Gamble 1-2 vs Concrete 1-0 - CONCRETE WINS

Cred · 03-19-2018, 08:27 AM

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday MARCH 22 and will be open until Sunday.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.

Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE!
THERE’S BEEN A LOT OF COMPLAINTS ABOUT VOTING RECENTLY, IF THERE IS SOMEONE WHO YOU DON’T WANT TO VOTE IN YOUR BATTLE YOU MUST STATE THEIR NAME IN YOUR CHECK IN. IF IT’S A CRAZY AMOUNT OF PEOPLE THEN SORRY YOU’RE JUST A BITCH AND ALL VOTES WILL COUNT. AS PER ORC

@gamble @Concrete

Lyfzaa Gamble · 03-20-2018, 01:22 AM

Check gl

Lyfzaa Gamble · 03-21-2018, 02:43 AM

Match me, VS Concrete

You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you.
Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle.
So keep it official, it's over you lost. Keep hope if you want...
Cus Creature in his mind that he's taking over, when really that's just what's controlling his thoughts.
I'd be surprised if you were to become worthy....
But we all c Condom when around you dicks, you'd think hed notice he's getting fucked over an done dirty.
Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored
So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board.
Bitch this is war, Ull first need to Conquer ta see the victor,
..... y'all see the picture?
So this slaughter was meant for you Con, courtesy of this verse.

Concrete · 03-21-2018, 06:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sraL

LOL @ a tie, what a complete faggot Gamble is

battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell
funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L
believe me as I tell, I was gonna vote but saw the battle was decided
I was definately feeling schadenfreude, when he sait it was one sided
coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip
this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip
weak flips can eat shit, nonsensical wordplays is what this nerd is about
bet gamble thinks he can ex-crete, so I intend to put words in his mouth
trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot
splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot

Incredible · 03-21-2018, 07:19 PM

Lyfza Gamble:

"Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored
So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board"

Concrete:

"battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell
funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L"

"trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot
splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot"

Overall I think this battle wasn't that great. Seemed like gamble was trying to hard to execute and it just didn't work, wording seemed to be off a lot and didn't let it all flow together. Concrete had a nice opener feel like that was the best bar out of the battle. Concretes closer was nice too, wasn't feeling much in between. I also think that gamble over did the nameplays, too many imo and left it pretty bare. That's pretty much the most I can explain, I think Concrete got this. Was still an okay read, props for showing up and putting in an effort.

Habitat · 03-22-2018, 08:20 AM

You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you.
Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle.
concept had potential, fell flat as is
So keep it official, it's over you lost. Keep hope if you want...
Cus Creature in his mind that he's taking over, when really that's just what's controlling his thoughts.
didn't like this
I'd be surprised if you were to become worthy....
But we all c Condom when around you dicks, you'd think hed notice he's getting fucked over an done dirty.
not a fan of this
Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored
So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board.
this is better
Bitch this is war, Ull first need to Conquer ta see the victor,
..... y'all see the picture?
So this slaughter was meant for you Con, courtesy of this verse.
weak closer

vs

battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell
funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L
ok jab here
believe me as I tell, I was gonna vote but saw the battle was decided
I was definately feeling schadenfreude, when he sait it was one sided
aight
coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip
this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip
nah Russian roulette been done and this was nothing fresh
weak flips can eat shit, nonsensical wordplays is what this nerd is about
bet gamble thinks he can ex-crete, so I intend to put words in his mouth
don't think you meant to do this but your basically saying the words you're putting in his mouth are shit therefore shit talking yourself.
trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot
splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot
nah weak closer

I dunno who concrete is but he knows what hes doing. Gamble needs a little work but his converse line was good. I've got concrete here comfortably.

v/Concrete

DynamiCz · 03-22-2018, 11:58 AM

You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you.
Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle.

Ok, but it hit light

"Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored
So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board"

Nice

-------

battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell
funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L

Ok opener

coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip
this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip

Line was coo, just seen to many russian roulette lines

trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot
splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot

Ok, but really no sting to it

Props to both, I'm going with Concrete here. Just a better overall verse with more sting. Keep dropping Gamble! Respect...

V-Crete

Jabari Black · 03-23-2018, 10:08 PM

Crete took this one.

Gamble’s opener was pretty good. His best or second best bar of the verse in my opion. The next bar was a swing and a miss to me. You then ended with 3 straight “Con” flips. I would have given you points for them if they landed but they didn’t imo. I didn’t like the condom line, the converse line was good, but then the closer was pretty weak.

Concrete came out with a good opener. I liked it. I didn’t follow the second bar. Partly because I’m new, but I personally think you should set up personals in a way that any reader can get it like with the first bar. That’s just my take though.

