Netcees  

Go Back   Netcees > Netcees - Leagues & Tournaments > Summer Classic: A Topical Thing

User Tag List

Reply
 
Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 08-18-2019, 03:03 AM   #1
Adonis
Tsk Tsk
 
Adonis's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Location: Beer Goggles
Posts: 4,769
Battle Record: 36-34


Champed
- Lime Green Poetry Association
- NFL Pick'em 2016-17

Rep Power: 9946432
Adonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant future
Default Championship: Witty vs. Diablo [WITTY WINS 6-0]







SUMMARY OF RULES:

Verses are due
FRIDAY AUG 23rd at 11:59P.M. Pacific/West Coast or SATURDAY AUG. 24th 2:59 AM Eastern / 7:59 AM SATURDAT AUG. 24th Central European/London

Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 64 LINES




Read the full rules here!



Topic:




Must "Check-in" by MONDAY AUG. 5th


@Diablo
@Witty


G/Luck
__________________
I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is

TUPAC SHAKUR

Last edited by Adonis; 08-24-2019 at 12:57 PM.
Adonis is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-23-2019, 08:53 PM   #2
Raptor
Lime Life
 
Raptor's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 15,938
Battle Record: 30-39


Champed
- Lyric Olympics

Rep Power: 85899397
Raptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond reputeRaptor has a reputation beyond repute
Default

The pain she receives is a pain that she needs
Paints a smile on her face but the rage that's beneath
Leads to disarray when she lays in the sheets
And prays for relief from the chemicals in her veins
She's dazed and fatigued, and skeptical things will change
When night falls these white walls seem to glow in the dark
She can't sleep, she knows in her heart she's been broken apart
As she lays there a mess...tired, sweating and bloated
And opens at the page she had carefully folded...

...And she enters the portal...

Now she's immense and immortal, strong and emboldened
The hair that falls from her shoulders is long and it's golden
She stands tall, she can't fall...a leader of people
She is a home for the homeless, a seat for the feeble
A beacon of peace where so many are deceitful and evil
She speaks for the weak...
...searches for the lost and leads the retrieval
Her fight is in the shadows as she searches for sunshine
Despite the looming gallows she's the first on the front line
To rid it of evil, every victory has her bursting with pride
She's filling her people with the thirst to survive...

...but she's thirsty, alive? you could consider her so
But if your question was...is she living? then, no
And her frivolous hope for life is killing her soul
She's holding on...but it's ready and it's willing to go
Her husband lays by her side when he's not with the kids
All the years together...
...she had forgotten how caring and thoughtful he is
Why she had fallen for him, though in the end she took him for granted
But back then...it was like God had them joined at the roots
Their souls were the shoots he had dutifully planted
They traveled the world, came back and started a brood
They had beautifully planned it...and it came to fruition
Each day was a vision of grace, but now as she prays for remission
She regrets not making the most of the days she was given
She tries to stare at his face, but she's too broken to look
And the pain is too much to take...so she opens her book.

And she's fighting hate from day to night
Her mind ablaze with rays of light
Her movement fast and razor like
She moves her hand to raise her knife
Her belief is iron, so's her will
Hope instilled with each demon's life her soldiers kill
She won't succumb to the shadow
Love is her weapon...she has an abundance of ammo
And as the pages flick, her glory increases
We're almost at the end of this story...

She needs this.

She can't let it end, she craves the relief
Of the pages...
...The only way she can escape from the grief
And the aches and the pains of this heinous disease
So she'll wait just to see...
If she can make it through another day of chemo...
Then maybe she can read how the Queen had slayed the evil...
She gazes at her book...always dreading the day it is done
Because that portal to another world is the only thing making her stay in this one.
__________________
He listens to voices inside of his mind
Explicit and poisonous violent crime.


