WEEK 4: Eviction 0-0 VS FGR 0-0 FGR WINS

UPN Zuch · 10-24-2020, 11:29 AM

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FGR · 10-24-2020, 11:55 AM

Going ten

Eviction · 10-24-2020, 12:46 PM

check

Eviction · 10-29-2020, 06:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by FGR

Death to all RIGHT RIGHT.

Quote:

Originally Posted by FGR

I apologize guys...I won't be able to write tonight.... Works been nuts but I have off all day tomorrow...if u can give me till Saturday midnight I can write something... If not no problems ... But there's no way I can get it to u now

I’ll pull up in your yard and tear down your signs while you hide in your corner
But your so fuckin left you don’t need to advertise that your a biden supporter.
You bringing death to all is a plot hole, your only victims are the same amateurs.
You're like ghostface in the scream movies, you're never killing the main characters.
You know what happens when you get bodied fucker? You stay at the first level.
If you show up to battles, you still get the graveyard, worse than ur work schedule.
Fuck your excuses, when I no show I’m leaving a son like when ur father stepped out.
We can compare your verses to the year 2020, except they’ve been a larger let down.
You must be spamming nudes, because of all the pussy that I see when you post.
Want your 2nd amendment taken away? I’ll give u an example why you need it the most.
@FGR

FGR · 10-30-2020, 11:36 PM

Fgr will break every bone in your body. Twist ya spine till it bends
Leave you in a full white cast like the actors on FRIENDS
Jab, jab, punch... Fuck spitting a rhyme
My punches putting a stop to eviction like paying rent on time
After the first hit.. You won't be able to handle another
punches leaving you owen won like wins from bret harts brother
I'm heavy with the hits.. while he's barely considered sick
Not only is he soft as fuck but Eva bitch like that mendez chick
The glock is loaded bitch... so Would you just die please
Before I'm forced to pop E faster that clubs in the late 90s

evaD · 10-31-2020, 04:03 AM

Both verses were consistent but a lot of the concepts seemed a bit too basic ‘you’re more of a let down than 2020’ etc. Wording is there but just need a bit more creativity imo. Hard to call but I’ll go with lotb which was all white cast

Vote - FGR

Destroyer · 10-31-2020, 09:37 AM

FGR got this nicely
concepts just a bit more higher level
Eviction concepts are there. Tighten up your wording and make it harsher

V/FGR

Victor. · 10-31-2020, 12:47 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eviction

I’ll pull up in your yard and tear down your signs while you hide in your corner
But your so fuckin left you don’t need to advertise that your a biden supporter.
huh? what do u mean here by being left aside from the political angle? getting left like knocked out? this is too vague bro. why did u even decide to go politcal at all i have no clue
You bringing death to all is a plot hole, your only victims are the same amateurs.
You're like ghostface in the scream movies, you're never killing the main characters.
hmm I like what u tried to do, but u didnt set it up right, this could have been nice points for creativity and thinking out the box
You know what happens when you get bodied fucker? You stay at the first level.
If you show up to battles, you still get the graveyard, worse than ur work schedule.
thats fire, u should have put the quote right above this and opened the verse with it. could of worked great bro
Fuck your excuses, when I no show I’m leaving a son like when ur father stepped out.
We can compare your verses to the year 2020, except they’ve been a larger let down.
nah man this is so boring
You must be spamming nudes, because of all the pussy that I see when you post.
Want your 2nd amendment taken away? I’ll give u an example why you need it the most.
wtf r u talking about srsly

@FGR

Quote:

Originally Posted by FGR

Fgr will break every bone in your body. Twist ya spine till it bends
Leave you in a full white cast like the actors on FRIENDS
ok
Jab, jab, punch... Fuck spitting a rhyme
My punches putting a stop to eviction like paying rent on time
you gotta do more with these ideas
After the first hit.. You won't be able to handle another
punches leaving you owen won like wins from bret harts brother
lol ok
I'm heavy with the hits.. while he's barely considered sick
Not only is he soft as fuck but Eva bitch like that mendez chick
eh
The glock is loaded bitch... so Would you just die please
Before I'm forced to pop E faster that clubs in the late 90s
no

FGR i love your style when it works. when it dont it falls super flat. i would try to do one complicated punch a week if i was u. just a small amount of diversity in the verse would do u wonders

evic dont ever waste time dissing a sig. that was a low brow move and rarely works. kudos on trying to work up ammo on him but when u gamble on a angle and it misses it can really bring the crickets out. his sig isnt political its a cage reference. keep at it tho I saw some potential in there

vote fgr

Wanderer · 10-31-2020, 01:24 PM

Eviction

Ghostface was creative.
Graveyard was nice to me too

FGR

Full white cast cool
Owen won decent

I’ve got FGR on consistency but this is def closer than people are saying .

