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Old 11-13-2020, 08:17 AM   #21
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It could be the final third he’s struggling with.

It being Objective, I’m inclined to believe him.
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Old 11-13-2020, 08:26 AM   #22
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It could be the final third he’s struggling with.

It being Objective, I’m inclined to believe him.
Ding, ding, ding! I've already deleted 1/3 of it, struggling with tying it together for a story-type feel that'll bring emotion and not just words. The last editing part will probably mean another 10-20 lines gone to be exchanged with something else. Another edit to piece it all together. I REALLY need to get my sleep in check cus shit doesn't get good when I don't have enough sleep. Lately I've been breathing writing, words and conceptualizing my process to reach the level I want to be at. Definitely not quite there yet but I feel like I'm nearing it more and more. Right now it still becomes jumbled, stream of thoughts, not connecting concepts etc. like y'all been saying for years. I still got 10% left of my transitional period to get shit how I've always wanted my English pieces to be. I didn't call my last OM-piece "Death to Practice Pieces" for nothing. I'm going to do my absolute best with everything I write from here on out and make feedback part of my soul.

And tbf @Universe, you asked me for 80 lines and I agreed. You could show me the same respect in return and OK an EXT when I'm dealing with shit that mess with my time and energy management. Seen my behavior in Disc lately? You think that's a mind that's sound and ready to write?
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Old 11-13-2020, 09:53 AM   #23
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Fuck it, you got your wish @Universe, don't want to stress over not posting and there will be no extension @Inno. I made it a good one.
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Old 11-13-2020, 02:18 PM   #24
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Old 11-13-2020, 03:16 PM   #25
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Old 11-13-2020, 03:21 PM   #26
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Unfortunately boys and girls Ima have to sign out for at least a few weeks. I'll drop votes for everyone but it seems my country has called upon me to dispense justice for someone for allegedly doing something as part of a jury in her majesty's court.

And after that I'ma be Santa Claus in a popular UK retail chain. So be nice or bitches be getting coal for Christmas.

I'll get back in this asap. Don't have too much fun without me.
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Old 11-13-2020, 03:31 PM   #27
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Old 11-13-2020, 03:55 PM   #28
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@Objective Best of luck, bud.

@Adverse @sraL Great battle guys. Quality work, as always.
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Old 11-13-2020, 05:08 PM   #29
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Hey @Lucipher Howlz @Defiant @Master Rock @Pharaohs Army @Eviction verses are due tonight ask for an ext if you need one
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Yup I'll be posting in the next couple hours and place some votes as well
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Thanks, same to you. Fell asleep for 2-3 hours and I'm already seeing a ton of ways it could be improved. Hopefully we'll be getting some feedback so I can use that for next week.

Edit: I hatey submission more and more now. So much I could improve upon, way too many lines should be changed along with the first verse
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Old 11-13-2020, 09:32 PM   #32
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Old 11-13-2020, 10:11 PM   #34
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I already did, will be up all night working on it tho
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I dropped.
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It feels good to be back, madd props to Inno for bringing this back.
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Thanks everyone for posting or asking for extensions. Only waiting on one to respond. There’s quite a few battles ready for votes
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word I requested an extension just incase but I posted up.
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Some talented writers here... I'll get my votes in later today.

Remember everyone, you could wreck shop in your battle but if you don't vote and your opponent does, you will most likely lose... as per the rules established by our dead beat Dad, @Inno.

@Adverse Can we get a Sign In/Out thread going?
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