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Old 06-26-2020, 02:36 AM   #1
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A residual haunt, shes gone, ive been miserably lost
She walks accross the living room, pauses, visually flawless
Then she dissapears, i zone, and sit here alone
Ashtray overflow, her ghost was ciggarette smoke
Nicotine stained walls, coffee splashing my jeans
Another dose of caffeine, grinds trapped in my teeth
12 cup pot brewing, folgers, how i usually do it
To stuck in my ways, ill never switch over to keurig
Besides, its 10 bucks, just for 12 little cups..
Premeasured, and its never to the strength that i want
I like to adjust, but thats the price you pay for convenience
Thank god theres other options, either take it or leave it
Im just sayin', to each his own, i could never conform
Ideas i kick around, my 3rd or 4th cup of joe for the morning
The best part of waking up, isnt whats in your cup..
Its my hallucination, that my girl is ready to fuck
Ears perked, beers perched, its beer-30 at last
I swear to god if she dont give it up im stealin her ass
Ive switched habits, gone black..
opened the door to my liquer cabinet
I can hear the distant laughter as my demons approach
Butted out the ciggarrette & lit the weed in my roach
Jesus im toast, the shit i'd do to see my inhibitions play slolem
She told me i aint shit..
took a long look at myself, said this bitch is the problem
Even though deep inside, i agree with her comment
Im'a still do me, why should i give a fuck
My bitch named misery loves company, invite her to come
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Old 06-26-2020, 03:00 AM   #2
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Pieces of this were cool, and evoked some good imagery, especially in the opening few lines, feel like you rambled a bit on the coffee but it was something I agreed with and it didn't really feel out of place per say just dragged a little long, liked the imagery like I said and the closing lines wrapped it up nicely, felt audio-esque. Good drop
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Old 06-26-2020, 11:04 PM   #3
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Honestly man most of this didn’t even rhyme to me and i couldn’t get past that
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Old 06-26-2020, 11:18 PM   #4
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I can see your gonna have a hard time around here.
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Old 06-26-2020, 11:23 PM   #5
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You have no idea, boss
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Old 06-26-2020, 11:25 PM   #6
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Honestly tho, I liked what you’re rhyming about... better than most of the stuff I’ve seen on here, but bruh, It don’t rhyme to me at all lol
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