Last edited by Raptor; 08-23-2019 at 09:01 PM.
Raptor is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-24-2019, 03:06 AM   #3
Diablo
Badgerdick
 
Diablo's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2015
Location: Showdown City
Posts: 1,700
Battle Record: 4-2



Rep Power: 21884801
Diablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant futureDiablo has a brilliant future
Default

”His-Story Repeats”



There once was a man of creative genius with rhymes
but who couldn’t have acted more of a diva online!
He competed in writing contests against the elitists
beating them by his sheer will, and occasional cheating.
His swaying in secret would often hand him the edge
but today was to be his toughest challenger yet.
A spectacular semi-showdown of paradoxical rivals
where two valiant veterans vied for a spot in the final!
Both wanted the title, but what mattered now was respect
and the honour of finally being crowned as the best.
Losing was out of the question with the battle finally open
he proudly professed his greatness to antagonise his opponent.
The braggart blithely then boasted of self-centred indulgence
in an act to try and provoke his foe into an error of judgement.
The clever curmudgeon created an air of discord
while also tempting its subject into sharing his thoughts.
Aware that the author played chess, if to dismal degrees,
his carefully thought-out plan had a Bobby Fischer brilliancy!
The player positioned the pieces to fall into place
his opposition was merely a pawn to his game.
The board that they played on was no longer even
which forced the mistake exposing his weakness.
From the moment he eagerly jumped in and posted
the opponent was beaten, he just didn’t know it!
The troublesome troll instantly dipped in his bag of tricks
and put into motion one of his famed fictional narratives.
The tittering tattersmith sent messages privately to
the simpleton that was in charge, who took his lies as the truth!
He invited the fury of his foe to further respond
while timing his spurious comments to keep spurring him on.
He worked at it long into the night, through to light of the morning,
as the merciful moderator looked into both sides of the story.
Enlightened but surely unimpressed at the tantrum observed
the mod tried not to glorify eithers actions at first.
Reading chapter and verse of the rule book to placate the dispute
as you don’t take a man at his word who has a way with them too!
The prevaricator pursued his prey with ruthless intent
anticipating his move while remaining a few steps ahead.
The beauty of chess lies in the strategical thinking.
His huge walls of text loomed large enough to be seen at a distance
but were easily missed in the blind rage his novice was faced with
and not seeing his signature move lead to disqualification!
The troll had him taken in every which way
but the mod had been blamed for exhibiting feminine traits.
Now two men that he hated most were caught in conjuncture
both incandescent with rage, and best of all at each other!
Neither saw through his cover til he revealed what had happened
nor the tall stories mustered up to help keep them distracted.
The tedious tactician did as his detractors dared him to do
If you stare deep in an abyss too long, it also stares into you.
There is a truth to the story behind his bluff and his bluster,
Beware who you choose to cheat. Never judge a book by its cover.




LULZ MOTHERFUCKER!!!!
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by dull boy View Post
I've never paid for vagina. Wouldn't enjoy it. I'd end up wanting to ask them about their lives and shit.

Last edited by Diablo; 08-24-2019 at 03:25 AM.
Diablo is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-24-2019, 09:51 PM   #4
Sinacog
Senior Member
 
Sinacog's Avatar
 
Join Date: Dec 2018
Posts: 432
Battle Record: 0-6



Rep Power: 8870345
Sinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant futureSinacog has a brilliant future
Default

Witty -

Very good writing here; very good writing. I truly enjoyed your writing; it was very interesting with a girl falling into a story and defeating a antagonist. It was very inspiring; it was very good. It was very nice; it was very cool. Excellent writing, Witty. Good imagery, and good writing. Very well done.

Lars -

I truly enjoyed your writing talent; I enjoyed this writing immensely. Great narration with good spot on analysis. Great work on this piece. Good work, Baron Mynd. Good work.

Overall - Excellent battle, but I'm going with Witty.

V/ Witty.
__________________
Sinacog is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-25-2019, 01:26 AM   #5
UnbornBuddha
Senior Member
 
UnbornBuddha's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2014
Posts: 1,003
Battle Record: 23-10


Champed
- Art of Writing League
- AOWL Season 5

Rep Power: 23856361
UnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant futureUnbornBuddha has a brilliant future
Default

To be honest, I'm sort of disappointed, I will explain.

