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11-06-2023, 02:58 AM
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White Earl
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All growed up now
Hard to describe
Everything ive seen and survived I'm 42 now.. and I can't believe im alive Never had the sort of parents from a normal arrangement I'm a fuckin loser now, and that formulas basic Cause my alcoholic Father's either drunk or hes stoned Got my ass whooped with every single belt buckle he owned Punishing blows, made me feel fuckin disowned Anger built up in my soul Hatred just wants to explode Raising my brother myself Deaf but he saw everything He elevated early, i miss him He's read I've been spittin But he will never hear the words if he listens And that hurts from a different, sort of personal image We suffer from several sorts of burdens, with differences Now my family is more insignificant Since I've grown up -good riddance It's been a miserable 6 or so years I've witnessed more fears manifest And the tears that I've wept over death Over your headstone I've kept So that nobody knows that I've let go Its death over dishonor, click-clack, so let's go be honorable Never have you ever known me to be bluffing I've blown the stuffing out of every single thing that I've touched And sent My love with a bullet and fragments of brains Scattered across the unbalanced terrain And I've showered in pain more than my share of times It's paralyzed me to the world that im in I wanna come with you, and let's be reborn again I'm sort of a mess, and I'm finished enduring the wreck A little unorthodox flow wise.. you'll catch on, or you wont. Fuck
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11-08-2023, 07:38 PM
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it'll be alright geno
your bro is proud of you this was excellent. raw and honest and well written. "Over your headstone I've kept So that nobody knows that I've let go" "sent My love with a bullet and fragments of brains Scattered across the unbalanced terrain And I've showered in pain more than my share of times It's paralyzed me to the world that im in I wanna come with you, and let's be reborn again" yeeeeeeeee. classic. be well, keep your head up guy. it will be ok.
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11-15-2023, 04:34 AM
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White Earl
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All Love 'Gawdian'
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11-22-2023, 10:52 PM
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Ye, I felt this too. Dead Man nailed it. Good shit, Geno
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01-02-2024, 06:17 PM
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heartful.
im glad you didnt filter it heavily through the process of tryna rhyme syllables & fitting a certain structure etc - which while maybe be technically proficient (id argue that), but ultimately actually compromises the art...or heart, whichever you feel. Quote:
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anyway, love. head up, & heart open. |
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