08-28-2020, 11:23 PM | #1 |
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footsteps to the corner (GWL)
fuck
what a trip. we came from skittles and juice salvation army T-shirts. Velcro timberland boots Big Red cinnamon chewing, loogie spit, the picture of youth kiddie pool in water wingies. kick off our shoes Capri-Sun kids in the hall, we hardly made it to school lost ourselves for years inside a playstation 2. you're my best friend. techdeck tony hawk we learned how to skate between throwing rocks at taxicabs and running away fuck. what a shame. we ran for miles in the rain hide-and-seek tag until our ankles were sprained circling bases. tennis balls, aluminum bats netscape navigator, napster we're maturing too fast how stupid is that. its hard to paraphrase the beauty we had awash in innocence and arrogance and viva la bam. there was no chance. we only watched our folks and followed example smoked our stolen Parliaments and coughed in our hands balled into fists. palm sweats, another malt liquor binge our footsteps to the corner must be carved in cement borrowed and begged. dollars and cents. Vicodin trance your ma was smoking black tar. the apartment was trashed. we were 12 and a half. making castles in sand now we're 21 and living in a Heineken can talking fast, frantic energy and stereo bass spirits in our flask to keep them spirits away wait, i'm serious, wait. hey don't die on me now i need you to light this. hey i think he's out. just let him go
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08-29-2020, 12:10 AM | #2 |
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mods please delete this
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08-29-2020, 12:22 AM | #3 |
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Just rapped this.
Beginning is better than the end. You already used stolen parliments in a previous verse. Other than that, the content is pretty good. Don't have to delete it |
08-29-2020, 03:04 AM | #4 |
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I enjoyed the flow and story until the end where it lost me. Beautiful imagery.
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rhyme capsule.
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lol
we were 12 and a half. making castles in sand now we're 21 and living in a Heineken can talking fast, frantic energy and stereo bass spirits in our flask to keep them spirits away this i particularly liked. appreciate the play on spirit - i don't think the nomenclature is accidental. solid overall. Last edited by Eŋg; 08-29-2020 at 09:08 AM. |
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Siri how can I help?
nice piece
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