Anyways, he Russian roulette was a pretty good line. The next line has potential but the execution was off. The punch line didn’t really have anything to do with the rest of the bar. Then the closer was cool.

Like I said, concrete took this one. Your word play and personal is what set you apart in this one.

Suthaveli · 03-25-2018, 10:39 AM

You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you.
Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle.
nah. saw ya approach, didn't wrk for me tho

So keep it official, it's over you lost. Keep hope if you want...
Cus Creature in his mind that he's taking over, when really that's just what's controlling his thoughts.
im hella lost on this one, kid

I'd be surprised if you were to become worthy....
But we all c Condom when around you dicks, you'd think hed notice he's getting fucked over an done dirty.
probably ur best so far. but concept is played & personally idc for short np unless many call him/her that. even so, Con is sooo common it takes away from me. i can't speak for others.

Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored
So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board.
sorry bro, im trying. but this is a no for me dog

Bitch this is war, Ull first need to Conquer ta see the victor,
..... y'all see the picture?
So this slaughter was meant for you Con, courtesy of this verse.
what?

vs

battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell
funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L
nice.

believe me as I tell, I was gonna vote but saw the battle was decided
I was definately feeling schadenfreude, when he sait it was one sided
coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip
this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip
weak flips can eat shit, nonsensical wordplays is what this nerd is about
bet gamble thinks he can ex-crete, so I intend to put words in his mouth
trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot
splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot

Lyfe gamble needs to work on quite a few things. i hope he sticks around to do so. his set ups where all over the place. punches had difficult landing, old concepts, needs to determine what's actually played, etc. really study some verses on here bruh.
Concrete verse was cool as a whole. Judging by some of his later bars i would say hes prolly an older textcee who also needs to get a feel for what is played & vice versa. his structure, swag & wording is pretty on.

mvgt- @Concrete

Schadenfreude · 03-25-2018, 02:05 PM

VOTE CONCRETE
Idk wtf Gamble was doing lol. Only bar that worked was 'converse', that rest were weak tbh.
Concrete wasn't amazing, just much better wording & concept structure than his opponent.

03-19-2018, 08:27 AM	#1
Cred The Biggest Join Date: Jan 2015 Posts: 3,254 Battle Record: 67-32 Accomplishments - Gun Bar King Champed - Fight Night 3 - Fight Night 10 - Fight Night 12 - Battle Arena League Rep Power: 85899380	Gamble 1-2 vs Concrete 1-0 - CONCRETE WINS Rules Due Dates: Verses are due Thursday MARCH 22 and will be open until Sunday. Battles that lack votes may close later. One sided battles may get closed early. Extensions are 24 hours Line Limit: Minimum of 8, maximum of 16 If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first. Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE! THERE’S BEEN A LOT OF COMPLAINTS ABOUT VOTING RECENTLY, IF THERE IS SOMEONE WHO YOU DON’T WANT TO VOTE IN YOUR BATTLE YOU MUST STATE THEIR NAME IN YOUR CHECK IN. IF IT’S A CRAZY AMOUNT OF PEOPLE THEN SORRY YOU’RE JUST A BITCH AND ALL VOTES WILL COUNT. AS PER ORC @gamble @Concrete

03-22-2018, 08:20 AM	#6
Habitat Make my day Join Date: Mar 2016 Posts: 742 Battle Record: 8-6 Champed - 1-2 LR Tournament Rep Power: 7519558	You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you. Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle. concept had potential, fell flat as is So keep it official, it's over you lost. Keep hope if you want... Cus Creature in his mind that he's taking over, when really that's just what's controlling his thoughts. didn't like this I'd be surprised if you were to become worthy.... But we all c Condom when around you dicks, you'd think hed notice he's getting fucked over an done dirty. not a fan of this Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board. this is better Bitch this is war, Ull first need to Conquer ta see the victor, ..... y'all see the picture? So this slaughter was meant for you Con, courtesy of this verse. weak closer vs battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L ok jab here believe me as I tell, I was gonna vote but saw the battle was decided I was definately feeling schadenfreude, when he sait it was one sided aight coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip nah Russian roulette been done and this was nothing fresh weak flips can eat shit, nonsensical wordplays is what this nerd is about bet gamble thinks he can ex-crete, so I intend to put words in his mouth don't think you meant to do this but your basically saying the words you're putting in his mouth are shit therefore shit talking yourself. trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot nah weak closer I dunno who concrete is but he knows what hes doing. Gamble needs a little work but his converse line was good. I've got concrete here comfortably. v/Concrete __________________

03-22-2018, 11:58 AM	#7
DynamiCz ..GunbaR MessiaH.. Join Date: Jan 2018 Location: GuN RanGe Posts: 762 Battle Record: 16-10 Champed - Battle Arena League Rep Power: 9829178	You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you. Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle. Ok, but it hit light "Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board" Nice ------- battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L Ok opener coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip Line was coo, just seen to many russian roulette lines trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot Ok, but really no sting to it Props to both, I'm going with Concrete here. Just a better overall verse with more sting. Keep dropping Gamble! Respect... V-Crete __________________ ...ThA New ErA...

