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08-18-2013, 01:26 PM | #1 |
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Flo, first of all I have to lmao@ your verse being how your dad named you Flo Real but you've changed your username since you posted. I mean, I think your verse was kinda cool.. too many times you wrote a line then just tacked on a rhyme at the end. I also am not generally a fan of rap verses that are about rapping, in the same way that I hate reading novels where the main character is a novelist. I think you could've done better with the concept, is what I mean.
Pie, your verse was pretty hilarious. Lmao@ "give my penis erections". Your story got more and more absurd as it went on and you relinquished your rhyme scheme a bit as it progressed ("this attacking of sex" - wtf?), but goddamn it was pretty hilarious. Obviously I like when shit has a more humorous angle so I identified with your piece a lot. I love "you're a bitch with no cash".. your shit had a lot of lol's - I just think you can do the comedy angle and still stay crispy with the scheme... the scheme at the top was nuts, but then it faded. Vote for Pie
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