10-08-2016, 04:44 PM | #1 |
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Battle Arena Tournament - Aww Shit vs Blanco Bishop
Verse 1
You're a Fish out of Water, Ya not catching any W's cuz ya Lines are Snagged Kid Tear'll Flow when my punches Land and Make ya leave the site Faster than Bags Did Such a has Been.. Ya Never Expected to be First, we'll call you a Second Thought When we Read ya Text, it's a waste of a Thread.. I cant say we've Suspected ur Plot! I'll Fly Straight with my Verse while you just deliver a Hymn - It's Clear ya Gone Gay.. So I'll bring the Heater n Make ya feel the Worse when I Rob ya faster than Kim and Kanye What else can this Con Say? We know you're a Liar, dude.. You can Chill with the Front Admire You? No, but I'll visit cuz after this L you'll have to enter Rehab to Heal for a Month Technically Speaking, It's time to Shut ya Down - ya Flow is broken and We've Noticed It Taxed and Leaking, Trumped.. Cuz i'll go IRS and write his Verse off before he's Posted His Verse 2 squeezin the gauge when I rush ur block and see your squad in a pack soon as I turn the corner ur team taking a loss..that's a Von Miller sack don't bring that shiny shit 'round me son, you'll get killed in seconds clipz'll leave u leanin like the Tower of Pisa when I rob u like Kim in Paris u never tasted glory in war; never did anything valiant prick but this knife'll lay ur guts out on the floor like u tryin to win a championship I got plenty women; just bagged ur slut n smothered her w/ dick that lifestyle? u never Livid so u mad as fuck ur girl was another on my list u best respect my gangsta cuz I got guys that'll do u for bud n some smokes so if u ever utter Effigy my young goons will burn u alive in front of ur folks |
10-08-2016, 04:49 PM | #2 |
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10-08-2016, 11:49 PM | #3 |
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You're a Fish out of Water, Ya not catching any W's cuz ya Lines are Snagged Kid
Tear'll Flow when my punches Land and Make ya leave the site Faster than Bags Did ok punch / set up was trash though Such a has Been.. Ya Never Expected to be First, we'll call you a Second Thought When we Read ya Text, it's a waste of a Thread.. I cant say we've Suspected ur Plot! nah light here and concept was just soft I'll Fly Straight with my Verse while you just deliver a Hymn - It's Clear ya Gone Gay.. So I'll bring the Heater n Make ya feel the Worse when I Rob ya faster than Kim and Kanye eh set up was irrelevant and kanye didnt get robbed? What else can this Con Say? We know you're a Liar, dude.. You can Chill with the Front Admire You? No, but I'll visit cuz after this L you'll have to enter Rehab to Heal for a Month nah miss Technically Speaking, It's time to Shut ya Down - ya Flow is broken and We've Noticed It Taxed and Leaking, Trumped.. Cuz i'll go IRS and write his Verse off before he's Posted His didnt like this. felt flat vs squeezin the gauge when I rush ur block and see your squad in a pack soon as I turn the corner ur team taking a loss..that's a Von Miller sack cool set up, decent punch don't bring that shiny shit 'round me son, you'll get killed in seconds clipz'll leave u leanin like the Tower of Pisa when I rob u like Kim in Paris nah, set up was trash u never tasted glory in war; never did anything valiant prick but this knife'll lay ur guts out on the floor like u tryin to win a championship eh i mean i guess it was ok but set up was trash I got plenty women; just bagged ur slut n smothered her w/ dick that lifestyle? u never Livid so u mad as fuck ur girl was another on my list eh decent flip, kinda soft u best respect my gangsta cuz I got guys that'll do u for bud n some smokes so if u ever utter Effigy my young goons will burn u alive in front of ur folks nah didnt like this soft battle here to be completely honest here i was only feeling the sack line here so verse 2 gets my vote
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10-09-2016, 08:11 AM | #4 |
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This was bad. Verse 1 had no punches and the wording was just atrocious. Verse two was more of a conventional verse but with bad punches. Pour ur guts in the floor like u trying to win a championship? Like people do that after winning, no? Just an example of the badness here
V verse 2
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10-09-2016, 08:21 AM | #5 |
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Aye i also wasnt eeally feeling this battle... both verses felt bland and very statementish... maybe that had to do with not knowing who your opponent was but fuck this was just an awful battle... geez i dont even know how to pick who im going to vote for.. just wasnt feelkng either verse.. but i guess if i had to choose im going to go with verse 2 for at least having sum attenpts and like nikka said first verse was worded very badly and just didnt really take effect in any case...
Vote: verse2
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10-09-2016, 11:23 AM | #6 |
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Verse 1
Had a verse full of pretty obvious concepts like literally every line. Suspected plot i guess was decent Verse 2 Honestly that von miller sack line was dope to me. Kim k shit wasmt good the closer had potential Vote verse 2 |
10-10-2016, 09:15 AM | #7 |
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1 - didn't like anything here
2 - von Miller line was cool, effigy cool as well Verse 2
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10-10-2016, 12:44 PM | #8 |
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10-10-2016, 01:12 PM | #9 |
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Gotta go w/ Verse 2, even tho it's "run-of-the-mill" w/o any strong bars, the opponent's verse 1 had no punches, literally.
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10-10-2016, 08:41 PM | #10 |
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First and foremost, good that you guys showed up. Verse 1 trump wasnt bad, you gotta work on the wording a bit.
You have the multis down, but overwording your lines make the concepts simple or not, not hit and come off as statements. Jus gotta work on being a bit more crisp and concise. That will add some sting/surprise back into ur verse. Verse 2 was a bit more polished, where you were able to take better angles on your concepts. Vonn Miller wasnt bad, i would say just tighten up the wording a bit v/ Verse 2 |
10-10-2016, 11:18 PM | #11 |
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verse two was better though wasn't feeling much from either
verse two had the opener tho v/2 |
10-11-2016, 01:41 AM | #12 |
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verse one was alright, I thought the suspected your plot line was cool
the Trump line could have been worded better..otherwise an alright verse. the 2nd verse had a few decent concepts, that opener being the strong point of this battle didnt really like the way this was pieced together, didnt like that Kim line seems like the go to punch this week... Ima have to go with the 2nd verse with that opener. wasnt really feeling the impact of these verses but the 2nd edged it out for me
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