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Old 11-20-2019, 10:35 PM   #1
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Foogazi. Think something's 24 karat gollllld and it just breaks
Better watch your soul when the love's fake
Never open the flood gates.
Wanna know why Felts in the matrix?
Spitting spells from a spaceship to fuck up what you do on a regular basis
I've seen the most angelic faces
Ego-trapped. Delicate cage
Witch in the corner..
Of your eye, that switches it's form before your cornea focus
Hoe kiss this portal of Pocus
Cornucopia horny storm-swarms me
Always find myself dreaming of your lips
Sly as hell but the wings are gorgeous
Magick's brutal so splash a beautiful cast upon this cute little planet
Truth of the matter it's like shoots and ladders
Rub lamp if you can use some havoc
It depends though, Ben's glow mutes the madness
Slides through, eye's glued like magnets
Here's to counting on you.pure thoughts be the fountain of youth
Tears drop on a mountain of roots
All todays. It's all a rave
The more you let go the more it falls in place
The real in me recognizes the real in you. Walls just fade.
I spy a dream. Everything is so vibrant.
All tyedye to leaves
Everlast, shit that never passes. You don't see it? need better glasses
You feel me but we're on separate planets
I fix gaze upon the moon and chill
And fixate on the ponds that Luna builds
Super ill, this wand is smoothe as silk
You want to confuse with milk
Rhyme butterfly. Shall I cocoon yours?
Catch sun walking on the moon floor
reading fortunes but what you tuned for?
Bloom north. Dropping the visions
Lots of witnesses got cognitive dissonance
Don't know what the FUCK is happening, their optics are missing it
Word-hawk lost in epiphany. Wind-walk with logic mystiks
Immortal wound. It doesn't die
Getting karma-fucked with the same scenario
A dozen times a dozen times..
Soul always WOKE, it's our ghost that sleeps
Lazy fucks wanna pick the fruit, never grow the tree
Wooo smell the ocean breeze I spell with poetry
I-island, can't tell where dry land or the puddle starts
Tell a lie it tares your tongue apart
Fuck this planet, bout to shuttle mars
Too many jesters here that juggle hearts
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Old 11-21-2019, 09:26 PM   #2
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I might be high as shit but I thought this was fucking brilliant from start to finish. The opener was cool and you caught my attention with the Matrix skit and kept it fresh throughout with cool ideas and thought provoking perspectives. Flow was great throughout, would have enjoyed to hear this as a spoken word tbh. Closure stings quite well in a good way too and wraps it up perfectly. Might be my fav piece by you. This is why I still log in and read shit sometimes.
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Old 12-11-2019, 12:56 AM   #3
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I don't know why you constantly misspell magic and mystics, but i dig the rhymes and phrases in this piece. good.
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Old 12-09-2020, 10:38 PM   #4
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You didn't really get enough feed when you were in your writing period.
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Old 04-05-2021, 08:42 AM   #5
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I don't know why you constantly misspell magic and mystics, but i dig the rhymes and phrases in this piece. good.
he doesn't. magick is distinct from magic. it's intentional.
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