06-12-2018, 10:31 PM | #1 |
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This is the.. Story of kid moving through life trying to find His purpose all the set backs and mistakes make Him question is it all worth it. Pen’n verses trying to find out what His problem is it all started when it was time to move out His mommas crib.. Overprotective mother always kept a hand on His short leash so it was no surprise when He was swallowed up by the streets. On His own, in His own apartment with no direction Sufferin’ from depression & emotional regression. Never learned to vent His emotions properly as a kid kept them bottled up until they exploded up out the lid blackout with the anger He won’t remember a thing He did. He was in a relationship with who He thought was gon be the one had plans of marriage and eventually having a son that went out the window when she said that she’s finally done. She went to the bar with some friends and she found someone. He was working overnights so she went out a couple times flirted with the new guy, eventually said goodbye. He was making promises and He never seemed to keep it To busy chasing a high tryna hide His drug habit secret. He got caught up at a bad time and gave into the devils wishes now He’s in the trenches behind on rent and facing eviction On top of losing His job and His girl so close to Christmas. Moved in with His homie when He was kicked out of His apartment that’s when the real problems started, that’s when shit got real retarded He was doing drugs so often that He avoided contact. Family and friends reached out but He was in isolation hiding from the world and all His problems He ain’t wanna face em. Only time He came outside when it was time to re-up or to the food pantry to collect His free stuff like twice a month. But all that came to end when they couldn’t keep the apartment eviction notice posted again He started to feel like a target. Angry at God and blaming him for making His life a hell at this time He didn’t care if He wound up dead or in jail. Moved out of town and down south to live with His father but His demons followed and He layed in bed feeling hollow. Screaming inside an empty house pretending that she could hear him. Staying up for days at a time hallucinating quite often having conversations with His shadow but nobody talkin. Almost a year goes by of this cycle turned Him into a psycho. One day He woke up from crashing out for about 12 hours overcome with determination to change His outcome. He was tired of living the life that He’s been livin wanted to make a difference and for once make a good decision... Pt. 2 coming soon.. soon as I finish it.
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07-03-2018, 01:33 AM | #2 |
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Only time He came outside when it was time to re-up or to the food pantry to collect His free stuff
I liked that rhyme This is okay man, but it gets a little repetitive with the guy and his problems. Any reason why you capitalized all the He and Hims? You have pretty good meter with your syllables. But you need to do a lil' better on the subject matter to capture your readers. |
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