All growed up now

[Geno]

Hard to describe
Everything ive seen and survived
I'm 42 now..
and I can't believe im alive
Never had the sort of parents from a normal arrangement
I'm a fuckin loser now, and that formulas basic
Cause my alcoholic Father's either drunk or hes stoned
Got my ass whooped with every single belt buckle he owned
Punishing blows, made me feel fuckin disowned
Anger built up in my soul
Hatred just wants to explode
Raising my brother myself
Deaf but he saw everything
He elevated early, i miss him
He's read I've been spittin
But he will never hear the words if he listens
And that hurts from a different, sort of personal image
We suffer from several sorts of burdens, with differences
Now my family is more insignificant
Since I've grown up -good riddance
It's been a miserable 6 or so years
I've witnessed more fears manifest
And the tears that I've wept over death
Over your headstone I've kept
So that nobody knows that I've let go
Its death over dishonor, click-clack, so let's go be honorable
Never have you ever known me to be bluffing
I've blown the stuffing out of every single thing that I've touched
And sent My love with a bullet and fragments of brains
Scattered across the unbalanced terrain
And I've showered in pain more than my share of times
It's paralyzed me to the world that im in
I wanna come with you, and let's be reborn again
I'm sort of a mess, and I'm finished enduring the wreck


A little unorthodox flow wise.. you'll catch on, or you wont.
Fuck

[dead man]

it'll be alright geno

your bro is proud of you

this was excellent. raw and honest and well written.

"Over your headstone I've kept
So that nobody knows that I've let go"

"sent My love with a bullet and fragments of brains
Scattered across the unbalanced terrain
And I've showered in pain more than my share of times
It's paralyzed me to the world that im in
I wanna come with you, and let's be reborn again"

yeeeeeeeee. classic.

be well, keep your head up guy. it will be ok.

[Geno]

All Love 'Gawdian'

[Objective]

Ye, I felt this too. Dead Man nailed it. Good shit, Geno

[Pakistani Hand Cannon]

heartful.

im glad you didnt filter it heavily through the process of tryna rhyme syllables & fitting a certain structure etc - which while maybe be technically proficient (id argue that), but ultimately actually compromises the art...or heart, whichever you feel.

He elevated early, i miss him

hardest (or, really softest...but that aint "cool") line to me. no wordplay. fuck what you rhymed with it. just. simple. truth.

Punishing blows, made me feel fuckin disowned

it aint the licks that hurt, right? tough.

these two though...

Hatred just wants to explode
Raising my brother myself

might just speak to your character. if you know what i mean? i know personally, older brothers who aint get treated right...but aint look to raise the younger, & instead the perpetuated the abuse.

anyway, love.

head up, & heart open.