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Old 07-25-2019, 11:30 PM   #1
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Default Smoking is bad

Coughin blood by the puddles, mucus and flem
Chokin on my own putrid, til its lose in my chest
Im losing my breath, wth every newport i Inhale
Tryin To quit, but smoking more and more as i fail
Ive even switched to the cheaper cigs, all of'em suck
Cheaper the smoke, the deeper the choke, caught in my lungs
This nicotine keeps callin my bluff, physically trapped
The more i push it away, the more its rippin me back
Like hits of the crack, this shit keeps callin my name
From the time that i wake, up until im tired and drained
A spark from the bic, a zippo, or a flick of the match
And ill smoke a whole pack, whats more delicious than that?
Its nothin like the taste of cigs, after sex with a bitch..
Except for being turned down, cause your breath is like shit!
Mixed with definite piss, or your clothes smell like an ashtray
Youll never get the digits, if you go at her that way
No matter!, you pack flame, and its part of your swag..
Youll hack a whole kidney up, and smoke all of the pack
Whats harder than that? Fuck it, your wu-tangin' the butts
A two pack a day habit, that you hate, but you love
It basically sucks, filter hangin from your face and ur drunk
Cant even run away from it, to much strain on your lungs
Hate to say it -your fucked, s'why you keep callin' it quits
You could pave a freeway with all the tar in your chest
The doctor says, quit smokin, choose, live or you die
What he doesn't realise, is how your feelin inside
A certain red in your eyes, but you aint ready today..
You walk out, spark a cig, and drop dead on the pave..

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Old 07-26-2019, 02:46 AM   #2
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Solid showing Anon

I liked the highway line

Stayed on topic throughout n flowed well

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Old 07-26-2019, 11:22 AM   #3
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Shit dope imma edit in Feed later but was feeling 4sure
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Old 07-26-2019, 10:40 PM   #4
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Thought it was cool but only after like 1/3-1/2 of the verse in. It started slow then picked up here:

A spark from the bic, a zippo, or a flick of the match
And ill smoke a whole pack, whats more delicious than that?
Its nothin like the taste of cigs, after sex with a bitch..
Except for being turned down, cause your breath is like shit!

Also enjoyed this couplet:

It basically sucks, filter hangin from your face and ur drunk
Cant even run away from it, to much strain on your lungs

But ye, thought the first part was rather meh and then it picked up from then and all the way to the end. Solid piece overall tho, good read. Keep writing.
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good rhymes.
I can relate to the subject matter. Tryin' to quit black n milds. it's tough.
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