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Exis · 04-01-2019, 06:39 AM

As my speech contorts,
The words echo with force
That'll make you lose all knee support
Burnin' a dub to ease my thoughts,
Let's see how a lodge gets bought down without Eddie Gordo
In a ski resort
I'll enforce budget slashes in your vocational colleges
& steal the bed out your dorm son
I'll cut your career short & nothin' to fall your ass back on
Your wack as fuck,
Poke & blind your stares
Fuck the looks my nigga when I'm left with intertwinin' glares
Insides explode,
When I open up Netcees stomach & leave a mine in there
Watch all of you fuckers lie back like a reclinin' chair
& fuck the jokers,
That say in a sentence I can't place bitches in comas
Snitches it's over,
I'll connect your breathin' system around your feet
& watch you pant around your ankles like you is playin' strip poker
Mince you suckers up when you reachin' for daps,
Then after that
I'll change the channel to A for the hungry & bridge the gap around your scraps
You should drown in the facts,
Your status has dropped off the ladder
Meanwhile wantin' the gold that I've managed to capture
Stuff Mitsubishi Ecstacy pills down your throat & let
You suffocate in a trip from the rapture
Gash off both ankles,
Leave a foot as a bookmark
So your a step behind my next chapter
I've already done snatched the belt 'cause you couldn't hold it
Let me stuff your brain with scripts so you know your fuckin' role bitch
Tear a phony & fold this,
Mutherfucker I'll provoke & tease bars
Lay your bitch ass on the pavement & make you breathe tar
I was a vet from the beginnin',
You just a rookie from the start
Silver's sweet on the inside like cookies & tarts
After readin' her poetry
Your like her,
Just a pussy @ heart
Your so basic,
My text is sumthin' I can tarnish & banish your brains with
I'll now vanish your confidence like shoulder pops from tackles
Your career will only stay on it's feet if your rockin' in shackles
I'll drop whatever stems from your mouth like kids bobbin' for apples.

Debut MC · 04-03-2019, 01:11 PM

This was solid. The flow at times was smooth however at times it appears choppy due to extended lines.

I'll now vanish your confidence like shoulder pops from tackles
Your career will only stay on it's feet if your rockin' in shackles
I'll drop whatever stems from your mouth like kids bobbin' for apples.

cool way to end the drop.

Watch all of you fuckers lie back like a reclinin' chair
& fuck the jokers,
That say in a sentence I can't place bitches in comas
Snitches it's over

Definitely feel the swag on this flex piece. overall the setback if the flow like I said is choppy at times. However, depending how you would flow this piece could make me change that view. Keep Writing Fam.

Exis · 04-11-2019, 04:50 AM

Appreciate the looks bro, thank you...

04-01-2019, 06:39 AM	#1
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Yo... As my speech contorts, The words echo with force That'll make you lose all knee support Burnin' a dub to ease my thoughts, Let's see how a lodge gets bought down without Eddie Gordo In a ski resort I'll enforce budget slashes in your vocational colleges & steal the bed out your dorm son I'll cut your career short & nothin' to fall your ass back on Your wack as fuck, Poke & blind your stares Fuck the looks my nigga when I'm left with intertwinin' glares Insides explode, When I open up Netcees stomach & leave a mine in there Watch all of you fuckers lie back like a reclinin' chair & fuck the jokers, That say in a sentence I can't place bitches in comas Snitches it's over, I'll connect your breathin' system around your feet & watch you pant around your ankles like you is playin' strip poker Mince you suckers up when you reachin' for daps, Then after that I'll change the channel to A for the hungry & bridge the gap around your scraps You should drown in the facts, Your status has dropped off the ladder Meanwhile wantin' the gold that I've managed to capture Stuff Mitsubishi Ecstacy pills down your throat & let You suffocate in a trip from the rapture Gash off both ankles, Leave a foot as a bookmark So your a step behind my next chapter I've already done snatched the belt 'cause you couldn't hold it Let me stuff your brain with scripts so you know your fuckin' role bitch Tear a phony & fold this, Mutherfucker I'll provoke & tease bars Lay your bitch ass on the pavement & make you breathe tar I was a vet from the beginnin', You just a rookie from the start Silver's sweet on the inside like cookies & tarts After readin' her poetry Your like her, Just a pussy @ heart Your so basic, My text is sumthin' I can tarnish & banish your brains with I'll now vanish your confidence like shoulder pops from tackles Your career will only stay on it's feet if your rockin' in shackles I'll drop whatever stems from your mouth like kids bobbin' for apples.

04-03-2019, 01:11 PM	#2
Debut MC It Is I, Debut M.C. Join Date: Mar 2019 Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	This was solid. The flow at times was smooth however at times it appears choppy due to extended lines. I'll now vanish your confidence like shoulder pops from tackles Your career will only stay on it's feet if your rockin' in shackles I'll drop whatever stems from your mouth like kids bobbin' for apples. cool way to end the drop. Watch all of you fuckers lie back like a reclinin' chair & fuck the jokers, That say in a sentence I can't place bitches in comas Snitches it's over Definitely feel the swag on this flex piece. overall the setback if the flow like I said is choppy at times. However, depending how you would flow this piece could make me change that view. Keep Writing Fam. __________________ *DEBUT M.C.*

04-11-2019, 04:50 AM	#3
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Appreciate the looks bro, thank you...