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Old 02-05-2018, 02:19 PM   #1
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Old 02-06-2018, 06:54 PM   #2
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Old 02-08-2018, 05:32 PM   #3
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this aint a Mario game wen i say im dumpin Shells out a Cannon,
u hittin the floor like Satan Castout, thats a Hell of a landing.

u aint gon do shit, n your homies better shut they damn lips,
bcuz i wood blaze your circle if anyone from your Camp Trips.

test me, playin Games wit the Devil will make u sorry,
u dont want our Pencils to Cross, like Charlie Charlie.

u say your GodLike? well, now i would like to tell u...
ur words r forced the hell out of, so u think the power of Christ Compels u.

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Old 02-08-2018, 06:56 PM   #4
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Ur bitch or ur cash. I need it all, the thought is tempting.
They both choked up when arms out... the Force is strong within me.
My demons riding, steaming by and making lore real
If u claim Kru's a fix to win, u best have that &then some more steel.
gun's so hot it pops. the fun don't stop, we ride shove
By my count, he fairs badly. I'll pull up and fry anything you can think of
collected yo bitch's loot to let you know the score... light!
just had to build a case &she was on my tower within the Fortnite.
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Old 02-10-2018, 10:14 AM   #5
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13- opener was meh, camp trip was an okay idea could've been executed better, 3rd was lost on me, closer decent idea again, wording need work.

Bleak- opener idea okay, the end rhymes hurt it, crusading was okay, flip could of been stronger, 3rd didn't mean much to me not sure if it's me or you, this didn't mean much to me either.

Not a great battle. Both show potential though. Bleak last two bar hurt him here, as I can't see the play or angle. I'm over in England so I'm not sure if it's missing something or there just not being a lot there. 13 showing a little more progress on the concept side, but still need work on his execution. 3rd bar again was lost on me, you guys are gonna have to come a bit more universal if it's gonna translate to me. In the end I'm not really sure who wins here. I'm gonna give it 13 though because the last two of breaks were just complete misses for me. Vote 13
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Originally Posted by Krucial Th1rt3en
this aint a Mario game wen i say im dumpin Shells out a Cannon,
u hittin the floor like Satan Castout, thats a Hell of a landing.

> Not bad. Both of these concepts are played but you at least executed and tied them together well.

u aint gon do shit, n your homies better shut they damn lips,
bcuz i wood blaze your circle if anyone from your Camp Trips.

> You ever hear about the concept of a wordplay working both ways? This one doesn't. "I wood blaze your circle"... that shit ain't grammatically correct.

test me, playin Games wit the Devil will make u sorry,
u dont want our Pencils to Cross, like Charlie Charlie.

> I get the feeling that this concept is played, but I don't recall ever having seen it before, and the bar is pretty well-executed, so it gets my stamp of approval.

u say your GodLike? well, now i would like to tell u...
ur words r forced the hell out of, so u think the power of Christ Compels u[

> It's generally a bad look to use a concept similar to one you've already used in the same battle.

Overall: Not a horrible verse by any means, but not particularly exceptional either, and noticeably flawed. [10/20]
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Ur bitch or ur cash. I need it all, the thought is tempting.
They both choked up when arms out... the Force is strong within me.

> You're right, the rhyming in this bar was extremely forced. Though the concept wasn't too bad.

My demons riding, steaming by and making lore real
If u claim Kru's a fix to win, u best have that &then some more steel.

> You might also want to familiarize yourself with the idea of wordplays needing to work both ways. "If you claim crucifix to win..."
- Doesn't sound right, does it? Additionally, I hope that you didn't mean to convey the wordplay steel / steal at the end, since that also doesn't work,
but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt.


gun's so hot it pops. the fun don't stop, we ride shove
By my count, he fairs badly. I'll pull up and fry anything you can think of

> I don't get it, but one-syllable rhyming for the win.

collected yo bitch's loot to let you know the score... light!
just had to build a case &she was on my tower within the Fortnite.

> This concept seems a bit counterproductive since a fortnight is a fairly long period of time (two weeks). I also feel like the wordplay at the end doesn't really work. A creative concept but not too well-done.

