12-27-2017, 06:14 AM | #1 |
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12-27-2017, 11:07 AM | #2 |
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12-27-2017, 12:18 PM | #4 |
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12-31-2017, 03:02 PM | #6 |
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u way too gentle to duff me, type feeble n still a whelp
i honestly don't sensei threat from u, go find 1 that'll teach u to kill urself dubbed urself classick huh?, it's radical n seems legit ur screen name bout creative as every unoriginal faggot who thinks of it blam steel or keep it text g?, bang ur gone w/ a smirk get caught up if u mess w/ da strap, the same way ankle monitors work leave u in serious condition, i'm lit as neighbor battles clap the metal to give ur chest a jolt, u'll need some defibrillator paddles otbva won't hustle me none, voters ain't retarded here bump any opinion this fleecer render, plz do both ur fucking garbage tier ur wp's ain't nicer than mine, that amount to no stress cuz u force demonstrate up reach b, enough to rally a thousand protests Last edited by BROKE LESNAR; 01-02-2018 at 04:56 PM. |
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Im here to raise the bar this is ‘pen lifintg’ ,and its quite ‘cursive’ /
Put a SPELL on u , they gon C 2 O’s and a L at the end , cool sound like a nice person / U SWEAR u BLACKIN on which craft? (witchcraft) u must like CURSING / Put ‘pressure on his flow’ , the ‘pipe burstin’ , sun (son) better shed light in this room or its night curtains/ Name yaself after Brock Lesnar ? The fake SHOWS ! im in the scratch the SERIAL off this mac stage/ But This aint BL SERIES , plus how u gon fight Broke n every one a ya 'smack staged' ?/ Im SUITED for war , its in my genes (JEANS) to sneak a (SNEAKER) ‘loaded cal’ thats what I tucks (TUX) in it/ Whoever SLACKS getting aDRESSED with clips, my CLOTH got more layers den a lux gimmick/ I hope C aware ( a wear ) cuz a pair’ll (apparel) KICK from the BLAZER and send CAPS flyin This (k)not a TIE , gats firing ! Nigga I spazz on the REAL like mack myron/ Show me who the best! I can troll (control) champions , cuz when i BLAC it hurts..like how can he (kenny) do this?/ Trust ! It will be trays (betrays) to pop , for thinking fakin' a count(account) I let it FLY on sight/site like Kenny Lewis TIME !! |
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01-04-2018, 06:15 PM | #9 |
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Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 2,151 Battle Record: 7-3 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 11869460 BROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant futureBROKE LESNAR has a brilliant future Default u way too gentle to duff me, type feeble n still a whelp i honestly don't sensei threat from u, go find 1 that'll teach u to kill urself lol @ whelp. Good line here dubbed urself classick huh?, it's radical n seems legit ur screen name bout creative as every unoriginal faggot who thinks of it nah typical weird usuername type punch blam steel or keep it text g?, bang ur gone w/ a smirk get caught up if u mess w/ da strap, the same way ankle monitors work alright cool leave u in serious condition, i'm lit as neighbor battles clap the metal to give ur chest a jolt, u'll need some defibrillator paddles nice otbva won't hustle me none, voters ain't retarded here bump any opinion this fleecer render, plz do both ur fucking garbage tier ehh ur wp's ain't nicer than mine, that amount to no stress cuz u force demonstrate up reach b, enough to rally a thousand protests alright I like I like Broke: stfu and stop with all the wack voting. Anyways This verse was good, I really liked the ankle monitor line. Vs Im here to raise the bar this is ‘pen lifintg’ ,and its quite ‘cursive’ / Put a SPELL on u , they gon C 2 O’s and a L at the end , cool sound like a nice person / not bad, bit wordy though U SWEAR u BLACKIN on which craft? (witchcraft) u must like CURSING / Put ‘pressure on his flow’ , the ‘pipe burstin’ , sun (son) better shed light in this room or its night curtains/ nah man, explaining your wp is a no, ESPECIALLY doing it right after you say it lol Name yaself after Brock Lesnar ? The fake SHOWS ! im in the scratch the SERIAL off this mac stage/ But This aint BL SERIES , plus how u gon fight Broke n every one a ya 'smack staged' ?/ i wanna like this but again this one is wordy like your opener. Decent line but gotta work on simplifying your wording and execution Im SUITED for war , its in my genes (JEANS) to sneak a (SNEAKER) ‘loaded cal’ thats what I tucks (TUX) in it/ Whoever SLACKS getting aDRESSED with clips, my CLOTH got more layers den a lux gimmick/ good bar, only advice here is don’t force wp just to have it. It’s gotta flow smoothly in the punch and let it explain itself[/b] I hope C aware ( a wear ) cuz a pair’ll (apparel) KICK from the BLAZER and send CAPS flyin This (k)not a TIE , gats firing ! Nigga I spazz on the REAL like mack myron/ good again, but the structure is really hurting your impact man Show me who the best! I can troll (control) champions , cuz when i BLAC it hurts..like how can he (kenny) do this?/ Trust ! It will be trays (betrays) to pop , for thinking fakin' a count(account) I let it FLY on sight/site like Kenny Lewis dope concept here but execution and everything else hurt it TIME !! classick: Yo you have mad potential my dude, a lot of your concepts are dope and you have good flow and creativity. You just really need to work on simplifying your bars and developing a better style and structure. Take my feedback into consideration and try formulating your punches in other ways. Decent showing here but broke lesnar gets this. VOTE: Cool |
01-04-2018, 06:56 PM | #10 |
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Classic, that style is hard to read. Word association with forced word association with very vague connections. pick the concept, do a setup and be more direct with ya punch, the creativity doesn’t need forcing. Check out the vets out. If u need to explain your lines that means it’s worded bad.
