07-10-2014, 08:20 AM | #1 |
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wat ya think
Hip hop is not hypnotic its hot and drops tip top sonic bops to those who hits bongs and vomits ironic i wanna tipronic with an ill bonnet, from this crop kit i will profit from pills cronic and brazils tropics, im moving to quick honest, i promise t sit still comet f bombs still plummet this planet spins when its on its x y onyx is a rock and a tectonic plot to shock the whole world and show wats its got historic crocks still Rome like a frozen Italy ill expose em literally leave em holding a torch like I've stolen the statue of liberty you have just entered a chapel of misery chap you listen this chapter is not capped out wat it is to be Only captain activity could knee cap ten men acting witty sympathy is simply captured and kept intact in captivity infact deliberately so i can kick back and keep my dignity react or disagree and you'll instantly see a visious me i will rip your knees insert a different piece tat would artificially reduce flexibility next ill drill your teeth practice dentistry i cant drive my axles bent you see but i will drive this axe in dentally tats essentially a recipe for actin mentally attack an enemy wit weaponry hi jack his Bentley then direct a Henry to do a complimentary cleaning frenzy be clean temporarily
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07-10-2014, 10:19 AM | #2 |
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sick flow, keep expanding your vocab, its coming along good so far, about 2 years ago i was doing the exact same style as you. Work on branching out into storys, lengthining, thickening concepts.
I would mainly focus on expanding in this style: "captain activity could knee cap ten men acting witty sympathy is simply captured and kept intact in captivity infact" The rhyme scheme was very clever, repeating roots: "cap, act, cap, act, simp, simp, cap, act, cap, act," not to mention the sick multis, but you obviously have mastered them already, at least in a rap dedicated to multis skill. Try keeping that same level of multi skill in a rap with a steady topic, push yourself.
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07-10-2014, 10:38 AM | #3 |
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Didn't really like it tbh.
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07-10-2014, 02:50 PM | #4 |
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holy fuck mitch, you have been this bad for 2 years?
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07-10-2014, 03:25 PM | #5 |
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You are literally the worst rapper on this site
Mostly because you don't actually rap, but also because even when you do it's gay as fuck. I am such a better rapper than you that it's not even funny anymore. You might actually be autistic.
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07-10-2014, 04:02 PM | #6 |
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Oh really man? You should tell me more about your delusions over sucking my dick and then u can play me ur songs while i fuck ur girl
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07-10-2014, 04:03 PM | #7 |
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jk u dont got a girl bud, but if you draw a picture of a cute one u fantasize about i can cut a hole in it and have my way
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07-10-2014, 04:53 PM | #8 |
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It wasn't bad dude. Some bits reminded me of Em when he was good. The first couple lines didn't make sense, one part in particular though after was fckin ridiculously flowy.
Keep it up man. My only advice is try to make it more coherent. Some of it just seems like random rhyming words. |
07-10-2014, 05:00 PM | #9 |
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Word....seemed hard to follow at times content wise....but the rhyme schemes there....parts flowed smooth as hell juz hard to understand what the point u gettin across is
Still a nice piece tho HoLLa |
07-11-2014, 07:47 AM | #10 |
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Tat was just a quick freestyle verse, sound for comps
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07-11-2014, 01:01 PM | #11 |
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U wanna tipronic with an ill bonnett ?
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07-11-2014, 01:13 PM | #12 |
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Ye so i gotta make profit first from weed e and coke(brazils tropics) haha carbon fiber bonnet be good enough lol
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07-11-2014, 01:42 PM | #13 |
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ok, so to be real. this is just way to much. you need to focuss on making sense. none of this makes any sense at all really. i mean i get a couple of shits you were saying. but it wasnt ill, or dope. it was just a bunch of words put together in a cool scheme to rhyme. that i will give you. but even when i wrote in this type of way it still made sense, and it still made points and delivered actual content
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