07-18-2022, 04:25 PM | #1 |
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Eviction vs Defiant - DEFIANT WINS
Netcees SOL Season II Week 4 Due Thursday, July 21st at Midnight PST Minimum: 8 Lines Maximum: 12 Lines 24hr ext given on request NO biting NO swaying NO feeding You MUST check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls @Eviction @Defiant |
07-18-2022, 04:31 PM | #2 |
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priorities are flustered, better take them meds for real I put netflix on when the girls round, while he video embeds n chills Fat cunt melts in the sun, not a fuss here for em tips for a heatwave? back in the basement n pray for a reply in discussion forum try n plan ya day, gotta be some fun u need Now his action plan is lunch? or write another topical verse noones gonna read Never paid rent, n when the fam pass his luck will stray Not just saying he has noone But if Eviction notice ya front door, better move the fuck away Last edited by Defiant; 07-21-2022 at 01:05 PM. |
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07-21-2022, 08:44 AM | #4 |
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07-22-2022, 02:53 PM | #5 |
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When the 50 comes I have to hide the weed, & some shit I won't specify.
When the 50 comes for you, that's too many L's and you step aside. Your bitch fucking you for what? like she's simping for some whack skeet. You dodge challengers and act like your bitch, when you take the back seat. Shit' I almost no-showed, if they said I'm ducking you, that's sure pitiful. It's not running, if you caught me slipping it's because you're that forgettable. Another L should put him down for good, how long we gotta be zipping his body? You champed time to kill, what's the opposite of that when you're getting the homi?. whatever |
07-22-2022, 05:55 PM | #6 |
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priorities are flustered, better take them meds for real
I put netflix on when the girls round, while he video embeds n chills ehh Fat cunt melts in the sun, not a fuss here for em tips for a heatwave? back in the basement n pray for a reply in discussion forum nah try n plan ya day, gotta be some fun u need Now his action plan is lunch? or write another topical verse noones gonna read bad again Never paid rent, n when the fam pass his luck will stray Not just saying he has noone But if Eviction notice ya front door, better move the fuck away nah Vs When the 50 comes I have to hide the weed, & some shit I won't specify. When the 50 comes for you, that's too many L's and you step aside. what? Lmao Your bitch fucking you for what? like she's simping for some whack skeet. You dodge challengers and act like your bitch, when you take the back seat. ok we’re time traveling to 2004 Shit' I almost no-showed, if they said I'm ducking you, that's sure pitiful. It's not running, if you caught me slipping it's because you're that forgettable. nah Another L should put him down for good, how long we gotta be zipping his body? You champed time to kill, what's the opposite of that when you're getting the homi?. I don’t get it Vote defiant |
07-22-2022, 06:27 PM | #7 |
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Both vs alright to me, it could have been better. Both need more punchlines and more multis
I'll give to Evic |
07-22-2022, 08:01 PM | #8 |
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priorities are flustered, better take them meds for real I put netflix on when the girls round, while he video embeds n chills Filler quality, weak Fat cunt melts in the sun, not a fuss here for em tips for a heatwave? back in the basement n pray for a reply in discussion forum Good personal try n plan ya day, gotta be some fun u need Now his action plan is lunch? or write another topical verse noones gonna read Ouch Never paid rent, n when the fam pass his luck will stray Not just saying he has noone But if Eviction notice ya front door, better move the fuck away Wack, this read like a run on sentence. LONG BAR ALERT 5.3/10 Eviction When the 50 comes I have to hide the weed, & some shit I won't specify. When the 50 comes for you, that's too many L's and you step aside. Wack and weak opener Your bitch fucking you for what? like she's simping for some whack skeet. You dodge challengers and act like your bitch, when you take the back seat. Dude this was trash. Throw away Shit' I almost no-showed, if they said I'm ducking you, that's sure pitiful. It's not running, if you caught me slipping it's because you're that forgettable. What the tuck, kill yourself - wack Another L should put him down for good, how long we gotta be zipping his body? You champed time to kill, what's the opposite of that when you're getting the homi?. Are you really this terrible? Jesus fuckjng christ, nothing hit 4/10 You both are absolute trash…but Defi wins I guess. You both lost IMO for fucks sake. Give me back 10 mins of my life |
07-22-2022, 08:28 PM | #9 |
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07-23-2022, 01:35 AM | #10 |
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Honestly this was not a good battle guys.
I think Defiant completely phoned this one in thinking Eviction was an easy win but honestly if Eviction had even one decent hit I think Defiant could have very easily lost here. Eviction notice was probably LOTB and that’s saying a lot. Love you both but come on now V/Defiant |
07-23-2022, 09:21 AM | #11 |
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priorities are flustered, better take them meds for real
I put netflix on when the girls round, while he video embeds n chills this is light, but funny Fat cunt melts in the sun, not a fuss here for em tips for a heatwave? back in the basement n pray for a reply in discussion forum same as above, except doing less try n plan ya day, gotta be some fun u need Now his action plan is lunch? or write another topical verse noones gonna read pretty lazy Never paid rent, n when the fam pass his luck will stray Not just saying he has noone But if Eviction notice ya front door, better move the fuck away great concept but lacking in execution When the 50 comes I have to hide the weed, & some shit I won't specify. When the 50 comes for you, that's too many L's and you step aside. a nitpick: 5-0 and not 50 for cops. This is potentially a passable bar but the punch is so light. Imo it should build into something and the way you have it structed fails to do that. You put the 'reveal' of your wp like 2/3 of the way through and didn't do anything with it after. Not saying you strictly can't structure a bar like that, but if you're going to give away a punch early there should be a point imo Here's my attempt at rewording it, trying to put the punch at the end 5-0 came for me, blah blah blah get tossed When 5-0 came for you, it was ANOTHER fucking loss The concept isn't great but the execution could be better on something like this. I think of it as telling a joke and you gave away the joke almost immediately with calling the cops '50' and again halfway through the punchline Your bitch fucking you for what? like she's simping for some whack skeet. You dodge challengers and act like your bitch, when you take the back seat. dodge challengers is an OK wp. I think you're trying to do too much with this though. The setup is so confusing... Is it a bar about him not getting laid? Dodge challengers really has nothing to do with the bar/punch Shit' I almost no-showed, if they said I'm ducking you, that's sure pitiful. It's not running, if you caught me slipping it's because you're that forgettable. this is kind of making an excuse... It's good that you have a relevant concept but the punch isn't really anything crazy. Again, it's like a joke, and your punchline reveals nothing here Another L should put him down for good, how long we gotta be zipping his body? You champed time to kill, what's the opposite of that when you're getting the homi?. this wording is incomprehensible. I'm sorry man whatever why put this? Finished. I hope I'm not coming off as nitpicking dia, I'm just trying to give thorough feedback in the name of helping. Defs verse is visibly no effort, looking forward to seeing what he does if he tries. Def punches connected better V/defiant |
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