Hood Telapathy

Quarter O · 06-21-2018, 11:07 PM

Tryna find the beauty in the ugliness/
Black people disturb your calm no longer my tongue resist/
It’s like the spirit of death beds in this jungle gym/
I made my bed now the reprocussions is bugging friend/
Like Bed bugs..... tossing and turning sleepless nights/
The day’s Agrivation crawls in my ego mind/
Gotta settle this now the hood telepathy/
80% communication stood mentally/
The swag in your walks all the hood needs to know/
... about your status esteem good grief it shows/
Call it a paranoid disorder - the aura attracts demonic spirits/
I scare my boys, Lord I lack trust - my logic errored/
Who’s my enemy, devil schemes on my sense of hearing/
Making the lips on men, a deceptive weapon - eerie/
Distorting their words to agrivate my heart/
The goal is death or in jail thru agrivate assault./

Exis · 06-23-2018, 08:07 PM

I'm not sure why you do this /? If it's there to signal the end of the line, got it but its not needed...it's pretty easy to tell where things close off man...I'd do away with that tbh.Thought your wordin' is a little up & down, same as the multies...for me personally that took away from the flow...havin' said that I like the emotion & imagery, it's like you have all this detailed shit in your mind yet when transferrin' that to a piece the transistion isn't a smooth one, you have good concepts & you can obviously rhyme, I've commented on stuff of yours a few times pretty favorably as I recall...just need to tidy things up fam.

Stay upwards yeah.

2tripple0 · 06-24-2018, 08:16 PM

Yeah i liked this.....

Pharaohs Army · 07-03-2018, 01:59 AM

the reprocussions is bugging friend
not a fan of the spelling or phrasing here

80% communication stood mentally
huh?

agrivate
twice spelled wrong

You can do better than this man I've seen it before.

Quarter O · 07-03-2018, 04:25 AM

Wasn’t for you.. doesn’t mean it’s not good.

06-21-2018, 11:07 PM	#1
Quarter O Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 109 Rep Power: 0	Hood Telapathy Tryna find the beauty in the ugliness/ Black people disturb your calm no longer my tongue resist/ It’s like the spirit of death beds in this jungle gym/ I made my bed now the reprocussions is bugging friend/ Like Bed bugs..... tossing and turning sleepless nights/ The day’s Agrivation crawls in my ego mind/ Gotta settle this now the hood telepathy/ 80% communication stood mentally/ The swag in your walks all the hood needs to know/ ... about your status esteem good grief it shows/ Call it a paranoid disorder - the aura attracts demonic spirits/ I scare my boys, Lord I lack trust - my logic errored/ Who’s my enemy, devil schemes on my sense of hearing/ Making the lips on men, a deceptive weapon - eerie/ Distorting their words to agrivate my heart/ The goal is death or in jail thru agrivate assault./ Last edited by Quarter O; 06-23-2018 at 06:26 PM.

06-24-2018, 08:16 PM	#3
2tripple0 death warmed over Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Downstairs illstreet dam Posts: 2,564 Battle Record: 6-21 Rep Power: 0	Yeah i liked this..... __________________ https://soundcloud.com/user-876573949/ https://soundcloud.com/user-634430314/

06-23-2018, 08:07 PM	#2
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	I'm not sure why you do this /? If it's there to signal the end of the line, got it but its not needed...it's pretty easy to tell where things close off man...I'd do away with that tbh.Thought your wordin' is a little up & down, same as the multies...for me personally that took away from the flow...havin' said that I like the emotion & imagery, it's like you have all this detailed shit in your mind yet when transferrin' that to a piece the transistion isn't a smooth one, you have good concepts & you can obviously rhyme, I've commented on stuff of yours a few times pretty favorably as I recall...just need to tidy things up fam. Stay upwards yeah.

07-03-2018, 01:59 AM	#4
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,962 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	the reprocussions is bugging friend not a fan of the spelling or phrasing here 80% communication stood mentally huh? agrivate twice spelled wrong You can do better than this man I've seen it before.

07-03-2018, 04:25 AM	#5
Quarter O Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 109 Rep Power: 0	Wasn’t for you.. doesn’t mean it’s not good.