03-23-2019, 12:13 AM | #1 |
obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,716
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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indigo
lachrymation and silence
my most cherished possession. holstered like a primary weapon baseline until i count to 7, quiet like a library session four five six. these moments just help you evolve which adds truth to my theory that pain is a necessary involvement in life and in fiction, typecast me as your typical loner sedentary absolving finding peace as a cynical joker time caught in a stone. i'd propose if you let it i could grab you a minute, if you'd hold me a second slowly regressing into a caterpillar hold me. then clench me. visit my calloused winters (don't) let me go- grab my spring and it's passive whispers don't catch my depression. but, do catch my kisses even if it's something to feel run to the hills. rip out this chapter & section tourniquet heal. veins indigo, black, and magenta dab in scented oil to mask the repentance cloaking valid potential into the aridest deserts ignoring red flags was only half of the question half the equation, double the time, a third of the lesson do clipped wings still make birds as majestic? hardly. do my inklings slipped under your door make you regret it? still hear your laugh interlaced in absentia if a tree falls in a forest you burn does it matter no more does the sound it make get engulfed in the roars? séto masochist, full of control atom poems in my notepad stayed so reactive drunk cursive shooting out my pen like the borealis digitalis in the garden. ketel 1 in my ale procrastinating out ending, i couldn't have been better prepared zero plotwists keep character progression derailed fighting uphill battles with no wind in my sails i promise you i meant what i said even if half of it was muttered on the other side of the bed I'm waiting alone. plagued by a catch-22 you sang me song, but sang it in blue win, lose or draw. paint pictures of this varying muse recapturing colors that i barely knew |
03-23-2019, 01:59 AM | #2 |
Razor-thin derision
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,422
Battle Record: 40-25
Accomplishments - OM HOF
Champed - Fight Night LIV
- Gimmick Battle League (2x)
- Write Week II
- Art of Writing League
- Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament
- STI
- Haiku Writer Challenge
- GWL Picture Challenge(2x)
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This was well-crafted. A draught of a drink you feel passionate about and wanted to bring to light, perhaps? The content evoked a lot of thoughts about where you classify yourself in a relationship, your potential for fulfilling mental support or obligations with your partner? The color of emotions. Sentimental wavelengths.
Looks like you spent some time molding and shaping this. |
03-27-2019, 01:10 AM | #3 |
Banned
Join Date: Aug 2014
Posts: 2,962
Battle Record: 6 - 14
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Umm. You're talented but all your pieces sound the same?
And I think you know it. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 03-27-2019 at 01:12 AM. |
03-30-2019, 01:46 PM | #4 |
obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,716
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
Rep Power: 8599678 |
shut it stoop
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04-04-2019, 01:45 PM | #5 |
living
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 3,465
Battle Record: 33-18
Accomplishments - Hall of Fame
Champed - AOWL Season 1
- Art of Writing League
- AOWL Season 4
- Write Week V
- GWL Season 1
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loved it
be back soon
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04-07-2019, 11:47 AM | #6 |
nok Su kow
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Borealis was a dank visual.
Very felt. Relatable. The catch22sang it in blue was lovely. Thanks.
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04-08-2019, 05:36 AM | #7 | |
¯\_(ツ)_/¯
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i couldn't really piece the parts together, but it was written pretty. very lyrical throughout, but in a way that is different than i'm used to with your writing. more purposeful dissonance i don't post but i still read :)
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