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Old 06-28-2014, 10:10 AM   #1
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Default Conditional Depression

Speed write.


I can't think straight, I don't know how to word this,
But before I woke up I thought 'this life is worthless',
I dance around the problem, I hate our purpose,
I don't like to play the part in this lifeless circus.
I've looked for the answers, and found more questions,
Ignorance is bliss. They say it's the greatest lesson.
I learned depression is an intelligent disease,
Ever seen a fool as deficit as me?
Fifteen years in a class, indoctrinated,
To earn some cash like I was fuckin obligated.
'Earn some decadence' is what they commended,
Like there's some selflessness to a selfish ending.
Was I born without the rights of birth?
Is the height of mirth for we to defile this Earth?
I could type all day but not convey this something.
There's no worth in paper that's based on nothing!
And what's the deal with this 'greater good' directive?
What? Killin' kids benefits the collective?
Burning countries we invade, oppress, then destroy
So we can further our own excessive choices? Deploy,
An army too strong for farmers to fight?
Then force the news to skew the truth so we look right?
A smaller evil for a greater cause. Suppress the laws,
Elect by applause. Twist the views. It's world roulette,
But step on the other side of the silhouette. Infuse, inflect.
Diffuse your rep. Induce yourself with the truth's finesse,
Don't lose your head.
Let reality egress and wade out the bayou.
Come out the dullard's swamp.
Guarantee you'll feel like I do.
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Old 06-28-2014, 12:35 PM   #2
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flow was good. There were a few awkward transitions, but eh.

your content was EXCELLENT. YOU GET IT. THIS IS ALL A LIE. DEPRESSION IS NOT THE ANSWER, ENLIGHTENING OTHERS IS. THIS WAS DOPESAWCE HOMEY.
btw...your underlined line really nailed it.
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Old 06-28-2014, 01:52 PM   #3
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seems like you have a super solid understanding of both psychopathology and economics.

please, go on...
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Old 06-28-2014, 01:57 PM   #4
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Maybe you shouldn't attempt to assess the world's problems in a "speed write."
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Old 06-28-2014, 02:34 PM   #5
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I liked this.
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