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Old 02-25-2018, 01:44 PM   #1
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starin thru the smallest scope i can almost spot a neuron float
even wen im sure I wont, its the thought that keeps me pure in hope
In a lab full of protons n quarks, payin for a wife to shop for bo-tox n shorts
I hung wit morons n dorks, there was no tuition I culd go on for sports
ive perfected the art of splittin atoms, im so viscous at em..
I just pick n drag em, write the labels then I stick n tag em
the applause is great when u reveal secrets in our smallest shape
even a small mistake, will likely set u back for however long it takes
I even use a hubble to view the stars, the colors they carry is the same hue as ours
somethin I culd do for hours, imaginin somethin on that tiny spec culd make superman lose his powers
my goal is to compare n contrast, strip it down to equations til the only thing barin is facts
thereins the task, developin formulas to pose questions noone is darin to ask
I spend nights n days lost in daze locked inside a vault of subatomic cosmic rays
the small part that logic plays, tells me my own life is partin ways
so when I finally get a day to watch my kids just play, somethin amazin happened to me
I could spend 1000 years searchin high and low but it culd never match this beauty

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Old 03-02-2018, 02:32 AM   #3
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Molten membrane mixes amidst those missing logic.
twisted concepts of whats gifted, minds of gifted nonsense.
lifted off its axis & spun differently, makes one sick & nauseous
we are different, all this same level bull shit is obnoxious.
pick the toothpick, the topic truth spit & another victim, novice.
an eviction notice, clipped & posted with some quick emotions.
vindictive notions follow but now all that exists is devotion.
bow brother, beg forgiveness before the abyss your thrown in...
a gift, an omen, trickery flavored hickory in the pit I glow in.
roasted on a bed of coals in pure ecstasy, lets get this rolling.
rotisserie imagery over half baked schemes better than most.
cause backfire & spark interest now these pigs better to roast
the essence of folks is to pray they blessed, ending the toast.
whoever is left over, put em in a box & start sending em home.
the praise jealousy owes only compares to the following equation
only problem is no matter the pride no one can bottle the statement
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my atoms make word flesh flesh to word yes
your first S birthdeath is the first step... in physics ..x2


pass the pillar of light hunt the killers of night
villians of spite get the kid killed in a kite
vision in 5d pockets is 5g 2 hands plus 3 bands
excuse me... immortal wave portal foreplay before im immoral
goro aura raise the shiv shakti
carl jr turned zombie hamburger hockey
toils and trials tributes mission to gaia pitch different and higher
dipped in godiva and diamond caviar this iron i pump
aint for natty arms come at you like a million jihadi
pitbulls and rotties pimples and pottys fistfull wishful diwali
light festive dark element my polyhedral spark split the breeze apart
part the seas of ceasers heart seasons start tear the trees apart
a gnosis stretching perception myths enter the wrecking pit
endless equation emperor a cheap dinner date with a senator
each pattern equals saturn in space
adam kadmon with louie bags of fresh cabin fever and waste
eating raisins and dates everything equals mic controller twice
e=mc2 righhht ..in space

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Old 03-02-2018, 08:28 AM   #5
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As I revise the system, the fight begins.
Is science, fiction? A lie for business?
Just biased physicists desperate in verifying physics.
Denying miracles with tiny fibs for my existence.
The minor instance of a pilot’s wings on a flying widget,
gliding in thin air, with their height and width precisely fitted
to the finest inch for flight of distance
A design from visionaries who vied for difference?
And us, refusing to abide religions, is what Einstein envisaged!
What exactly have the great minds encrypted?
Maybe alien life had visited and supplied Egyptians,
with the hieroglyphics and whilst in their primed condition!?!
Just maybe, deciphering what they had scribed and written.
Perhaps to find significant evidence, might just clarify existence!
So defy the difference between yours and my opinion
Because on a “science” binge, for us, the sky's the limit!

