04-07-2019, 11:41 AM | #1 |
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so much wow
Constant Rejection'll have you wandering wreckless
I always ponder this necklace No somber intention but why you always talk about exes? Quite the deadly spell, the setting's hell Really know youre in it when you hear them wedding bells Cuz these actors just wanna rob your will and put your head in belts Hung. On. Girly. Im the one who wasnt worthy Guess i gotta just trust the journey even tho im fucking hurting Like all my love is burning Rapid oozing. flamesss, then ash accumulates Upon a vastly moonlit lake, how that passion pudding taste? All these mission hexes got me spinning webs in different sections Had to switch directions Like how much of your self you supposed to give to get respected? Its just pretend shit. Fuck telescopes, her suckerpunch has me seeing stars Wasnt even hard but it's feeding karma Like why they always leave in march? Im ghosted, shit's a downer When you think they have your back But use it like a knife-holder on the kitchen counter Change cool but i hope you morph into you Because all of the other portals just blew up Of course youre a screw up, i think its normal to do such Now its planet: high.. My face gone off haze Sit & fantasize of you in white laced lingerie 10 months left - remember - crosses @ 33 Shits just planned for me Land of the FREE More like Notsee Germany Axe thru bullshit shackle forrest The wack's enormous Died so many times theres a casket shortage Fuck the could be betters; pussy shredder - no cat abortion Benetration. Demonstrate for mental slaves Whoops, pen behave - all sacred zen to center stage Reminiscent when i use to kick it at crystal lake, penning with j's on Hold up pal theres so much wow in the glow dust pile Touch is way soft cuts thru chaos The so surreal dopamine launch, love that takes off [Insert intelligent quote] Welcome to where skeletons float Hell is a joke When the blind dont know theyre blind one must develop a scope From the inside, yo you feel the SUN when Ben writes Ben's soul deepens Pencils? Creamy. Mental? Dreamy Keep the vessel breathing And the temple green Everything is that special reason No more gheppeto strings Worn spirit with sheer attempts, the way the tears condense is still weird to ben Always remember to venture to inner mirror to cleanse Yes, ive witnessed every miracle sent, thats crashed upon the spherical lense, all while smashing a couple beers with my friends I got what you need, huh? Drippin constant Pouch get wetter than capri sun when i stick the straw in Oh cool mr big bad wolf made some blow move Til he tried to chop a brick And got caught by pigs So you.
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really dug these two parts overall enjoyed the piece, having trouble remembering everyone's body of works beyond their style/ writers voice. can see how your writing has matured. I would say the tone throughout is consistent and rich, it lets you stream of conscious more than most people while staying cohesive. very multi-faceted but still pointed cool shit, keep writing
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