Witty: I liked your verse it was emotional, it was simple. You tend to write with simplicity, but always with a smoothness that lures you in due to how free it feels. I especially like the theme of love, but faced with the antagonistic villain of cancer that threatens to make it short-lived. And the only thing that is propelling this person is the imaginative realm and her will to immerse herself in it, as she fights for her life in the physical and tangible realm. It was touching, I would have liked maybe more exploration of this imaginative place, the only real time you touch on it is when she enters the portal, where she becomes this strong hero of sorts. I feel you could have expanded here and made a good story even greater by extending our imaginations. But nevertheless, I enjoyed it.

Diablo: While the writing was somewhat enjoyable, this was not what I expected. I think aiming the topic toward a previous opponent while it seems clever, it comes off as uninspired. I feel like you if you dedicated your efforts into crafting a vision that I know you are capable of, you would have created something with a compelling draw. Yes, it was entertaining and humorous to an extent, but the finals are not the time to pull a stunt like this. You basically did what your semi-finals opponent did, but to a much greater extent (as he still focused on a narrative), but you kind just myopically focused on him, which leaves a bad taste in the mouth as good sportsmanship is part of the topical appeal, maybe not during the chat or forum, but the final match is more sacred. Its not a time to troll about trolling, seems like you you tried to put a spin on it but it backfired. Perhaps if you faced a less formidable opponent it would have worked, as your writing would have carried you, but in this case, it doesn't.

Vote: Witty
UnbornBuddha is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-25-2019, 09:24 AM   #6
NYCSPITZ
SYRACUSE
 
NYCSPITZ's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 3,544
Battle Record: 31-33


Champed
- Write Night II
- Alias Topical Tournament

Rep Power: 6215122
NYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant future
Default

I felt this was alright maybe for a round 1 or 2 battle but this ... For you two this felt rushed. Trust i would've slain either of these verses so youre lucky Adonis dqed me since I was coming with heat.

Lars LOL depicts himself cheating in The last round. I thought it was pretty funny tbh read it twice for Lulz. Didn't really connect to the topic at all until the last 4 lines. Discord mention and incandescent with rage shade was funny. The sad thing is, Adonis is so dumb he
He'll think it's a parody verse, not knowing it's 95% real inn you're eyes that you cheated like a lying lil girl and provoked general discussion due to knowing you lost even with dr votes and adonis' retarded vote. I preferred your mix of disparate fairy tales although i didn't prefer that.

Witty at least connected to the story with a chemo patient escaping into her book fantasies. Tbh I much preferred your verse against blue it had a lot more nuance and beautiful writing. My fav section of the verse was the first time she enters the portal to escape via a book. The rhymes were dope as per usual but a certain focus and depth was missing compared to a great verse from witty like round 3.

V/ witty, not close
__________________
UNIFIED THEORY

Last edited by NYCSPITZ; 08-25-2019 at 09:27 AM.
NYCSPITZ is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-25-2019, 10:12 AM   #7
Adonis
Tsk Tsk
 
Adonis's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Location: Beer Goggles
Posts: 4,769
Battle Record: 36-34


Champed
- Lime Green Poetry Association
- NFL Pick'em 2016-17

Rep Power: 9946432
Adonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant future
Default

1-0 witty as it stands

"Select, delete all" is much faster than you can create spam posts. Enjoy wasting your own time. Took me 2 minutes

Next infraction will be ban however
__________________
I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is

TUPAC SHAKUR

Last edited by Adonis; 08-26-2019 at 08:43 PM.
Adonis is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-29-2019, 02:10 PM   #8
symetrik
Senior Member
 
Join Date: Sep 2013
Posts: 291
Battle Record: 2-4



Rep Power: 4308415
symetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant futuresymetrik has a brilliant future
Default

Low key not here but if you want another vote...

Witty - Good verse, lost tempo a few times but no biggy. I like flow and topic, so your topic kept me engaged. Good transitions, especially because it inspired emotions and good feels.

