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Old 07-09-2017, 09:21 AM   #1
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suburbia chime, zirconia vertebrae. pearly white spine
glass thrown in stone houses, regular suburbia night
whirring, rewind. chronicled childhood in olive drab paint
monocle glass. wormwood and bottles of shawshank.
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with ammunition in their lips, that keep you off guard
feel the metacarpal love letters til your fingers fall off
once you step out the door, you hear the wooden creak in the floor
fell asleep at the creek daydreaming before
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I'm so close to being the opposite of perfect, i scream
what emerges, a bird sits perched in a tree
what alerts him is
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 07-09-2017, 10:52 AM   #2
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Old 07-09-2017, 10:10 PM   #3
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I enjoyed this a lot more than your other piece. I do feel like you are trying to emulate Deadman, but that is cool, deadman's style is dope. AT any rate, you captured the existential loneliness and boredom which our society pushes as success. So....good job buddy!
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Old 07-22-2017, 09:42 PM   #4
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3st.

Didnt get it but enjoyed reading it. The ghost and REM/sheep lines were great. Witty throughout. Cool call back with zihuatenejo to the shawshank mention a few lines before. Rhymes and technique top tier throughout. Good stuff.

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Old 07-26-2017, 07:41 PM   #5
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Old 08-01-2017, 01:02 AM   #6
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This reminds me of someone but I cant think of who...




Either way this was very impressive in its length.
its not very easy fitting all these ideas in one line.
but you make it work with the way you form each word
it might be because Im high but I caught on to the flow quick.
the way you do shit like this

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dope shit btw..

that shit is just crazy though, & then you pick it up
drop it on its head and go a different route with it is slick
hard to do for most but with you it just appears so easy.
dope work right here breh
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