04-11-2018, 05:06 PM | #1 |
obsessed
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- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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maturing
it's up for existential debate. whether or nots
we're here for a reason, or stranded here just to rot leisurely lonesomes, sunrise kingdom unfolding delicate flower, nuclei destined forever in forest do or die sentiments. sediment ready to rise blood pact suicide, toes in the sand in the tide were only in focus when we start to succeed congratulations/shaking hands to hands shaking in sleep panic attack, borderline personality disorder solace in silence. everyday a soldier is dying PTSD from maturing too fast. i've been told to collide with my demons. flashback, detachment paranoia. decide what do with yourself, paranormal dishevelment clash encounter to delusion like an asteroid belt entering earth, atmospheric phenomena avoided like hell poised to no end, with no end to foretell such a pity. holy shit. shame we all have stories to tell 100 ears. nobody listens. pouring whiskey in wells swirl it in the glass, little tornado cyclone, perhaps we tell it with such hope, rehearsed, to speak it with ease oh how we change for others -sleep with our demons for free beelzebub pedigree. honeybee to a wasp fur elise. Elysium waits with alyssum in her palm this suggests to me, what i've known all along kiss of death, pain is strength, literally everyy song diet plan. exercise, what's your secret to looking your best? don't eat for days, ha-ha. pause. i said it in jest capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen cataclysmic mushroom smoke. cultured difference aside there's more to living, so to speak, than living to die unambiguous chameleon, dressed in camo fatigue in his pavilion, that the big wolf blows at til he can barely breathe grow in a melting pot, petri dish human experiment give him truancies, periods of time where truth is empirical hold me a second. let's grow apart, don't second guess it stare at me like a tornado looks at tulsa and edmond then |
04-12-2018, 02:15 AM | #2 |
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stare at me was nice,
in rhymes out in connection was tight good alround piece.. "nuclei" nice ----- stride/strive ins/ide sleep d-ee-mona succeed congratulations/shaking hands to hands shaking in sleep pretty impressive keep it up..
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04-12-2018, 01:19 PM | #3 |
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say one more thing u bootleg robranda ONE MORE THING
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04-17-2018, 09:45 AM | #4 |
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kiss of death, pain is strength, literally everyy song
diet plan. exercise, what's your secret to looking your best? don't eat for days, ha-ha. pause. i said it in jest capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen Lol...Dope. |
04-17-2018, 11:59 AM | #5 |
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I liked this.
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04-20-2018, 08:15 PM | #6 |
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Very good writing here
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04-21-2018, 01:39 AM | #7 | |
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Tight work.
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04-26-2018, 07:02 PM | #8 |
death warmed over
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Roight this wasnt going anywhere you didnt actually make sense of anything..... you need to focus more on what your trying to write instead of trying to impress people like you could rhyme... or have sumn interesting to say which you presented i guess but i didnt get half of it... try coming back to reality whats actually happening in the story but whatever your just a twerp your not actually doing anything different to anyone else reading the story like people reading aint actually writing the story its ypur decision your just writing it....
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05-20-2018, 05:55 PM | #9 |
rhyme capsule.
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those first 8 lines are kind of brilliant. i didn't enjoy the rest as much, because you set me, as a reader, up for a sheer drop, but that's one way of being victim to your own success. alyssum in her palms was pretty.
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05-21-2018, 07:44 PM | #10 |
obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,716
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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i enjoy eng feed, most of the time. these are one of those times. i apologize for not living up to a standard i set. i'll definitely revisit this comment later and not be so selfish in my laziness. toodles
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05-21-2018, 07:44 PM | #11 |
obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,716
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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nonsarcasm
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06-09-2018, 09:03 AM | #13 |
obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,716
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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idk
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Enjoyable. Thank you.
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06-09-2018, 03:37 PM | #15 |
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Dope
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06-13-2018, 12:03 AM | #16 |
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I’ve admittedly went and lurked on some of your past pieces because your style is interesting to me and I can’t figure it out, there’s a select few other boarders who’s writing style intrigues me as well. Anyways, I really wish I could hear this instead of reading it because I can never catch a flow, or maybe there isn’t one? Idk but I enjoy your content a lot
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06-16-2018, 07:07 PM | #17 |
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"don't eat for days, ha-ha. pause. i said it in jest
capricorn, libra, maelstrom pathogen, fetal position battle ballistic, garrison mission. administer oil in my cannabis christen cataclysmic mushroom smoke. cultured difference aside there's more to living, so to speak, than living to die " insane,,,,, |
06-19-2018, 08:21 PM | #18 |
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oh how we charge?(change) for others- sleep with our demons for free?
or is the change there intentional? |
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actually this is good writing, i wish i was dope as baby |
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