11-09-2015, 08:02 PM | #1 |
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Manhattan vs. Destroyer - OPEN FOR VOTES
BA Swag & Flow Tournament II Verses are due Friday 11/13/15 @ 11:59 PM PST 10-16 lines No swaying, biting, flipping, recycling, or tom foolery No extensions. You are allowed a 12 hour grace period once in the entire tournament. So if you use it in the first round, you will go the rest of the tourney without being allowed a grace period. Good luck. @Ricky Manhattan @Destroyer
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11-10-2015, 09:31 AM | #2 |
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11-10-2015, 11:01 AM | #3 |
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11-13-2015, 04:20 PM | #4 |
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11-13-2015, 04:48 PM | #5 |
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enter in stealth without a gun, still make u melt like a thousand suns
watch me leave manhattan looking like today is september 12, 2001 i exhale noxious gases that burn ur insides into ashes so even if u sneak up & surprise me, soon as I gasp kid, ur in a casket & I feel for this guy cuz he thinks for real that he's fly but u gonna question if u really slick Rick, when I put this steel to ur eye like Oliver Queen when he robs all of ur green, I leave u broken bitch hollow ur spleen & marrow but u can call me constantine or arrow the way I'm fucking smoke n shit dirty doc brown, my smock's brown, & if my porn trends & longitude's uncertain u'll find me in a delorean w/ the fusion conversion looking for born again confused young virgins I'm a freezing soldier... I'm Captain America... if he was demoted for indecent exposure so don't be bowled over if I happen to stare at ya, & slowly pull my piece from its holster u prolly hate da god cuz I create the drama, but w/ my ancient knowledge - I could shake out Lama drop pain upon ya, like a blazing sauna, while I make lasagna & bang ya mama in kanye's pajamas I'm armed and pissed, retarded bitch... u come around here startin shit... I'll put more metal in ur mouth than when boba fett fell into the sarlac pit |
11-14-2015, 11:19 AM | #6 |
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I love lasagna, but yo..
Get backhanded & slumped.. Glad-bagged then thrown in a trash can when I dump Blat, blat - reenact Black Mass from the jump, pull out & let two semis split 'em.. Van Damme if he stunts Bring in the gas masks & hazmats, mag' splatter ya guts Mossberg open you up like an app; we can trade shot after shot, Snapchat w/ the pump Let the pen game rip 'em apart, I'm MK Trilogy hard You'll need an X-ray, I'm makin necks break spittin these bars.. a head case w/ an SK gripped in my palms Watch ya whole chest cave in, bend blades into ya heart Death Race whips & cigars.. they gon' call you "Meth Face" when I leave ya flesh grazed, splintered & scarred This round I'll Johnny Cage 'em - let the shotty Rain 'til ya body's layin on the pavement Finish him: Shao Kahn & Shang 'em & if I hear you got that Kang, then it's ya spot I'm Raiden Not even God can save 'em.. you better hope that a hospital's near 'Cause I'll aim for ya head & the shots that I air'll remind 'em of Barry Bonds when they crossin ya ears Shoot where ya abdomen's at 'til ya organs bleed.. a roarin beast, show you how an animal acts Make it look like a horror scene in Jordan 3's; I'm War Machine - should be locked up for puttin my hands on a Mack It's the Planet of the Apes; battle me on stage I'll let the caliber blow Gat to ya scalp have ya brains splashin the crowd like watermelon at a Gallagher show |
11-19-2015, 07:44 PM | #7 |
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Des verse felt too much like a battle verse in spots. Flow was really basic in spots too. It had its moments but overall I think his verse last round was better tbh.
Manhattan had a nice verse overall. Swag n flow was on point. Don't hate me des V. Manhattan |
11-19-2015, 08:09 PM | #8 |
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this vote is garbage dude
you quoted nothing and offered nothing thanks? |
11-20-2015, 08:16 AM | #9 |
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leave Manhattan was cool
& I feel for this guy cuz he thinks for real that he's fly but u gonna question if u really slick Rick, when I put this steel to ur eye that shit is dopeee, real smooth your lines kinda went wayyy long after that section and lost some of the flow, it got sacrificed for the swag IMO but you should have stuck with the style you had going prior to these lines as it was working for you you kinda built up momentum then lost it around the mid section the capt america/indecent exposure shit was funny but you shoulda swapped the setup/punchline around imo, it would of worked better closer was madd nice too though Manhattan: Bring in the gas masks & hazmats, mag' splatter ya guts Mossberg open you up like an app; we can trade shot after shot, Snapchat w/ the pump that was crazy smooth, really nice with it This round I'll Johnny Cage 'em - let the shotty Rain 'til ya body's layin on the pavement Finish him: Shao Kahn & Shang 'em & if I hear you got that Kang, then it's ya spot I'm Raiden fire! WarMachine was nice as fuck too ive got Manhattan winning here, 3 real dope shits to two standouts from Des (I gave him the capt american ish) good battle fellas!
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11-20-2015, 10:05 AM | #10 |
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11-20-2015, 08:14 PM | #11 |
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Destroyer - Dope opener. The feel-for-this-guy-couplet was smooth. Kind of hard to follow the flow at times but it was good overall. Kind of felt this line: ''while I make lasagna & bang ya mama in kanye's pajamas'' was all about flow, making lasagna and bang ya mama in kanye's pajamas was a bit cringy to me, sort of funny but seemed like you just needed some shit to end it with and the impact was lost in the process or something, idk. Might be wrong but that's what I felt. Beside of that shit was on point and the closure was cool. Dope piece overall, certainly a good read.
Beretta - If you didn't love lasagna I would have voted against you because principles. But yo, opener was nice and the next couplet is dope af. Enjoyed the mk-theme you got going, ''Death Race whips & cigars.. they gon' call you "Meth Face" when I leave ya flesh grazed, splintered & scarred'', brutal, lmfao. Dope closure. Vote - Felt both came with it, one better than the other. I got Manhattan on this one with an overall more solid verse, dope battle and great reads from both.
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12-04-2015, 11:01 PM | #12 |
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e Oliver Queen when he robs all of ur green, I leave u broken bitch
hollow ur spleen & marrow but u can call me constantine or arrow the way I'm fucking smoke n shit "metal in mouth than a sarlac pit" ^ liked that from Des....overall, not a bad verse, not quite as much swag in a sense how you approached it, felt more like a hybrid of s&f/battle verse. but it was a cool read. Hattan....seen your last verse, thought it was killer. this one, not as strong, had its moments... Bring in the gas masks & hazmats, mag' splatter ya guts Mossberg open you up like an app; we can trade shot after shot, Snapchat w/ the pump ^ standard gun bar s&f but worded very crisp....nothing bad a/b this. "This round I'll Johnny Cage 'em - let the shotty Rain 'til ya body's layin on the pavement Finish him: Shao Kahn & Shang 'em & if I hear you got that Kang, then it's ya spot I'm Raiden" ^ seen raiden here, but multis and flow on fleek...which is what this tourneys all about to me... vote- hattan |
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I feel for this guy cuz he thinks for real that he's fly
but u gonna question if u really slick Rick, when I put this steel to ur eye dirty doc brown, my smock's brown, & if my porn trends & longitude's uncertain u'll find me in a delorean w/ the fusion conversion looking for born again confused young virgins u prolly hate da god cuz I create the drama, but w/ my ancient knowledge - I could shake out Lama drop pain upon ya, like a blazing sauna, while I make lasagna & bang ya mama in kanye's pajamas I'm armed and pissed, retarded bitch... u come around here startin shit... I'll put more metal in ur mouth than when boba fett fell into the sarlac pit vs Quote:
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