03-23-2018, 10:08 PM	#8
Jabari Black Sun Tzu Join Date: Mar 2018 Location: Atlanta, GA Posts: 550 Battle Record: 13-6 Champed - Battle Arena League - 1-2 Punch League - Netcees Battle League - Netcees SOL Rep Power: 12764495	Crete took this one. Gamble’s opener was pretty good. His best or second best bar of the verse in my opion. The next bar was a swing and a miss to me. You then ended with 3 straight “Con” flips. I would have given you points for them if they landed but they didn’t imo. I didn’t like the condom line, the converse line was good, but then the closer was pretty weak. Concrete came out with a good opener. I liked it. I didn’t follow the second bar. Partly because I’m new, but I personally think you should set up personals in a way that any reader can get it like with the first bar. That’s just my take though. Anyways, he Russian roulette was a pretty good line. The next line has potential but the execution was off. The punch line didn’t really have anything to do with the rest of the bar. Then the closer was cool. Like I said, concrete took this one. Your word play and personal is what set you apart in this one. Last edited by Jabari Black; 03-24-2018 at 09:45 AM.

03-25-2018, 02:05 PM	#10
Schadenfreude Dynomite.. DYNOMITE!! Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 1,408 Battle Record: 42-22 Champed - Netcees Battle League (2x) - BA Tag Team Titles - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 21049081	VOTE CONCRETE Idk wtf Gamble was doing lol. Only bar that worked was 'converse', that rest were weak tbh. Concrete wasn't amazing, just much better wording & concept structure than his opponent. __________________ Aali hupatikana kwa ghali.

03-21-2018, 07:19 PM	#5
Incredible Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2016 Posts: 1,482 Battle Record: 6-15 Rep Power: 25972892	Lyfza Gamble: "Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board" Concrete: "battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L" "trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot" Overall I think this battle wasn't that great. Seemed like gamble was trying to hard to execute and it just didn't work, wording seemed to be off a lot and didn't let it all flow together. Concrete had a nice opener feel like that was the best bar out of the battle. Concretes closer was nice too, wasn't feeling much in between. I also think that gamble over did the nameplays, too many imo and left it pretty bare. That's pretty much the most I can explain, I think Concrete got this. Was still an okay read, props for showing up and putting in an effort.

03-25-2018, 10:39 AM	#9
Suthaveli Prayers won't help. Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: Baltimore, Md Posts: 851 Battle Record: 7-9 Rep Power: 16534019	You get sandwhiched between fists once I'm eager to hit you. Wit a mean right, and finish with a left, nasty. Im raw once it meat in the middle. nah. saw ya approach, didn't wrk for me tho So keep it official, it's over you lost. Keep hope if you want... Cus Creature in his mind that he's taking over, when really that's just what's controlling his thoughts. im hella lost on this one, kid I'd be surprised if you were to become worthy.... But we all c Condom when around you dicks, you'd think hed notice he's getting fucked over an done dirty. probably ur best so far. but concept is played & personally idc for short np unless many call him/her that. even so, Con is sooo common it takes away from me. i can't speak for others. Dumb thirsty, everything this bitch spits gets ignored So everytime we see a Converse we know its inevitable that it's ripped on the Board. sorry bro, im trying. but this is a no for me dog Bitch this is war, Ull first need to Conquer ta see the victor, ..... y'all see the picture? So this slaughter was meant for you Con, courtesy of this verse. what? vs battling Letterman last week your ass fell, cos you're weak as hell funny how you was out to get a letter, man - only to receive an L nice. believe me as I tell, I was gonna vote but saw the battle was decided I was definately feeling schadenfreude, when he sait it was one sided coming to text you lack a good grip, it's why I knew you would slip this gamble about to get Conned, like russian roulette with a full clip weak flips can eat shit, nonsensical wordplays is what this nerd is about bet gamble thinks he can ex-crete, so I intend to put words in his mouth trying to worm his way out, his presence is the equivalence to a maggot splitting votes 50\50 to avoid static, that truly amounts to 100% faggot Lyfe gamble needs to work on quite a few things. i hope he sticks around to do so. his set ups where all over the place. punches had difficult landing, old concepts, needs to determine what's actually played, etc. really study some verses on here bruh. Concrete verse was cool as a whole. Judging by some of his later bars i would say hes prolly an older textcee who also needs to get a feel for what is played & vice versa. his structure, swag & wording is pretty on. mvgt- @Concrete