Diablo - you and I both know how this is gonna go, but good lord man you and I both also know what you're capable of. it's great that you're king of trolls or whatever, but in the finals? pop another title under your belt then troll around imo, don't silver platter this shit.

mvgt Witty

also @Adonis tag me if another topical thing comes up? sorry I ignored last few pings :)
symetrik is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 08-29-2019, 09:52 PM   #9
Pharaohs Army
senior writer
 
Pharaohs Army's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2014
Posts: 1,515
Battle Record: 0-5



Rep Power: 13466172
Pharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant futurePharaohs Army has a brilliant future
Default

Witty:

Tbh I think I liked a couple of your pieces earlier in the tournament a little better than this one. Not to say this wasn't good; but when I finished reading it I didn't feel like I had gotten your best.
The verses kept me engaged, to see where it was gonna go. And I think you did a good job describing her grief and pain. I thought you might have expounded on the part where you said she took her husband for granted, because that seemed like a powerful line.
Good rhymes for the most part. Bit repetitive when you said thirst to survive/ thirsty, alive?. But through most of the piece I have no other complaints. I liked day of chemo/ slay the evil.
Easy to tell that you used the picture given.

Lars:

Your rhyming and meter are, per usual, on point. But immediately upon discovering the subject matter I hate to say it: I just wanted to get to the end.
There were a million different ways you could go with this picture, and a creative Lars verse likely would have taken the title. But that's not how I view what you did. I saw no relation to the picture, other then you ending on never judge a book by it's cover.
I think you should have left the semifinals in the past. But it's as though you chose this forum to rub it in. Not a great idea for a finals verse. Sorry bud, his verse was definitely beatable but Witty takes this one.

V Witty
__________________
the strap go 'click' and I ain't talkin' bout a seat belt
Pharaohs Army is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-02-2019, 08:51 AM   #10
Flow
Upset Champion
 
Flow's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: West Mids
Posts: 3,591
Battle Record: 53-47

Accomplishments
- 50 Wins

Champed
- BA Rookie Tourney
- 1-2 Punch League (x2)

Rep Power: 26211828
Flow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant futureFlow has a brilliant future
Default

not voting due to the politics of it all but i really appreciated the reads guys an kudos on a good showing in the finals. hope you guys get some more votes/feedback.

stand outs

witty loved all the parts in italic, how it sped up an really added a sense of pace an purpose - although the last one juttered at the end for me at the abundance of ammo line. threw the flow off a bit for me.

baron
being a total cheeky twat
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by El Muffin View Post
Jay Welsh took your lunch money
Quote:
Originally Posted by Jabari Black View Post
Flow....that punch was disgusting. Mvgt Flow
Flow is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-06-2019, 07:37 PM   #11
PancakeBrah
PancakeBrah
 
PancakeBrah's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 12,831
Battle Record: 2-4


Champed
- AOWL Season 2

Rep Power: 85899391
PancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond reputePancakeBrah has a reputation beyond repute
Default

Witty-

This gained steam the further it went on. It was a smooth read throughout, though. The rhyme scheme stayed consistent. A few hiccups in wording and pace here and there, for me. The approach to the topic was straightforward but well executed. The passages when your protaganist is reading could have been more colorful, written in a different style to contrast the moods you're setting up in each scene. Your word choice changed in each, but I think a more exuberant expression could have gone a long way here. Maybe more stream of consciousness, to express the freedom and escapism your character is feeling. Character portrait is my preferred style of NETCEES TOPICAL; I think you did it justice here. I think the regret/mournfulness your character feels about her husband would have been better set up if he was mentioned in the first stanza(?), somewhere in the 'lays in the sheets' or 'glows in the dark' areas. As it is now, it kind of goes from a completely internal, existential struggle with a book for escapism to something with a familial bent. Not that one is better than the other, but I think it kind of has the effect of adding extra drama a bit too late in the game. I enjoyed reading this, if I'm coming off too negative. I think it's easier to be critical in these votes.

"Leads to disarray when she lays in the sheets
And prays for relief from the chemicals in her veins
She's dazed and fatigued, and skeptical things will change
When night falls these white walls seem to glow in the dark"

"She's filling her people with the thirst to survive...

