Ammo vs. Boredom - SHANK WINS

[Ammo]

10 lines due in a few.

[Boredom]

u vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy
u never get pussy u ugly fucker, u can count he's on the run
cuz if a bitch ever get's ammonia she would want to drown her self in some
ur ya own worse enemy, a lame to soft to brawl
it's ironic how u tried to throw shots at AK but ended up w/ ur brains on the wall
i'm catchin this dub w/ EASE, that is something u can bet g
no way i'm losing to a whack noob whose lost every battle he's been in on netcees

light work.

[Ammo]

i'll take a 2x4 to boredom and brag about how i board him,
then if he say i didn't, i'll do it again while his bitch recordin,
yea i may not be the best, but you said you'd help me,
you couldn't help me if i was on a 10 story bout to make the street gory,
end of story, you bore me, better yet go ahead ya bitch adore me,
i'll send you a poster and custom made 40 with my pic and your sis on it fuckin with funny faces just to be corny,
when it's all said and done you gonna die a horrible death,
final destination embedded in me says your gonna turn left,
which ain't right, cause it will end you up on a milk carton easily,
missing, but nobody cared about board, just card board & vitamin D.

[KwaL!ty]

Links or will be CLOSED.

[Boredom]

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=13392

[Boredom]

v

[Allen Knight]

Fly on wall
Ammonia
Shots at ak

Vs

Nothing


V/bored, this was onesided, ammo work on ur wordin u have the idea but u gotta be more
Direct an harsh wit a creative twist, all ur bars were statements, bord had solid verse liked the
Ammonia bar.

[R!canTheoryz]

u vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy


Vs

None Really TBH.

Overall Vote - Bore He was the more polished here overall had better attempts and better execution ammo didn't have much alot of filler n miss direction lack of sting executein Ur punches was Ur issue here bore gets my vote better verse overall.

[Decibel]

@Boredom @Ammo LAST CHANCE FOR LINKS OR WILL BE CLOSED!

[Boredom]

Will get other link. And @Decibel what if ammo
Doesn't get
Links?

[Decibel]

u vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
Okay opener.. pretty straight forward
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy
Dig the concept here to be honest. good hit
u never get pussy u ugly fucker, u can count he's on the run
cuz if a bitch ever get's ammonia she would want to drown her self in some
lol
ur ya own worse enemy, a lame to soft to brawl
it's ironic how u tried to throw shots at AK but ended up w/ ur brains on the wall
Its direct.. but simple
i'm catchin this dub w/ EASE, that is something u can bet g
no way i'm losing to a whack noob whose lost every battle he's been in on netcees
Seems kinda slapped on for a closer.


Overall... pretty decent verse other than the closer. You came with some direct shots but simple, the Fly line was probably your best.



i'll take a 2x4 to boredom and brag about how i board him,
then if he say i didn't, i'll do it again while his bitch recordin,
This is a weak opener.
yea i may not be the best, but you said you'd help me,
you couldn't help me if i was on a 10 story bout to make the street gory,
I dont really get the direction of this
end of story, you bore me, better yet go ahead ya bitch adore me,
i'll send you a poster and custom made 40 with my pic and your sis on it fuckin with funny faces just to be corny,
stretched and just isn't a strong concept at all..
when it's all said and done you gonna die a horrible death,
final destination embedded in me says your gonna turn left,
Okay?
which ain't right, cause it will end you up on a milk carton easily,
missing, but nobody cared about board, just card board & vitamin D.
At least it was a good attempt but still not strong hitting


Overall: You need to work on reflecting some NP's or personals in your lines. You also need to work on not stretching it to death. Stay away from generic disses



Vote: Boredom pretty one sided.... harder hits/verse overall. Boredom... if he don't post links and you won.. I am not going to punish you for his actions.

[StarFaggot]

Boredom

vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
WP is cool but the wording on this is not so good
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy
ehhh aight
u never get pussy u ugly fucker, u can count he's on the run
cuz if a bitch ever get's ammonia she would want to drown her self in some
ammo nia? ammo on ya? not digging
ur ya own worse enemy, a lame to soft to brawl
it's ironic how u tried to throw shots at AK but ended up w/ ur brains on the wall
coolish
i'm catchin this dub w/ EASE, that is something u can bet g
no way i'm losing to a whack noob whose lost every battle he's been in on netcees
statementish simple

Seemed like you didn't try at all here. Some safe concepts but the delivery needed work



Ammo

i'll take a 2x4 to boredom and brag about how i board him,
then if he say i didn't, i'll do it again while his bitch recordin,
more of a swag line
yea i may not be the best, but you said you'd help me,
you couldn't help me if i was on a 10 story bout to make the street gory,
lol no sir
end of story, you bore me, better yet go ahead ya bitch adore me,
i'll send you a poster and custom made 40 with my pic and your sis on it fuckin with funny faces just to be corny,
lol whats going on here?
when it's all said and done you gonna die a horrible death,
final destination embedded in me says your gonna turn left,
oh boy
which ain't right, cause it will end you up on a milk carton easily,
missing, but nobody cared about board, just card board & vitamin D.
no suh

you seem a bit new to textcee battling so I cant really blame you here


MVGT Boredom for having the structure and tactics down. Ammo you will get better.

