12-18-2013, 03:23 AM | #1 |
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The Black Jesus Christ
Jesus Christ appeared in the golden flood lights; captive in joy;
basking in joy; he waved me forward; through the field of jasmine; overjoyed - with happiness; I blushed a blasphemous, flash of the void: I was ecstatic; I acted coy; In a trance; poised; in rags of decoy; under the sequoia tree; furthest expression; from that of annoyed. enchanted; the voice was pure passion deployed toying with the emotions; of those who inhabited troy; the masked-men; the black smith; the rabid, the droid all caught in my auras omega-blast and destroyed. the rabbit - runs across the field; faster then noise; the non-believers are captured; dispatched as employed angels; wing spans; that caused drafts that dampened the spirits of 'bad'; who Sigmund Freud would later psycho analyze; as cracked, language the lord would not entertain;ears clasped to avoid; 4 corners of earth - unknown to maps and tabloids; knowledge was power he had; in a bronze grasp of alloy; From the western alps that lined france - the geograph of Savoy to the windy city, ferocious flags of Illinois to the Vietnam veterans of the capital of Hanoi smiling; with gold teeth; dipping dumplings; splashing in soy in south east china; chatting in Amoy; decorative fish, ponds of red, white, yellow patterns of Koi the Hawaiian woman offers him a bowl of; 'Sweetest mashings of Poi' he travels around the world met with ever-lasting "Ahoy" he is elite - Hoi Oligoi his name is Roy Al. ''Captain Roy'' here to save planet earth from asteroid hemorrhoid 'king, you are not the Lord - perhaps it's a ploy' - Jesus Christ had returned - a black little boy
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12-18-2013, 03:47 AM | #2 |
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12-18-2013, 08:57 AM | #3 |
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cool little flex thingy
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12-18-2013, 09:36 AM | #4 |
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stop posting this
its just about my least favorite of your verses
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12-18-2013, 10:55 AM | #5 |
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What's dead bra talking about.
I love it |
12-18-2013, 11:36 AM | #6 |
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Reposting a verse already on page one, this time with your main account and different title?
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Someday, my sons will repost it too
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12-18-2013, 04:06 PM | #8 |
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Interesting. Why do you say that?
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12-18-2013, 05:23 PM | #9 | |
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stadilz, Frank? See u still handling business.
lol i don't know how to feel about this, tbh. In some cases, the wording seemed kind of forced - with the obvious purpose to carry that 'oy' rhyme scheme. ex: Quote:
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12-23-2013, 05:10 AM | #10 |
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this was interesting. a little off your usual 'thang', but i thought it was interesting. a little funny too. i'm gonna read this again.
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