06-03-2018, 02:24 PM | #1 |
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bleed
latte whiskey & water. watch
me limp to the slaughterhouse, cynical diatribe for the principled pauper. i live in decisions indecisive as autumn, follow my lead. drink my cyanide. cures for coexisting too often. simple and plain as jim and jane. duality my daily condition. as in it kills me when you speak but i am happy to listen make a wish. penny glisten fountain cupid in marble the toxicity molecule, best viewed from afar. loved from a distance, play Icarus, immolate in an instant our living space often imitated a prison. what to be said when i recount it often sounds like we ended in a blaze of glory, more like clouds of regret powder precious, our obsessions, hours spent in ecstasy mouthy magic, sour patches, sweet sensation, sexually cold beverage, 30 proof refreshment. slip into buzz here to separate innate behaviors / symptoms of us via journaling verses i've never written enough our litmus, what post-relationship we didn't adjust call me on the phone. let a message reply it's never fucking speak again but never goodbye there's pressure to reinvent what we severed in time pleasure in bleeding you dry. promise the pleasure is mine dm
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06-03-2018, 02:54 PM | #2 |
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how many times can you say things differently but kinda the same? you need to talk about pythagorean theorems and then tell people you're belching a murder. that's what you're lacking. everything great, but we get it. you're sad. nobody cares about your expressionism and the creative ways you divert the complexity of human emotion you weirdo lol. next time how about you write cool things like combustion engines or how you're happy... or hoe a combustion engine can make ou happy... u can will itself out of depression, sadness, nostalgia, and angst if you were just not such a creative writer giving us a million angles of depth from your creation... ugh but tremendous either way. love you and hate u fag
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Fragile. As expected. Mission accomplished.
Thanks for the read deadman. Both I and your stem cell enjoyed it.
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the last 10 lines of this flowed better than the beginning, I think. the rhyme schemes are easier to see.
you've got alcoholic beverages and women again, but hey, it was a nice read. |
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Pretty much sums it up
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Big baby nailed it. Expand your horizons my guy. Experience the influence of other muses. All love.
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Wow nice man
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rhyme capsule.
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well those are 2 big topics in life, so it's understandable i suppose.
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@Eŋg may be some truth to that but it's whatever. it's a song i've heard many times.
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06-09-2018, 07:30 PM | #15 |
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- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
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oh yeah @veritas i like dm i was making fun of someone else, but i also respect your opinion; but i have 2 say nobody cares if a painter makes a living off of only self portraits. repetitive, but always different nonetheless. gl in life ily
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- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
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i don talk 2 stranger lol
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most definitely. i was just thinking about that actually, listening to michael pollen on JRE. he starts talking about that about an hour in i think but the whole thing is mad interesting
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It saddens me that you call me stranger old friend.
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