Burd vs Dominate - DOM WINS

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Netcees SOL Season II
Week 1

Due Thursday, Jun 30th

Minimum - 8 lines
Max - 12 lines
24hr ext given on request

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NO feeding
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@Burd @Dominate

[Dominate]

Hey buddy.

[Orc]

Alright mate, fancy seeing you here

[Orc]

Old lady gotta hole that’d fit my whole arm, it’s obscene
My goodness. Girl’s got such a Wide Open Space it’s an Architects dream
BROOO your career choice would be funny as a feature
What a story. The student who grew up to make the same money as his teacher
Tiny penis. Huge ego. Unbelievable hype
Dog. U put another Shrimp on the Barbie every time you sleep with ur wife
+ You a 49% rapist. Ain’t no need to rush it G
It’s wild. She be yelling “It’s Almost Dry” & ain’t ever heard of Pusha T

[Dominate]

Laser aimed at your core, Ima let it air there square
Empty the clip til the beam comes out ya stomach lookin like a Care Bear Stare
My whole squad carry tools, don’t try to fuck w/ the king pal
Sega Genesis Sonic: Run Into those Animals & every one of them Rings Out
Wondering where your girl’s been? Ask if you feel doubtful
She’ll start w/ “this is hard to say” then tell you I gave her a reallll mouthful
It’s porno music when I call her phone, she had the ringtone changed for me
You been changing your Ring Tone too - at the salon getting your anus bleached

[Answer]

Old lady gotta hole that’d fit my whole arm, it’s obscene
My goodness. Girl’s got such a Wide Open Space it’s an Architects dream

kinda funny, a little bit "yo mama" so it kinda comes off a little cheesy but decent

BROOO your career choice would be funny as a feature
What a story. The student who grew up to make the same money as his teacher

wasnt really feeling this one tbh

Tiny penis. Huge ego. Unbelievable hype
Dog. U put another Shrimp on the Barbie every time you sleep with ur wife

eh, I know the shrimp on the barbie thing has been done against him before and this didnt feel unique enough to seem worth it

+ You a 49% rapist. Ain’t no need to rush it G
It’s wild. She be yelling “It’s Almost Dry” & ain’t ever heard of Pusha T

eh ok, these sort of song/album title bars are as old as time




Laser aimed at your core, Ima let it air there square
Empty the clip til the beam comes out ya stomach lookin like a Care Bear Stare

the stare part of this feels a little necessary and detracts more than it adds to it imo, but dope otherwise

My whole squad carry tools, don’t try to fuck w/ the king pal
Sega Genesis Sonic: Run Into those Animals & every one of them Rings Out

ive seen the general idea done a lot so the creativity factor is lacking, but this is well worded

Wondering where your girl’s been? Ask if you feel doubtful
She’ll start w/ “this is hard to say” then tell you I gave her a reallll mouthful

eh i get what you're attempting but i dont feel like it translates to me the way it shouldve

It’s porno music when I call her phone, she had the ringtone changed for me
You been changing your Ring Tone too - at the salon getting your anus bleached

lol this is kinda funny, it's definitely creative but also kinda gross. not a haymaker but it works



tbh I know orc is dope and expected a bit more from him. I also have a love/hate relationship with these short battles. I like that they're easy to vote on, but you're both top tier writers and I was hoping to see more of a spectacle. Still, solid match but I think Dom got this convincingly enough

v/ Dom

[Saint]

Orc, liked the wording but this verse read a bit rushed concept/punch wise. Shrimp was alright but I liked the flip blues did better, ur opener was decent, fresh. Didn't like other 2 aside from wording.

Dom attacked more.. opener an closer were good, no misses in this short battle from his side. Sonic I've seen similar, aight, other did too, but still enough here.

V Dom

[Adverse]

Orc verse came off as very rushed to me, I don’t know just felt like there was some potential in each bar but they all just kind of fell flat and could have benefited from some rewording and proofreading. Maybe that’s just me though. Dom definitely didn’t blow me away either but I think his wording was more damaging, there weren’t any real haymakers here though.

Orc had his opener, and I might give him shrimp on the Barbie, but I feel like it wasn’t really demeaning as it should have been.

Dom had closer, care bear was okay if not a little wordy and Sonic was aight

I’d give it to Dom for the more aggressive approach. Plenty of misses here but hope we can see y’all run it back

V/Dom

[evaD]

Orc

Opener was disappointing
Like the teacher bar, not overly clever but witty and personal
Loved shrimp on the barbie
Pusha T too basic


Dom
Opener was nice
I did a sonic rings out one once but this is cool
Mouthful was just ok
Ring tone was hilarious


Loved ring tone and shrimp. I’ve Dom with less misses (2 to 1)

Vote dominate

[Aero]

Orc:

BROOO your career choice would be funny as a feature
What a story. The student who grew up to make the same money as his teacher
LOL, underrated
Tiny penis. Huge ego. Unbelievable hype
Dog. U put another Shrimp on the Barbie every time you sleep with ur wife
Kinda gave him a compliment on the Barbie wife but this was funny

Dom:

My whole squad carry tools, don’t try to fuck w/ the king pal
Sega Genesis Sonic: Run Into those Animals & every one of them Rings Out
Nice
It’s porno music when I call her phone, she had the ringtone changed for me
You been changing your Ring Tone too - at the salon getting your anus bleached
lol I'm visibly upset that I didn't think of this

Nice battle guys.

[White LGI]

Vote dom

[NYCSPITZ]

I got

Doms first 2 vs

Shrimp line

V/dom