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Sensai was cool and more consistent Classik just needs to read a few more battles on here |
01-05-2018, 12:37 AM | #12 |
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Broke gets this, wont break it down. sensei and defribillator paddles were standouts.
classick, man you could improve by not trying to associate so many words, choose one and make a fresh flip. 2. smooth your setups and 3. Drop the explanations. vote- broke |
01-05-2018, 02:01 AM | #13 |
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u way too gentle to duff me, type feeble n still a whelp
i honestly don't sensei threat from u, go find 1 that'll teach u to kill urself Played dubbed urself classick huh?, it's radical n seems legit ur screen name bout creative as every unoriginal faggot who thinks of it Ok blam steel or keep it text g?, bang ur gone w/ a smirk get caught up if u mess w/ da strap, the same way ankle monitors work Fire leave u in serious condition, i'm lit as neighbor battles clap the metal to give ur chest a jolt, u'll need some defibrillator paddles Ummm nice otbva won't hustle me none, voters ain't retarded here bump any opinion this fleecer render, plz do both ur fucking garbage tier Dope! ur wp's ain't nicer than mine, that amount to no stress cuz u force demonstrate up reach b, enough to rally a thousand protests Nice Im here to raise the bar this is ‘pen lifintg’ ,and its quite ‘cursive’ / Put a SPELL on u , they gon C 2 O’s and a L at the end , cool sound like a nice person / Cool but to much going on here U SWEAR u BLACKIN on which craft? (witchcraft) u must like CURSING / Put ‘pressure on his flow’ , the ‘pipe burstin’ , sun (son) better shed light in this room or its night curtains/ Ehh Name yaself after Brock Lesnar ? The fake SHOWS ! im in the scratch the SERIAL off this mac stage/ But This aint BL SERIES , plus how u gon fight Broke n every one a ya 'smack staged' ?/ Ur trying to do to much Im SUITED for war , its in my genes (JEANS) to sneak a (SNEAKER) ‘loaded cal’ thats what I tucks (TUX) in it/ Whoever SLACKS getting aDRESSED with clips, my CLOTH got more layers den a lux gimmick/ Same as above I hope C aware ( a wear ) cuz a pair’ll (apparel) KICK from the BLAZER and send CAPS flyin This (k)not a TIE , gats firing ! Nigga I spazz on the REAL like mack myron/ Show me who the best! I can troll (control) champions , cuz when i BLAC it hurts..like how can he (kenny) do this?/ Trust ! It will be trays (betrays) to pop , for thinking fakin' a count(account) I let it FLY on sight/site like Kenny Lewis TIME !! Just gonna leave it there, broke took this with some dope stuff, classik u just gotta tone it down man there's to much going on that it's taking away from the impact. Just clean it up n make it smoother.. that verse was an eyesore there's no need for all the extras..anyway broke got this |
01-05-2018, 09:06 AM | #14 |
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01-05-2018, 05:49 PM | #15 |
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sensai was good didnt like screen name ankle bracelet was dope diggin defibrillator didn't like surrender joint it was weird to me demonstrate was nice vs classick i guess smack staged wasn't feeling ur verse here man/ u need to work on wording cause u got concepts but they don't work the way u do em. v/ broke
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Broke Lesnar -- opener setup sucked but punch was cool. 2nd bar sounds cool but boiled down doesn't really make that much sense -- like you're lame cuz your name is lame, ehh. Ankle Monitors is dope, probably the line of the battle cuz looking down at Classick's jumble of a verse, I don't have high hopes. Paddles line is cool, I like the originality,, but don't you rub em together, not clap? Classick -- just looking at your verse, all this slashes /// and shit like that is really not gonna get you far with this crowd -- if you think about it, it's totally unnecessary and just window dressing. Let your lines speak for themselves. Also, the spelling out your wordplay is weak as well -- the wp should speak for itself, that's what makes it effective wp. If it has to be explained, then it really doesn't work. Honestly, I wasn't really feeling any lines, but I did appreciate your ability to recognize wordplay and rhyme ability. You're just serving up Whoppers at a steakhouse. I think you can take notes and improve greatly though. Vote -- Broke Lesnar
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01-06-2018, 08:49 AM | #17 |
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Broke totally dominated classick. Opener and that defibulator bar were that best imo. Classicks verse looked like a throw back from the 2000's. Its an eye sore. Always had been. Drop the expo's as well. Read around and see what everybody likes. No hate.
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01-06-2018, 10:59 AM | #18 |
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Vote broke because it wasn’t trash ass longbar with parenthetical expos
And it was horrible even without that Do not use that style here It’s not good V/BL |
01-06-2018, 11:02 AM | #19 |
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blam steel or keep it text g?, bang ur gone w/ a smirk
get caught up if u mess w/ da strap, the same way ankle monitors work bang bang
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