Eviction could be dope

Vote FGR

iSpaz · 10-31-2020, 02:15 PM

v/ FGR. the full white cast bar was cool, others were light but still a decent verse. eviction had some good ideas, some bad ideas, execution was off.

Scout · 10-31-2020, 07:17 PM

Eviction

You know what happens when you get bodied fucker? You stay at the first level.
If you show up to battles, you still get the graveyard, worse than ur work schedule

FGR

Fgr will break every bone in your body. Twist ya spine till it bends
Leave you in a full white cast like the actors on FRIENDS
Lotb^

Fgr didn't have any more, but he had lotb and a few that didn't hit were better attempts

Voting FGR

Adverse · 11-01-2020, 12:52 PM

Eviction has a concept of it, but needs some stronger concepts, more personal shit and just better wording because honestly Ghostface and graveyard were pretty okay. Read some of the veteran battles and take some notes fam.

Fgr had some decent stuff as well Friends was okay and end eviction was okay but I feel like you went Uber basic and didn’t do much with concepts because you felt like you had it in the bag. Good bars

V/FGR

10-24-2020, 11:55 AM	#2
FGR AHHHHHHH Join Date: May 2013 Location: Philadelphia Posts: 558 Battle Record: 16-17 Rep Power: 8596595	Going ten __________________ . ..death to all RIGHT RIGHT!!

10-30-2020, 11:36 PM	#5
FGR AHHHHHHH Join Date: May 2013 Location: Philadelphia Posts: 558 Battle Record: 16-17 Rep Power: 8596595	Fgr will break every bone in your body. Twist ya spine till it bends Leave you in a full white cast like the actors on FRIENDS Jab, jab, punch... Fuck spitting a rhyme My punches putting a stop to eviction like paying rent on time After the first hit.. You won't be able to handle another punches leaving you owen won like wins from bret harts brother I'm heavy with the hits.. while he's barely considered sick Not only is he soft as fuck but Eva bitch like that mendez chick The glock is loaded bitch... so Would you just die please Before I'm forced to pop E faster that clubs in the late 90s __________________ . ..death to all RIGHT RIGHT!!

10-31-2020, 04:03 AM	#6
evaD Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 697 Battle Record: 19-10 Champed - BA Show And Prove - Summer Classic XI Rep Power: 4156644	Both verses were consistent but a lot of the concepts seemed a bit too basic ‘you’re more of a let down than 2020’ etc. Wording is there but just need a bit more creativity imo. Hard to call but I’ll go with lotb which was all white cast Vote - FGR __________________

10-31-2020, 02:15 PM	#10
iSpaz Gang shit on my brain Join Date: May 2015 Posts: 265 Battle Record: 10-11 Rep Power: 161231	v/ FGR. the full white cast bar was cool, others were light but still a decent verse. eviction had some good ideas, some bad ideas, execution was off. __________________ But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God, Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw

10-24-2020, 12:46 PM	#3
Eviction Detained Join Date: Oct 2020 Posts: 1,838 Battle Record: 16-11 Rep Power: 0	check

10-31-2020, 01:24 PM	#9
Wanderer Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: England Posts: 587 Battle Record: 24-33 Champed - NPL Roast Rep Power: 7457538	Eviction Ghostface was creative. Graveyard was nice to me too FGR Full white cast cool Owen won decent I’ve got FGR on consistency but this is def closer than people are saying . Eviction could be dope Vote FGR

10-31-2020, 07:17 PM	#11
Scout Jeice! Who's that? Join Date: Oct 2020 Posts: 293 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 1230369	Eviction You know what happens when you get bodied fucker? You stay at the first level. If you show up to battles, you still get the graveyard, worse than ur work schedule FGR Fgr will break every bone in your body. Twist ya spine till it bends Leave you in a full white cast like the actors on FRIENDS Lotb^ Fgr didn't have any more, but he had lotb and a few that didn't hit were better attempts Voting FGR

11-01-2020, 12:52 PM	#12
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,739 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446142	Eviction has a concept of it, but needs some stronger concepts, more personal shit and just better wording because honestly Ghostface and graveyard were pretty okay. Read some of the veteran battles and take some notes fam. Fgr had some decent stuff as well Friends was okay and end eviction was okay but I feel like you went Uber basic and didn’t do much with concepts because you felt like you had it in the bag. Good bars V/FGR