Overall: You had a decent opener but everything after that was lackluster, to say the least. [9/20]
MVGT: Krucial Th1rt3en
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Old 02-11-2018, 08:54 AM   #7
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Camp trips was nice

Vs

Choked up was solid
Krus a fix was cool

Got it 2-1 for bleak

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Seemed like Kru had a Hell/religous theme going on lol
Overall both had misses. I can see this going either way
Camp Trip was cool
Crucifix was better
I have to go with Bleak by a hair,
V/Bleak
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Old 02-11-2018, 10:57 AM   #9
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this aint a Mario game wen i say im dumpin Shells out a Cannon,
u hittin the floor like Satan Castout, thats a Hell of a landing.
its basic and corny man, it’s like saying I’ll take ur soul out ur shoe
u aint gon do shit, n your homies better shut they damn lips,
bcuz i wood blaze your circle if anyone from your Camp Trips.
ok this one was better, not bad
test me, playin Games wit the Devil will make u sorry,
u dont want our Pencils to Cross, like Charlie Charlie.
i used a Charlie Charlie line like 3 years ago man lol this one didn’t even have an effect. Crossing pencils? That’s the fucking punch? 1 Star nah
u say your GodLike? well, now i would like to tell u...
ur words r forced the hell out of, so u think the power of Christ Compels u.
nah

alright you told me this was an old verse, I’m guessing before you started elevating. So I won’t hold it against you but the only thing I liked tbh is camp trip

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If u claim Kru's a fix to win, u best have that &then some more steel.
cool concept and nameplay but wording in second line is choppy, ok bar
gun's so hot it pops. the fun don't stop, we ride shove
By my count, he fairs badly. I'll pull up and fry anything you can think of
what? Lol
collected yo bitch's loot to let you know the score... light!
just had to build a case &she was on my tower within the fortnite
mah


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What was with the hell theme here with Krucial. Strange. Took away from the impact of the verse imo. Ironion then that bleak had the best line in the battle with the crucific. I accept that it's probably played however it was worded the most effectively out of all the punches here. Charlie Charlie was Krus best. Fortnite was okay from bleak. Kru is adapting well just needs to fine tune the delivery. Make it harsher. Slicker. Bleak is still testing out what works for him. Don't be discouraged. Stay in. I was 1-8 my first LLL season.

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krucial came better than normal.. I cant exactly quote anything but I see the improvement. bleak.. I dont rlly understand bro sometimes I see glimpses of sum cleverness then verses like this make me feel like u arent trying. I honestly think krucial had the better attempts at a clever diss in this one with the camp fire line soo

vote - krucial
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Camp trips and power of christ

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u aint gon do shit, n your homies better shut they damn lips,
bcuz i wood blaze your circle if anyone from your Camp Trips.

This was coo

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Ur bitch or ur cash. I need it all, the thought is tempting.
They both choked up when arms out... the Force is strong within me.

Nice Opener

Idk this is a toss up honestly, was a ok battle nothing to crazy to point out on either sides, but it was close. I'm going w/ Krucial

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Kruc
camp trips was decent

not feeling the rest

Bleak
opener & next bar both had good concepts but man, ur executioning n wording fucked then up

not a great battle
v/kruc for having the only hit
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7Kru -- didnt like your hell concepts....slightly better wording than Bleak. W/ that said charlie charlie was ok.

Bleak -- wording issues but i thought the kruifix line was aight.....fortnite coulda been something. You had better misses.

edge to bleak. vote- bleak
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Krucial I enjoyed the camp trip play & that closer but there is irony in that line as well...
otherwise this was a fair showing, the Mario line would have been cool but to me its eh.
good job...

bleak...you hit me the same amount of hits as your opponent, I didnt really enjoy the last 4 lines though...
that was eh to me as well, so you two are on equal ground right now in my eyes...
nice work though...

overall I think I have bleak winning this one, krucial had a few decent lines.
the camp line was oddly worded but seems cool just because of the visual you try to bring.
that ending was pretty goofy though. thats what me leaning with bleak even though Im sure someone gets those 2 lines.
decent battle.

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I think that Camp Trip was the LOTB. It was very solid. Opener was cool too, wasn't feeling that pencil bar though and closer was aight.

Bleak, I'm tired of "arms" bars, sorry. That's a -1 for me. I like the crucifix wp but your punch didn't live up to it. Coulda been harsher. Fry line was weird, don't get it. Also, I heard about fortnite, but I'm not into the game itself so the bar is lost on me.

This is a clear win for Krucial 13 for me.
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