Indecisive Royalty

MarylandMade · 09-04-2013, 11:14 PM

Indecisive Royalty

An involuntary urge that I've had since birth,
has taken full manipulation of my own self worth,
and forced me into a life that I'm not sure I want to live,
But I've resided on this thrown ever since I was a kid,
contradictory, destructive, and vindictive assessments,
of my crazy introspective analytical messes,
How can a human being display their dreams for sharing,
If they can't even escape their own illusion of failing,
a massive wedlock with a drop of your self doubt,
churning nonstop you can't knock what its all about,
Those conscious voices must have some sort of significance,
since the sliverish sense of their two cents just makes sense,
one color diminished while the other returns,
but for the combustive fire, the two colors, they both burn,
It yerns to learn what certain words concern,
such an impervious God to decide not to return,
The jester shall learn why the King has just stepped down,
simply because of his thoughts just beneath his crown,

Matriarch · 09-05-2013, 02:15 AM

This was pretty good.

Perfectly blending poetic language with an uncanny "understanding" ^__^

Alias?

veritas · 09-05-2013, 01:27 PM

An involuntary urge that I've had since birth,
has taken full manipulation of my own self worth,

that was excellent. Post more!

Geno · 09-05-2013, 06:50 PM

Fucking slayed this. Good shit Md.
Scheme was nice, flowed solid as hell. Content was very introspective, deep, and highly relatebale. Even got some love from the sites psychiatrist, veritas. Well done

Geno · 09-05-2013, 06:55 PM

P.s.

Make sure you read and feed other peoples shit to. Forum policy. Thanks

MarylandMade · 09-06-2013, 08:30 PM

I appreciate all the positive feedback everyone. when I wrote it I didn't think anybody would be able to relate to it, since I barely took any thought in writing it.... I just simply wrote. and dont worry Geno , ive been taking my time to respond to others pieces. thanks! if anyome else wants to give feedback feel free!

09-04-2013, 11:14 PM	#1
MarylandMade Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 36 Rep Power: 0	Indecisive Royalty Indecisive Royalty An involuntary urge that I've had since birth, has taken full manipulation of my own self worth, and forced me into a life that I'm not sure I want to live, But I've resided on this thrown ever since I was a kid, contradictory, destructive, and vindictive assessments, of my crazy introspective analytical messes, How can a human being display their dreams for sharing, If they can't even escape their own illusion of failing, a massive wedlock with a drop of your self doubt, churning nonstop you can't knock what its all about, Those conscious voices must have some sort of significance, since the sliverish sense of their two cents just makes sense, one color diminished while the other returns, but for the combustive fire, the two colors, they both burn, It yerns to learn what certain words concern, such an impervious God to decide not to return, The jester shall learn why the King has just stepped down, simply because of his thoughts just beneath his crown,

09-05-2013, 02:15 AM	#2
Matriarch Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 51 Rep Power: 0	This was pretty good. Perfectly blending poetic language with an uncanny "understanding" ^__^ Alias? __________________ "I’m leavin' in ashes when I blaze it, I'm not to be played with Rated R son, PG emcees don't really say shit" - J Treds

09-05-2013, 06:50 PM	#4
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,330 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Fucking slayed this. Good shit Md. Scheme was nice, flowed solid as hell. Content was very introspective, deep, and highly relatebale. Even got some love from the sites psychiatrist, veritas. Well done __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

09-05-2013, 06:55 PM	#5
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,330 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	P.s. Make sure you read and feed other peoples shit to. Forum policy. Thanks __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

09-06-2013, 08:30 PM	#6
MarylandMade Member Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 36 Rep Power: 0	I appreciate all the positive feedback everyone. when I wrote it I didn't think anybody would be able to relate to it, since I barely took any thought in writing it.... I just simply wrote. and dont worry Geno , ive been taking my time to respond to others pieces. thanks! if anyome else wants to give feedback feel free!