...but she's thirsty, alive? you could consider her so
But if your question was...is she living? then, no"

Those were my highlights. Also, the ending line was really well done.

I didn't like "bloated" (didn't feel like the right word for the scene, felt force-y), "frivolous" before hope felt off because it seems like a narrator's judgment whereas the rest of the piece stays to her perspective, and the "demon's life" line tripped up my read something fierce but I'm an idiot so who knows.

Lars-

Pretty funny stuff. A creative take on the topic, using your persona and current "events" to further troll while submitting a solid piece. As per usual with you the rhymes and flow were pretty spot on and consistent throughout. Maybe one too many ironic exclamation points? I chuckled at a couple points and found it generally amusing throughout. The only problem being the repetitive nature of the piece. As an extended joke to continually thumb your nose at everyone involved it passed in spades. Purely as a topical it was something like 10% (maybe 12.4%) too long for the gimmick, in my opinion.

"Aware that the author played chess, if to dismal degrees,"

"His huge walls of text loomed large enough to be seen at a distance"

"The troll had him taken in every which way
but the mod had been blamed for exhibiting feminine traits."

The use of 'blithely' was way incorrect, unless I'm missing something, and the slight overuse of ironic exclamation points got grating. My only two technical nitpicks.




Character study vs. troll-y comedic piece. Both writers were equal in terms of rhyming and "MECHANICS"; maybe I'd give Witty the slight edge for trying some different schemes and using punctuation for emphasis and reading assistance, which I always enjoy. Content wise, just a matter of preference. Seeing's how I'm an overly emotional alcoholic I enjoyed the melodramatic character study (shocking) a bit more than Lars' comedy (which I enjoyed). So if you bifurcate TOPICAL WRITING into 1) MECHANICS and 2) CONTENT like a real simple idiot from a flyover state, and you give each CATEGORY to one writer, then the logic goes you vote for that person. Lars' verse and victory over NYC was victory lap enough for him, hopefully. Now I will bold my vote (I'm voting for Witty) so that it is quite clear who I am voting for (Witty).

Thanks for writing for the championship match, guys.
__________________
I am an Immolate alias.

That is a good joke.



I only post in Geno topics.
PancakeBrah is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-11-2019, 05:47 PM   #12
RAPTOR..
Administrator
 
RAPTOR..'s Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Posts: 8,908
Battle Record: 16-37


Champed
- Lime Green Poetry Association
- Black August

Rep Power: 85899383
RAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond reputeRAPTOR.. has a reputation beyond repute
Default

@Adonis?
RAPTOR.. is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-11-2019, 08:06 PM   #13
Adonis
Tsk Tsk
 
Adonis's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2013
Location: Beer Goggles
Posts: 4,769
Battle Record: 36-34


Champed
- Lime Green Poetry Association
- NFL Pick'em 2016-17

Rep Power: 9946432
Adonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant futureAdonis has a brilliant future
Default

My fault for being MIA, crazy busy at work, literally been sleeping 6 hours a day then back at it the next day. About to finish the job site I been out for the past few months though. I'll try and vote today and see where we stand.
__________________
I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is

TUPAC SHAKUR
Adonis is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-11-2019, 09:19 PM   #14
Blue Bayou
Senior Member
 
Blue Bayou's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2013
Posts: 2,195
Battle Record: 29-15

Accomplishments
- Hall of Fame

Champed
- NBL Season 3
- Alias Tournament II
- Fight Night XLVIII
- Fight Night XXV
- Fight Night XV
- Fight Night XIII
- Fight Night XII
- Netcees Battle League (3x)
- NBL Tag Team Season 3
- Lyric Olympics
- Battle Arena League (2x)
- Fight Night 13
- 1-2 Punch League (2x)
- Key Grand Prix 2018 1/2
- BA Tag

Rep Power: 7109479
Blue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant futureBlue Bayou has a brilliant future
Default

Vote - Raptor
__________________
Quote:
Dominate Blue has sealed his status as GOAT in my eyes. Like how tf do you write that much and keep that level of quality at the same time? There was barely a miss in that 100 line verse, and plenty of haymakers. Just insane. And he’s been this good for over a decade across multiple sites and styles. No one else is touching that
Blue Bayou is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-11-2019, 09:27 PM   #15
Raptor.
(ง'̀-'́)ง
 
