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Old 09-02-2020, 01:10 PM   #1
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This is the opening round of the biggest topical tournament in the Netcees calendar year. 16 entrants. 8 battles. 4 winners. 32 lines separating you and the losers bench. Do not disappoint. We have replacements on hand ready to fill-in on short notice, you WILL get a battle so please do not assume your opponent is no-showing. It’s go hard or home.

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Old 09-02-2020, 01:25 PM   #2
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Old 09-02-2020, 01:55 PM   #3
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Don't say another goddamn word. Up until now, I've been polite. If you say anything else--word one--I will kill myself. And when my tainted spirit finds its destination, I will topple the master of that dark place. From my black throne, I will lash together a machine of bone and blood, and fueled by my hatred for you this fear engine will bore a hole between this world and that one. When it begins you will hear the sound of children screaming--as though from a great distance. A smoking orb of nothing will grow above your bed, and from it will emerge a thousand starving crows. As I slip through the widening maw in my new form, you will catch only a glimpse of my radiance before you are incinerated. Then, as tears of bubbling pitch stream down my face, my dark work will begin. I will open one of my six mouths, and I will sing the song that ends the Earth.

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Old 09-02-2020, 02:00 PM   #4
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"Here's the deal I'm the best there is. Plain and simple. I wake up in the morning and i piss excellence!"

-Cole Trickle


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Crept on a blonde at the ATM, took a glock & clocked the chick
She lost her balance, then lost her balance… I robbed the bitch
Looked at her as she lay helpless, blood covered her white face
It’s the time, place for tonight’s rape was my fucking mind state
Quickly surveyed the area, heard noises & almost panicked but
It was pitch black I was wearing all black, plus I’m black as fuck
Decided to carry her to my car… the irony showed I’m a loner
taking her limp body to my vehicle all the while growing a boner
Threw her in the front seat, peeled off thinking it’s the right idea
I’m driving with her purse, a gun in my hand feeling like Madea
Had to make sure the ride was quiet so I took the scenic route
She felt bumps on the road only because I pulled my penis out
She’s unconscious, hand on my diseased dick, this is the life
Riding through the night with a Caucasian like this is my wife
My joy comes full circle as the moon reflects the light of the sun
The moon shimmers off her pale skin & I glow bright as the sun
Or the glow from her phone as it rings loudly, what a mistake!!
FAAAAAACK we’re 5 minutes from home and this bitch is awake
She screams “HELLLLLP!!” starts flailing we get in a physical fight
I punch her with my free hand & explain “This isn’t your night..”
She grabs the wheel we start to swerve while car is on coast
She’s yanking aggressively this bitch is trying to kill us both
I choked her and she stopped immediately & burst into tears
I said I’m the person to fear and it just gets worsened from here
Said you’re my wife for a day, you’re going to take pipe in the A
We arrive at my place, kitchen counter with a knife to her face
She kneed me in the balls, I’m thinking what whore hasn’t?
I love ball torture this bitch unknowingly leads me to an orgasm
I fall to the floor spazzin’, like I’m having bouts with demons
Withering on the tile ejaculating copious amounts of semen
She ran out the house, escaped in my car with the nice rims
Now I’m in jail with a 6’8 275 pound murderer who likes men
I’m a pint sized pretty boy so there’s no use in refusing entry
You see my power was my dick now it’s being used against me
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Old 09-09-2020, 11:36 AM   #6
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Johnny 6-Feet:




Videodrome

The TV screen is a vampire, a damn liar
Promises dreams of sweet release around it's electronic campfire
Endless repeats from the machine chief, his broadcast divine
Saps my life away one minute, hour, year at a time
Why shouldn't it? There's not a damn thing out there for me!
And at home, endless lectures about our 'glorious history'
Call us oversensitive; ungrateful millennials and snowflakes
But two words 'Ok, boomer' and the baby's bough breaks
Trying not to think how my family trampolined the social classes
Up, then down again 'Thanks for the PlayStation!' as I stand in the ashes
They flushed the economy down the toilet and didn't change the paper roll
It takes it toll trying to find a career to save my soul
I break my back for minimum wage, til I stand and shout, why?
Evenings swimming in rage, drinking my bank account dry
Sanctuary in my silver screens, their glow a brilliant sheen
Broadcast subliminal whispers to the ears of willing teens
The corporate sponsored News is finally where I get my answer
Pointed a digital finger where I direct my anger

"The system's corrupted! The government has failed you!
All the Republicans are evil! They should go to jail too!
They're the Nazis! Punch a Nazi! Start a riot! You're righteous!"


