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Old 09-21-2023, 06:26 AM   #1
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obnoxious, attention deficit, the elephant in the room
holding you hostage, with nonsense, maleficence is in bloom
you've shown him hospice, he profits, his kind never repays
or understands common courtesy, whenever he stays
left to revel and bask, gasp, curious of this menaces past
where he grew, of his senior, of which has rendered him mad
endless, the tracks he's left, where he's grazed and has fed
the stench amazes, questions raised, weather he's bathed or has cleansed
such an offensive mannerism, surely, a matter of jest
one would perceive, as bodily functions put that matter to rest
comments of "my god", faces cringe, "whats wrong with you, man?"
if looks could kill, there'd be a slaughter here, on all of our hands
you know the type, dropped out, without a single degree
asks you to spell the dumbest words, like simple, and tree
derelict, ignorant, free, until he needs a place he can crash
you go to sleep, he raids the fridge, leaves dirty plates and his trash
he's gone before you wake, you still smell the lingering fumes
your burning candles, go to eat, he didn't leave any food
these sort of people are to abundant, poignant, pungent, the scum
theres one in every room, family tree, black sheep, swept under the rug
too many under the sun, probably under the influence of drugs
a nuisance, a bug, the hardest person in the room to shut up
his side of the story isn't that amusing to us, bad luck..
short end of the stick, victim, never passed him the buck
the class act, who's class is absent, who's absence is adored
Hard to ignore, has to have the last laugh, adament to the core
you know the history, statistically, dysfunction comes of divorce
bad parenting, transparency, cumbersome when hes bored
told to play in traffic, go away, theres things more important
Your pissing me off, find your friends, you know where the door is
this dormant exchange of interactions, the typical cause
that drives a kid who craves attention, off to prison, its wrong
he sings a miserable song, out of sync, and out of tune..
but the elephant in the room, has no excuse to be rude


Pretty wordy, i know. Sorry...
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Old 09-28-2023, 12:14 AM   #2
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I fuck with this. Alot better than most the OMs being posted these days. Keep writing you still got it
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Old 09-30-2023, 10:47 AM   #3
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I read it.

Sort of gave me vibes of that one joint bigbaby had up in here on the first page, maybe I read too much into it but other parts felt like you wrote this directed at me too. If you did, I see you, if you didn’t - Guess I better write more.

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Old 10-01-2023, 02:36 AM   #4
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Wasnt at bro. Thanks guys
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