Week 3: Scar vs Adverse

[Diablo]

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@Scar
@Adverse

[symetrik]

in case either show



if Aero was a bird

click. one unheard message. press 1 to play. beep.

dear Abby,
last week, while working at my desk job, I heard an unfamiliar sound.
it was Tuesday, so that's odd - usually, my owner is still out of town.
Then, I heard the domicile's door open and swivelled my head quickly around,
but not so quickly as to let my curiosity be found out.

it turned out to be my owner's boyfriend. I chirped a "Thank god",
he was probably here to check if I was getting too hot.
it's a sweltering summer, Abby, but here's where it gets odd...
the next person that walked through the door was dressed like a cop.

and I don't mean was a cop, I truly mean "dressed like",
hat with a badge, black leather bra... it was a strangely sexual sight.
I immediately shut my beak and turned my head, but I confess, I...
had to keep peeking to confirm that he was fully... pressed inside, to put it politely.

there was a distressing sigh on the voice machine

I haven't told my owner yet, but she's been back for three days.
I know I should, but I guess I'm also kinda miffed at the fact that I'm still locked in a cage.
maybe I should be friendly to her boyfriend... or at least, learn his name...
cuz hanging out with him might be the only chance I have at getting laid.

inconsolable sobbing

[Diablo]

@Scar

[Scar]

“Goodbye blue sky”

Too many times involved
Too many rhymes I’ve sprawled
I’m sick of all of this
The rocks the sticks
The fall the blisters
The autumn visage
And darker image
Pretending to fall just to catch feelings
We used to walk past buildings with paint marks and black scribblings
laugh and singinging
Past the evening, November frost in our breath
Heaving thoughts and dreams in store windows, signed with a smiley face
Life is a wild race
They say stay in ur lane
But when lanes Merge u either collide or embrace
So I stayed in my cage a safest place
Where if I want, I can choose to cry without be chastised
So fuck it, goodbye blue sky.

[Aero]

Symetrik - lol this was wild and slightly confusing. You said should you tell your owner that his significant other has another love interest but I thought this person was an animal, but you did say they worked at a desk job but also in a cage. So the cage was figurative I'm thinking. And then I'm confused about the setting is this an office or a home? This was a wildly erotic story that comes from your suppressed inner desires lol. This was funny I loled at inconsolable sobbing.

Scar - rhymes I've sprawled. Sprawled is a wild word choice here. Really liked these lines: Past the evening, November frost in our breath
Heaving thoughts and dreams in store windows
It's poetic. So basically the story is you fell in love with rhyming but it didn't love you back and so you chose to stay in your cage?

I'm voting tie here. Two different takes and neither outshined the other and I cant be tasked to figure it out.

[Diablo]

I think Scar’s is about keeping himself away from socialising, relationships, becoming a hermit for whatever reason because it’s easier and less harmful to stick with what you know than it is to try to step outside your comfort zone and try something different. he gives up on chasing his hopes and dreams, preferring the relative safety in mundanity

Sym: I can honestly say I’m not entirely sure what happened in this one, other than maybe Aero’s girl / owner has another man in her life.. who is also cheating on her with a female stripper cop? Aero knows of the treachery but keeps quiet because he’s a cuck LMAO best I can decipher this early on first reads

Wild take on the topic but absolutely flips the fuck out of it and keeps it relevant to one of our FLOCK (see what I did thurr?)

vote - Sym