddddd as fuck homey, stop actin like you official
Everyone knows your mid life crisis involved some Cuban missles
what?
In the chat you really act soft, you’re far from the last don
You need to strap on a pair, then toss out your pair of strap ons
Think in this fat old fuck gets ass is a new surprise...
If you popped a chariots...the wheel on the one you used to ride
ok this made me giggle
Women won’t fuck you, must be small with a lazy finish
Bitches cry when they see Nic Unit you’d think there’s babies in it
[b]
Still rockin Jordans in your pics, stop forcin n stop it
It makes me cringe when you post ‘Js’ more then Barcotic
Such a shitty life, a latino roofer that’s ass cheeks....
You put up Shingles ya whole life & got diagnosed with it last week
Yo gun bars are lame, act like anyone can’t snuff this dude
My shooter’ll have that stick to your stomach, that’s comfort food
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beaten u 6 times, man & now u drownin in ya own sorrows with lines that are not enticin
u got nothin but watered-down concepts... u even gotta pinch ur nose just to write them
Fuck a gun, nigga. I’m comfy with the box-cutter slaying him
knife to the face make the blade feel at home... that’s Gillette stadium
u used to pm me for Jordan releases so don’t gimme that I’m too old talk again
If I wear em it’s & like the OG still has swag... when u do it’s like that wardrobe goes better with moccasins
u tried hookin up with an Indian chick online, yeah, nice try yo
But that’s not why ya champ match success rate... has u tied to the Browns bio
wanna be recognized as a pioneerin vet yet used to jack from joke sites & got revealed here quick
So don’t think it’s ok to jump on the Cro’s a biter bandwagon... when u built the first wheels for that shit
Wack bitch. My guns so big they make ya jerseys look small & my stick-ups great
Intimidate ya garbage... cans on the floor like gettin home on waste pick-up days
As a supplier the product never comes to a dead stop. As a shooter I let the lead pop
Im here multitasking cuz I’m on the bl
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Dunno what Blue was reading this week

Karpis has a few diff good ideas but nothing that really ZINGED to me, seemed like he just dialled it in tbh, chariots was cool, i didnt get the Nic Unit but i imagine its like a neo natal ward or some shit so dont feel like im missing much. also as i read that I thought of see Nik / scenic wordplay that could have been used but thats a missed opportunity i guess LOL. Shingles again could have been so much more but as it was it just hit a little light, stick to your stomach was just okay.


Nik has the watered down concepts line that I liked, not seen that done before despite Blue's post, Gilette Stadium was cool, biter bandwagon was cool, I didnt like cans on the floor tbh seemed a bit basic but the rest was straight and more importantly the wording seemed aggressive and like he hated the opponent, that came off harsher than Karp's as a result.

Theres a few ideas I really liked but nothing to really make them POP wording wise and thats what let Karp down a little this week I felt. Nik on the otherhand had good wording despite the line lengths and it made for a better payoff to his punches.


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