09-21-2023, 06:26 AM | #1 |
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The Elephant
obnoxious, attention deficit, the elephant in the room
holding you hostage, with nonsense, maleficence is in bloom you've shown him hospice, he profits, his kind never repays or understands common courtesy, whenever he stays left to revel and bask, gasp, curious of this menaces past where he grew, of his senior, of which has rendered him mad endless, the tracks he's left, where he's grazed and has fed the stench amazes, questions raised, weather he's bathed or has cleansed such an offensive mannerism, surely, a matter of jest one would perceive, as bodily functions put that matter to rest comments of "my god", faces cringe, "whats wrong with you, man?" if looks could kill, there'd be a slaughter here, on all of our hands you know the type, dropped out, without a single degree asks you to spell the dumbest words, like simple, and tree derelict, ignorant, free, until he needs a place he can crash you go to sleep, he raids the fridge, leaves dirty plates and his trash he's gone before you wake, you still smell the lingering fumes your burning candles, go to eat, he didn't leave any food these sort of people are to abundant, poignant, pungent, the scum theres one in every room, family tree, black sheep, swept under the rug too many under the sun, probably under the influence of drugs a nuisance, a bug, the hardest person in the room to shut up his side of the story isn't that amusing to us, bad luck.. short end of the stick, victim, never passed him the buck the class act, who's class is absent, who's absence is adored Hard to ignore, has to have the last laugh, adament to the core you know the history, statistically, dysfunction comes of divorce bad parenting, transparency, cumbersome when hes bored told to play in traffic, go away, theres things more important Your pissing me off, find your friends, you know where the door is this dormant exchange of interactions, the typical cause that drives a kid who craves attention, off to prison, its wrong he sings a miserable song, out of sync, and out of tune.. but the elephant in the room, has no excuse to be rude Pretty wordy, i know. Sorry...
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09-28-2023, 12:14 AM | #2 |
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I fuck with this. Alot better than most the OMs being posted these days. Keep writing you still got it
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09-30-2023, 10:47 AM | #3 |
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I read it.
Sort of gave me vibes of that one joint bigbaby had up in here on the first page, maybe I read too much into it but other parts felt like you wrote this directed at me too. If you did, I see you, if you didn’t - Guess I better write more. Keep that pen moving! |
10-01-2023, 02:36 AM | #4 |
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Wasnt at bro. Thanks guys
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10-01-2023, 11:47 PM | #5 |
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if looks could kill, there'd be a slaughter here, on all of our hands
Amen Much love my guy, hope you’re well
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10-16-2023, 06:18 PM | #6 |
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Love the visuals and effective emotion!
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