04-08-2020, 12:56 AM | #1 |
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Thrown...
Ayo...
Wicked shit, inflicted in conflicts to settle the cost I kick sickness, this collection of bars will be settin' it off Ima get to feedin', my blood thirsts set to exalt But fuck beef, I roll whole cows in pepper & salt You can act like Norton will protect you from the blows I'm strikin' But spyware filters didn't stop the Ebola & this current Corona virus Nah fa real though, ain't got no enemies Just talkin' some shit But I'll break gang member legs 'til they walkin' like Crips When you're barkin' your spits, Fuck feedin' you dog a fist is my only handout & gettin' hard ons from one's self are your only stand outs Basehead wordplay, these apes think it's flawless If you wanna force it more I suggest you go rape a thesaurus My mouth is a wound, that bleeds verbs & preaches murder Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon You come with not the best punches found, I reach further Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin You can't pass go bro, you've played your position I'm only statin' my mission, it's only decay I envision My sense of decency is straight up wayward & missin' & I've been demonized by three major religions Sway with the force & bang, spinnin' this enforcer slang Such a skilled Orator, I could talk Yin into divorcin' Yang. |
04-25-2020, 12:14 AM | #2 |
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Cheers for the love...
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04-25-2020, 01:01 AM | #3 | |
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cool rhyme..
"My mouth is a wound, that bleeds verbs & preaches murder Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon" dope.. |
04-25-2020, 01:08 AM | #4 |
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Thankyou...we're friends again lol.
Appreciate the feed man. |
04-25-2020, 02:56 AM | #5 | |
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lol.. your welcome bro.. friends for sure.
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04-25-2020, 04:40 AM | #6 |
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How's about we swash this beef, it's ANZAC day here, let veterans be remembered...is all I ask.
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04-25-2020, 02:14 PM | #7 |
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Nice piece
Liked: Just talkin' some shit But I'll break gang member legs 'til they walkin' like Crips Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon |
05-01-2020, 02:22 AM | #8 |
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Thanks...I'll return when I've a minute.
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05-02-2020, 12:41 AM | #9 |
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This was good. Had some funny lines, and MAYBE a line or 2 I felt were a bit too long. God knows I liked this though, it was entertaining & clever
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05-03-2020, 12:26 PM | #10 |
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Nice strong braggodocious verse man. Standard topic, but I liked the compounds and the imagery you put into this. The 'crip walk' punch was a standout line for sure. Made me crack a smile. Good sense of rhythm and vocab choice. I'll be checking out for more of your stuff.
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05-03-2020, 11:35 PM | #11 |
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Good shit Exis..
My only real complaint with your posts is that they feel extra wordy a lot of times... I mean you smash a few to many syllables into each line for my liking. Thats just me though so dont take it as something serious. Just one mans opinion. This shit was dope to me.. You come with not the best punches found, I reach further Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin Stay active!
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