Venezuela VooDoo

[Mr. J]

I'm lost to a singular vision, no polarities subside
no periphery pride, no conscience of the blindness inside
in light the thought has been shining so bright...
I'm in disbelief at myself for looking deprived...
no contact has shown me the evil that's living in I

Back to square one, the logic is the same
the cross and the blame, this debacle and shame
the dirt and the earth, the caskets locking embrace
the key and the lock with the body rotted away
I'm sorry to say, it's been a problem these monotonous ways
I swear you should be hit harder then Bobby Bouche...
in the lobby, touche, I'm waiting to see if there's room
between, "my heart hurts" " I'm the shit" blah blah boo...
Down in the valley, in the caverns where dragons roam
I'm hitting on fire flowers with my princess packing bowls...
tortoise shells...one blew you away when you riding in first
you were Lucifer but I've been God & supplying the earth
I'm clipping wings from Minotaurs to Angels...
I'm happy as long as dinner's off the payroll
messing with you is literally wasted time...
leave them ho's sprinting...they basic dimes...
shit I'm bored now...
talk bout Tom Ford now
give me an award now...
chilling in a whorehouse
saying hi to your moms

[Zen]

Down in the valley, in the caverns where dragons roam
I'm hitting on fire flowers with my princess packing bowls...
^^Nice.

It's been awhile since I've seen you on here. Where you been? Anyway, this was dope. Maybe not the quality that I'm used to from you, but your unique wording is still here. Good to see you back. Here's you a free up.

[Kin]

concept was kinda out there....overall some nice ideas...juz thought they could be made with a lil' more creativity...

like how u kept it short tho'...solid verse, and some nice imagery in there..

good drop

[theMuzzl3]

Originally Posted by Mr. J

I'm lost to a singular vision, no polarities subside
no periphery pride, no conscience of the blindness inside
in light the thought has been shining so bright...
I'm in disbelief at myself for looking deprived...
no contact has shown me the evil that's living in I

Back to square one, the logic is the same
the cross and the blame, this debacle and shame
the dirt and the earth, the caskets locking embrace
the key and the lock with the body rotted away
I'm sorry to say, it's been a problem these monotonous ways

These first 10 lines caught my interest the most. Its like a creative, introspective look at yourself... brings thoughts of reincarnation, and the thought being bright... then you looking deprived. The lines make me think of several things that I can not put into words. Well done.

I think the rest of it was fair, at best; concentrating on dragons and other imaginary beings from WOW, or whatever game you've been wasting your time on.

I'm gonna give you a "POS'd".

Never see people say "Pos'd"... just "negged"... maybe I haven't been on here long enough.

[Mr. J]

Lol @ WoW

but thanks yall

[Mr. J]

You didn't like my red bull reference...
I should have used the de niro line :(

[Coup]

no contact has shown me the evil that's living in I

never seen a line end like this, using an I as the end rhyme ...this adds style and a voice that is folk-lure like and fable like. Original

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In this verse, ya seemed to stand for everything and for nothingness, saying everything but saying nothing..

[Mr. J]

Magic