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Old 05-28-2019, 02:13 AM   #1
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Old 06-02-2019, 06:47 AM   #2
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Old 06-03-2019, 07:43 PM   #3
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 06-04-2019, 03:10 AM   #4
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sounds like you're trying to sound like a deep fancy writer
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Old 06-04-2019, 09:58 AM   #5
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Old 06-05-2019, 03:41 AM   #6
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I'll give you feed-back.

I thought this was a excellent piece. Full of eclectic good writing; with nice prose and harmony. Good rhyme scheme and rhyme meter here. You're quite the gifted writer, and I enjoy reading your writtens. Good work on this piece.

The 'Swimming in a sunken boat' line was pretty nice. Good work, Dead Man.

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Old 06-24-2019, 11:35 AM   #7
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Old 06-24-2019, 06:44 PM   #8
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Can u do a dumbed down version one day


When u rap simple it seems deeper


Maybe it’s cuz I’m dumb
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Gepetto molten magma line could be GOAT... I see papp smeari viewing this and I'd eagerly like to get his perspective on this open Mic piece...

i think you're a natural psychologist tbh.I'm thinking of doing that on some veritas shit just to heal mother fuckers psyches and shit, help them to individuate and what not. I'd be nice with it. You'd be nice with it too. That doctorate would be at the egress of my estranged grandfather's inherited fortune. Probably not but whatever. Does it all even matter in the end? We're insignificant tubes putting things in one end and having shit come out the other. All fighting to be the top type of tube. Lmao fucking comical bro considering. If he hooks me up tho id just slide in with these college bitches naw mean and psychoanalyse the easiest pathway to the panties and shit. Pay the profs ego homage she prob just stamps your shit with As and Bs without looking. If it happens I'd be thinking of you as I get this degree and cavort with psychology thots. Maybe I'll move to Mississippi and set up my practice right next to veritas with an awning that states haven for sovereign atheists. you have a high IQ I think like 140.
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This is the equivalent of Mr Miyagi casually waltzing into the dojo & doing a triple axel Ostrich kick just to let niggas know he still a shooter out here, b

This shit fire and a lot of it was trademark Dead man .. so much so? That less than halfway in .. I’m like “ here this nigga go “ xD lmaoo good read man
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Old 06-27-2019, 02:46 PM   #11
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Btw I lowkey thought he said his pen had elephantitus for a second xD

Would be better in retrospect lmaooo das MY ONLY CRITICISM
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