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Armed with an integer, its all perpendicular
decapitate you half ass decimals to miniatures
Slice you with the finisher, demonstrate the fourth power
Let me just divide you into pieces with a sword shower
Whore plower, tower, i am Arnold, the denominator
Give your leg a compound fraction, multiply it later
Got a fuckin problem player? fix it with the formula
Searchin for the nearest whole hooker just to warm my nuts
Has it gotten warm enough? Calculate the temperature
Its T-minus 22 degrees standing next to her
Undressin' her, sex with her, actin like a little hoe
E = Textcee squared, like she didnt know
Its all mathematical, so how can you be mad at us
Adding up the bullets that ive sprayed on my abacus
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Old 03-03-2018, 10:30 PM   #7
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quantum eqations, radiation causing cranium penetration
within a simulation in operation by a nation of spacemen
futurism, allusive visions sublime aligns the fabric of time
fine tuned neurons fire off thoughts, electrostatic to prime
mesmerized truly, energized fully, tracing a maze of trails
you can rely on this scientist telling tales by ways of scales
measure a piece of reality, in tech we trust guess we must
split atoms to infinite parts, find eternity in specks of dust
blind or divine design, the cosmos can't confine our minds
collapsing any time, I'll reside where the void is left behind
sweet serenity, nonbeing enitities endlessly locked in silence
swift ascension beyond the fifth dimension by rocket science
zero sum game tactics played since, nothing is exactly sacred
any conclusion is weightless, back to basics - hack the matrix
observe the pink elephant, is it reality or just a sedative?
correlation positive or negative, in the end it's all relative
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3. Gen nicks third place wit E=textcee squared LOL
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mr j - first half was dope. i get the vibe of basically just some thoughts structured pretty decent.. u flexed with multisyllables. the ending lacked due to the exact subject not rlly bein clear just left some things uncertain when u had me hooked n wantin to read more.

brokenhalo - hella better than last wk. thats kinda dope to see u improve that much in a wk tbh. this was more of a swag n flow piece then anything but in that aspect it was nice. try tellin a story next time im interested n seein how u do.

MMLP - best one so far. murdered the topic and in an elegant manner. good read

gen - this wulda been great as a swag n flow piece bro. seems to be the trend this week lol

concrete - this was dope. structure wise best ive read this week. flowed smoothly and u nailed the topic.


its hard to pick between MMLP n concrete. the rest were good but they come off as either flexin or swag n flo ish. as far as a topical goes it comes down to mmlp n concrete. both did equally good describin the subject as well as capturin the reader. concretes rhyme scheme n structure actually makes his piece seem more polished tho and ima vote based on that.

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Everybody did their thing but for me it comes down to:

1. MMLP - Crisp flow and general playfulness with the topic.
2. Mr. J - Pretty sharp bar for bar, nice verse overall.
3. Nick James - Your use of rhymes came in place naturally here.
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Okay so I've omitted NJ because he's dipped from the site...

Mr J's seemed like a keystyle of sorts to the topic again hand, enjoyed the alliteration right at the start, flow and scheme was cool from a technical standpoint, the various tie-ins throughout were cool but seemed to read more train-of-thought than having a direct, clear, direction in mind and with some of the other guys choosing to go that route it made there's seem more polished and complete. Jays keys and quickness get largely overlooked though, I rate that ability.

Brokenhal0 did his usual thing of losing the reader in what he was talking about, it's always that connection with the reader that lets him down, I don't know if he knows how to get his point across with clarity or make his verses relateable to the audience but it's a recurring problem for him in so much as the verses read like he just writes some quick-ish to please himself and while that's a good thing in some instances, to win one of these you have to at least have the readers feel what you're saying and appreciate it be that the original idea, the technical merit to the writing, the writers voice speaking to them... There has to be SOMETHING and he rarely has that quality to his writing. He won't win one of these until he can connect with the audience in some way.

MMLP: You did your thing here, mixed it up well between relevant content and technical skill, it lacked a little clarity where you seemed to focus so strictly on the scheme and adhering to it but otherwise this was the best take on the topic so far. Again, quite direct at the subject matter, not as out-the-box creativity wise as we have seen from you but I enjoyed "Is science, fiction?". Good job.

Geno: While I see what you did in relation to the topic here, and it was the most original so far of these for me, something felt like it was missing. You know? It's like the verse didn't know what it wanted to be this week, at times it was braggadocio-esque and I felt that because of my battle background but doing that in a topical format is always a risk. Still, it's a risk i think paid off because you had the most creative entry so far.


Concrete came out of left field with this and had one of the best verses. I'm not really a fan of -tion rhymes being carried over so I was glad to see you switched it up. This flows well, technical skill was cool as well as a neat little verse directed to the topic. This and MMLP's were the better from a technical standpoint, the two head and shoulders above the rest of the competition this week. Genos was the more creative verse. Tough one to call but I'd probably have it as Geno in third, Concrete a close second and MMLP just edging it from a technical standpoint because I enjoyed the skill in carrying over the same multi string throughout. There's not a lot between them though.
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Mmlp wins this with 2 votes.

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