As if this wasn't a transparent attempt to divide us
But kids are dumb and energetic so I took to the streets
By hour 3 the cries of 'Medic!' cut through the flames; the cities wreathe
Broken glass danced on sidewalks to the march of the boots
Drowning out a noisy conscience in hearts of hearts knew the truth
That we were played by puppeteers; lines of code were the strings
Fanned the flames in podium speeches to deliver blows to the Presi-... King
Disaffected, dead end lives, used for fuel then gone from sight...

...But it's probably all those video games causing the problem, right?
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Old 09-09-2020, 12:18 PM   #7
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I got Johnny by default cuz he used the pic and didn’t depict sexual assault


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Blue - Was wondering if we’d get the Blue who gave Bodey a run for her money or the one that dropped a battle verse in a topical bout against NYC. We got something in the middle here lol this verse was entertaining from start to finish, the ending bar was fucking hilarious, this is kind of like an expanded version of Sublime’s ‘Date Rape’ record. But yeah I mean what did your verse have to do with the pic? If this was the first Black August you’d have had a high chance to win this

Johnny - Not your best verse and it felt like you were a bit cramped like I told Lars (we usually had what an extra 18 lines to work with in the GWL?) But based on the short time frame you were given to churn out this quality of a verse we’ll have to watch out for you in the next round. Very cool depiction of what’s happening in the world tackled a lot of social
Issues without being too preachy and the conclusion was great. Good job sir

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Blue: What was it like to write this story? It's horrifying, menacing and very very dark.

It felt to me like a bazooka to the mind and read like a cannon in my soul.

One day after people were killed in the labor day shootings, I traveled to netcees to better understand the literary genius of military-style topicals and, hopefully, explain their appeal to nerds.

But mostly, I was just terrified. I've read fiction before, but never something like a blue topical. Read lightly on the internet and the resulting explosion of thoughts is humbling and deafening (even with eyeglass protection).

The recoil bruised my shoulder, which can happen if you don't know what you're doing. The brash line rhymes disoriented me as they flew past my face. The smell of intelligence and destruction made me sick. The wordplay loud like a bomb gave me a temporary form of PTSD. For at least an hour after reading the topical just a few times, I was anxious and irritable.

Even with the forum in dark mode, it is very simple to read off two dozen lines before you even know what has happened. If illegally modified to fully light mode, it doesn't take any imagination to see dozens of lines falling in front of you screen.

All it takes is the will to do it.

One topical battle can be gone in 60 seconds.

Johnny: I thought your take on the picture was interesting and you had some good lines. The rhyme scheme was decent and I thought the imagery of being drawn to the tv was good, especially "Broadcast subliminal whispers to the ears of willing teens" which really stood out to me.

Vote: Johnny. More topical, definitely relative to the picture at hand and felt he conveyed his idea of the subject slightly better.
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Lmao, Blue have no fucks here. Good stuff my friend but I guess I’m missing the connection to the picture. Def some good lines though.


Johnny. Nice and complex verse with a good approach. Had a 1984 feel to it a bit which is sweet. Well-written.


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Vote- johnny I felt like his verse is a better storyteller

compare to blue.
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I’m driving with her purse, a gun in my hand feeling like Madea

Lol, that made me laugh.

Not sure how I feel about a rape story. Or, how it ties into the picture. The flow was there, wordplay, well worded, except, for the worsened bar..

Idk, it was written well. I just don't like the idea behind it or how I don't see how it matched the topic.


Johnny;

Evenings swimming in rage, drinking my bank account dry

Sanctuary in my silver screens, their glow a brilliant sheen
Broadcast subliminal whispers to the ears of willing teens

I liked those lines.

Anger / answer not rhyming threw the flow off. It was smoooth until then.

Overall, really solid verse. This tied into the topic very well. Enjoyable read.

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