Raptor.'s Avatar
 
Join Date: Nov 2015
Posts: 14,059
Battle Record: 51-23

Accomplishments
-50+ wins

Champed
-Summer Classic VIII
-Netcees Battle League
-BA Picture
-BA TagTeam
-Fight Night Cypher I
-Fight Night XXXV
-Key Grand Prix 2018 1/2

Rep Power: 83584978
Raptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant future
Default

Wow this retard adonis won’t just close it? It’s 6-0 witty you can paint it any way you want it ain’t chopping down to a place where your favorite faggot can come back bro

You guys couldn’t fake his way to a tourney win it’s not that big a deal take the L
__________________
The BrainLords
Raptor. is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-12-2019, 12:45 AM   #16
sraL
PRESIDENT LARS
 
sraL's Avatar
 
Join Date: Aug 2014
Location: CRUMPETVILLE
Posts: 6,990
Battle Record: 16-1


Champed
- Gimmick Battle League
- The Winter Topical
- Topical Martyrs
- Lime Green Poetry Association
- Lyric Olympics
- Art of Writing League

Rep Power: 85899374
sraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond reputesraL has a reputation beyond repute
Default

lmao there were no winners in this corrupt little swayfest you lames orchestrated for your boy NYC.

let’s be real

you cheated me
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by Just C View Post
I can't lie though man you got a nice looking dick. threat of hands rescinded.
sraL is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-12-2019, 01:42 AM   #17
Raptor.
(ง'̀-'́)ง
 
Raptor.'s Avatar
 
Join Date: Nov 2015
Posts: 14,059
Battle Record: 51-23

Accomplishments
-50+ wins

Champed
-Summer Classic VIII
-Netcees Battle League
-BA Picture
-BA TagTeam
-Fight Night Cypher I
-Fight Night XXXV
-Key Grand Prix 2018 1/2

Rep Power: 83584978
Raptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant futureRaptor. has a brilliant future
Default

Cry baby lol

Irritable Ian is a sad sack
__________________
The BrainLords
Raptor. is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-12-2019, 02:00 PM   #18
Eŋg
rhyme capsule.
 
Eŋg's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2018
Posts: 1,799




Rep Power: 0
Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg Eŋg
Default

i highly doubt anyone voting itt rode as hard (or at all) for NYC as adonis rode for you like a desperate jockey. throughout the tourney.

shit was a mess from the get go.

v/daryl
Eŋg is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-12-2019, 05:04 PM   #19
NYCSPITZ
SYRACUSE
 
NYCSPITZ's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 3,544
Battle Record: 31-33


Champed
- Write Night II
- Alias Topical Tournament

Rep Power: 6215122
NYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant futureNYCSPITZ has a brilliant future
Default

Quote:
Originally Posted by sraL View Post
lmao there were no winners in this corrupt little swayfest you lames orchestrated for your boy NYC.

let’s be real

you cheated me
Let's be honest here. First i beat u ez light were.

Second this verse here by u is a slight lol moment for one or two reads. Beyond that it's embarrassing to write at that low level for a tourney finals. I'm truly the winner In This tournament i wanted it more than you and had the better verse but in terms of this battle witty clearly won...stop crying...
__________________
UNIFIED THEORY
NYCSPITZ is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 09-12-2019, 06:28 PM   #20
Mr. J
The Clown Prince
 
Mr. J's Avatar
 
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 4,838
Battle Record: 32-40


Champed
- Art of Writing League

Rep Power: 57181784
Mr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant futureMr. J has a brilliant future
Default

damn this lil thing is still open.

Smh
__________________
.....laugh....and the world laughs with you
Mr. J is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply

Tags
lars is fart tier

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 07:21 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2019, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
User Alert System provided by Advanced User Tagging (Lite) - vBulletin Mods & Addons Copyright © 2019 DragonByte Technologies Ltd.
Google+