a lil Freestyle

Dope girl · 08-14-2013, 07:00 PM

Delicious girl is back,
Came to slaughter this track.
Can't compete against me.... I'm hot I spit hotter than fireballs.
I'm confidence so when you say I'm the greatest its a compliment.
I'm a Queen....respect that & don't start no beef.
These cats wanna be like me,
can't be like me cause I'm a 'g'.
mess with me, I'll destroy you soft people.

Albert Rhymestein · 08-14-2013, 09:50 PM

I spit hotter than fireballs.. r u srs?

Certain · 08-15-2013, 06:12 AM

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Delicious girl is back,
Came to slaughter this track.
Can't compete against me.... I'm hot I spit hotter than fireballs.

The way you dropped the rhyme for a second was, in fact, hotter than fireballs. Fireballs are very hot, so that's a strong metaphor.

Quote:

I'm confidence so when you say I'm the greatest its a compliment.

I like that you said you are confidence, not confident. You are the quality of self pride itself. Everyone needs you. That's a strong image.

Quote:

I'm a Queen....respect that & don't start no beef.
These cats wanna be like me,
can't be like me cause I'm a 'g'.

Your assonance was rattling in this section. You're a Queen and a 'g.' That's a potent combination.

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mess with me, I'll destroy you soft people.

And then you spit fire with the final line, threatening with serious menace. This line had the feeling of a titan staring down from the heavens.

Albert Rhymestein · 08-15-2013, 01:29 PM

lmao this^ is what gives her the confidence to be twerking and shit

Dope girl · 08-15-2013, 01:41 PM

Its just a free spit and thanks for the feedback

Dope girl · 08-15-2013, 01:42 PM

Just a free spit and thanks for the feeback

StarFaggot · 10-03-2013, 03:38 PM

@Allen Knight

Mr. J · 10-03-2013, 03:50 PM

Using a Jadakiss line eh?

Dope girl · 10-03-2013, 09:14 PM

TRYING TO CREATE MY OWN STYLE

08-14-2013, 07:00 PM	#1
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,706 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	a lil Freestyle Delicious girl is back, Came to slaughter this track. Can't compete against me.... I'm hot I spit hotter than fireballs. I'm confidence so when you say I'm the greatest its a compliment. I'm a Queen....respect that & don't start no beef. These cats wanna be like me, can't be like me cause I'm a 'g'. mess with me, I'll destroy you soft people.

10-03-2013, 03:38 PM	#7
StarFaggot Leave you flatlined. Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 5,110 Battle Record: 12-9 Champed - Site Diss 2013 - Tag Team Tournament III Rep Power: 0	@Allen Knight __________________ [B][CENTER][SIZE="5"] It's Aero join me at RAPBATTLES[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]

10-03-2013, 03:50 PM	#8
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,025 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	Using a Jadakiss line eh? __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

08-14-2013, 09:50 PM	#2
Albert Rhymestein no games. Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 190 Rep Power: 33	I spit hotter than fireballs.. r u srs?

08-15-2013, 01:29 PM	#4
Albert Rhymestein no games. Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 190 Rep Power: 33	lmao this^ is what gives her the confidence to be twerking and shit

08-15-2013, 01:41 PM	#5
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,706 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Its just a free spit and thanks for the feedback

08-15-2013, 01:42 PM	#6
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,706 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Just a free spit and thanks for the feeback

10-03-2013, 09:14 PM	#9
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,706 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	TRYING TO CREATE MY OWN STYLE