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Old 04-08-2020, 12:56 AM   #1
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Wicked shit, inflicted in conflicts to settle the cost
I kick sickness, this collection of bars will be settin' it off
Ima get to feedin', my blood thirsts set to exalt
But fuck beef, I roll whole cows in pepper & salt
You can act like Norton will protect you from the blows I'm strikin'
But spyware filters didn't stop the Ebola & this current Corona virus
Nah fa real though, ain't got no enemies
Just talkin' some shit
But I'll break gang member legs 'til they walkin' like Crips
When you're barkin' your spits,
Fuck feedin' you dog a fist is my only handout
& gettin' hard ons from one's self are your only stand outs
Basehead wordplay, these apes think it's flawless
If you wanna force it more I suggest you go rape a thesaurus
My mouth is a wound, that bleeds verbs & preaches murder
Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon
You come with not the best punches found, I reach further
Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin
You can't pass go bro, you've played your position
I'm only statin' my mission, it's only decay I envision
My sense of decency is straight up wayward & missin'
& I've been demonized by three major religions
Sway with the force & bang, spinnin' this enforcer slang
Such a skilled Orator, I could talk Yin into divorcin' Yang.
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Old 04-25-2020, 12:14 AM   #2
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Cheers for the love...
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Old 04-25-2020, 01:01 AM   #3
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cool rhyme..

"My mouth is a wound, that bleeds verbs & preaches murder
Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon"

dope..
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Old 04-25-2020, 01:08 AM   #4
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Thankyou...we're friends again lol.

Appreciate the feed man.
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Old 04-25-2020, 02:56 AM   #5
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Thankyou...we're friends again lol.

Appreciate the feed man.
lol.. your welcome bro.. friends for sure.
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Old 04-25-2020, 04:40 AM   #6
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How's about we swash this beef, it's ANZAC day here, let veterans be remembered...is all I ask.
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Old 04-25-2020, 02:14 PM   #7
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Nice piece

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Just talkin' some shit
But I'll break gang member legs 'til they walkin' like Crips

Dire sounds formed of iron nouns, a steel sermon
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Thanks...I'll return when I've a minute.
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This was good. Had some funny lines, and MAYBE a line or 2 I felt were a bit too long. God knows I liked this though, it was entertaining & clever
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Nice strong braggodocious verse man. Standard topic, but I liked the compounds and the imagery you put into this. The 'crip walk' punch was a standout line for sure. Made me crack a smile. Good sense of rhythm and vocab choice. I'll be checking out for more of your stuff.

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Good shit Exis..

My only real complaint with your posts is that they feel extra wordy a lot of times... I mean you smash a few to many syllables into each line for my liking. Thats just me though so dont take it as something serious. Just one mans opinion.

This shit was dope to me..

You come with not the best punches found, I reach further
Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin

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Nice strong braggodocious verse man. Standard topic, but I liked the compounds and the imagery you put into this. The 'crip walk' punch was a standout line for sure. Made me crack a smile. Good sense of rhythm and vocab choice. I'll be checking out for more of your stuff.

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I'll get @ you're stuff, thanks...
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Good shit Exis..

My only real complaint with your posts is that they feel extra wordy a lot of times... I mean you smash a few to many syllables into each line for my liking. Thats just me though so dont take it as something serious. Just one mans opinion.

This shit was dope to me..

You come with not the best punches found, I reach further
Got imagery with a deadly sting like the last pic of Steve Irwin

Stay active!
Gracias, & you're right...I have this bullshit habit of extendin' lines when I literally know they should be half the size yet don't correct it :/ Thanks for the feed @Genocide & good lookin' out @emurgencee, I'll rtf fam.
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