[Tic]

Originally Posted by Boredom

u vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
Ok, but worded horribly.
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy
Pretty simple concept. I guess it hits, but barely.
u never get pussy u ugly fucker, u can count he's on the run
cuz if a bitch ever get's ammonia she would want to drown her self in some
His name is ammo. This is a miss for me.
ur ya own worse enemy, a lame to soft to brawl
it's ironic how u tried to throw shots at AK but ended up w/ ur brains on the wall
Better. Probably my fav so far, which doesn't say much.
i'm catchin this dub w/ EASE, that is something u can bet g
no way i'm losing to a whack noob whose lost every battle he's been in on netcees
Personal ok. Jab at best.

light work.

You're H.McCoy? Fgt you've been duckin me forever. Prob better off. Not a great verse dude. Simple concepts and decent at best execution. Work on your wording and get more creative.

Originally Posted by Ammo

i'll take a 2x4 to boredom and brag about how i board him,
then if he say i didn't, i'll do it again while his bitch recordin,
Wordplay? I guess? Lackluster opener, worded horribly.
yea i may not be the best, but you said you'd help me,
you couldn't help me if i was on a 10 story bout to make the street gory,
Doesn't rhyme, and no....
end of story, you bore me, better yet go ahead ya bitch adore me,
i'll send you a poster and custom made 40 with my pic and your sis on it fuckin with funny faces just to be corny,
Holy filler. Just rhyming words gets you nowhere in battling.
when it's all said and done you gonna die a horrible death,
final destination embedded in me says your gonna turn left,
What a punch....he's gonna turn left...............
which ain't right, cause it will end you up on a milk carton easily,
missing, but nobody cared about board, just card board & vitamin D
No.

You need to work on pretty much everything man. You had no concepts or punches, and were just making statements. Get aggressive. I read boredoms verse and thought it was poor, then read yours and you took an even bigger step down. Keep at it though.

Vote - Boredom

[Decibel]

@Boredom ... Waiting for link and I will close this in your favor of KO

[Cakedout]

Fly on the wall
Ammonesia
Amm a tour

Vs

Nothing.. Boring delivery style, everybody on this site raps the same.

V boredom

[Boredom]

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=14111
@Decibel

[e11even]

Boredem
u vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
--stretched and forced... shudda been worded better
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy
--filler, but cool punch...
u never get pussy u ugly fucker, u can count he's on the run
cuz if a bitch ever get's ammonia she would want to drown her self in some
--another stretched and forced nameplay, but a hit nonetheless
ur ya own worse enemy, a lame to soft to brawl
it's ironic how u tried to throw shots at AK but ended up w/ ur brains on the wall
--ok punch, better execution, personal
i'm catchin this dub w/ EASE, that is something u can bet g
no way i'm losing to a whack noob whose lost every battle he's been in on netcees
--very filler, lackluster finisher, lazy, must have known you would win for sure.

Overall, run of the mill mass produced type battle verse. No Ooh's and Ah's. You knew you would win and you pulled a Mayweather: a lotta peacocking with lame punches. Be impressive REGARDLESS, if you're capable.


Ammo
i'll take a 2x4 to boredom and brag about how i board him,
then if he say i didn't, i'll do it again while his bitch recordin,
--this had a lot of punch potential, underutilized, meh
yea i may not be the best, but you said you'd help me,
you couldn't help me if i was on a 10 story bout to make the street gory,
--didn't help yourself here, only use introspect if you're gonna flip it properly...
end of story, you bore me, better yet go ahead ya bitch adore me,
i'll send you a poster and custom made 40 with my pic and your sis on it fuckin with funny faces just to be corny,
--Overly broken down, forced, stretched. Concise and precise is what you should go for.
when it's all said and done you gonna die a horrible death,
final destination embedded in me says your gonna turn left,
--Mehhh... potential, but underutilized again. This one cudda been good.
which ain't right, cause it will end you up on a milk carton easily,
missing, but nobody cared about board, just card board & vitamin D.
--You need to read more battles and learn mechanics and proper nameplay/wordplay methods.

Overall, difficult time managing your thoughts into potent content. It seems you would be better off learning a better rhyme and scheme construction first, then getting into battle mechanics. Stay hungry, and maintain focus.

MVGT Boredem, damn near by proxy....