09-13-2018, 06:42 PM | #1 |
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09-18-2018, 06:22 PM | #2 | |
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it’s always repeatedly ‘over ya head.’ I’ve seen u vote in my battles I’ll kill this dude and take all his dough. fucking w/des was ur mistake might have been my birthday yesterday but today u getting lit up for the cake lines all fall apart at the tipping point. I could care less what this fag brought he may have killed it on flex, but des don’t give a fuck about a black thought gunbargunbargunbar...can we get some wordplay or a funny pun? every single bar got a shot in it... verse reads like the night u turned 21 and mine reads like the day that u died bitch. get checked fast & run to jesus cuz I’m taking black off the board with these angles and stacking up the pieces |
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09-18-2018, 06:56 PM | #3 |
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If it’s a problem - I’ll fix it quick. This shotty’ll lift a bitch/
12 to the side of ya dome! I got the gauge in ya ear like a hipster chick/ If you act tough...I’ll catch you in ya Dodge Pickup and let Sparks fly/ 2 MACs dump! If you CDs Flash n front of ya RAM, it’ll be a hard drive/ You ridin deep? I’ll send ya whole squad to heaven when the cal lift up/ I’ll solve the problem when I subtract em and send em to the other side like algebra/ Don’t give a fuck if ya team with you. 30 in the clip...I’ll let something mean hit you/ Dome shot from a banana clip....the ‘curve’ going to his head like self esteem issues/ Infrared scope when I’m creeping up. One to the chest’ll have u bleedin scrub/ You think ‘Black light’? I’ll pull a beam out on the scene n have you seeing blood/ |
09-18-2018, 07:08 PM | #4 | ||
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jabaris opener was nice that hipster chick shit hahaha, gauge to ya ear like a hipster chick thats dope to me. the second bar was real creative but wasnt hard and the dodge pickup set up was forced but it still hit i like it. that math bar was heat to me, tie ins were all there. that self esteem bar i wasnt feelin it idk, just wasnt diggin the whole vibe of the bar. black light was fire to me as well, dope verse bro this was a dope battle. hope it gets the votes it deserves. i got jb here with one more hit but not a blow out and either could win. good read jb |
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09-19-2018, 07:52 PM | #5 |
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If it’s a problem - I’ll fix it quick. This shotty’ll lift a bitch/ 12 to the side of ya dome! I got the gauge in ya ear like a hipster chick/ This was ok If you act tough...I’ll catch you in ya Dodge Pickup and let Sparks fly/ 2 MACs dump! If you CDs Flash n front of ya RAM, it’ll be a hard drive/ Not too bad here You ridin deep? I’ll send ya whole squad to heaven when the cal lift up/ I’ll solve the problem when I subtract em and send em to the other side like algebra/ This was ok Don’t give a fuck if ya team with you. 30 in the clip...I’ll let something mean hit you/ Dome shot from a banana clip....the ‘curve’ going to his head like self esteem issues/ Clever Infrared scope when I’m creeping up. One to the chest’ll have u bleedin scrub/ You think ‘Black light’? I’ll pull a beam out on the scene n have you seeing blood/ Nice ending Destroyer u fucking won that shit too? Looool... yo I’m not even rattled it’s always repeatedly ‘over ya head.’ I’ve seen u vote in my battles Cool opening bar here I’ll kill this dude and take all his dough. fucking w/des was ur mistake might have been my birthday yesterday but today u getting lit up for the cake Meh just ok lines all fall apart at the tipping point. I could care less what this fag brought he may have killed it on flex, but des don’t give a fuck about a black thought Nice gunbargunbargunbar...can we get some wordplay or a funny pun? every single bar got a shot in it... verse reads like the night u turned 21 Cool here and mine reads like the day that u died bitch. get checked fast & run to jesus cuz I’m taking black off the board with these angles and stacking up the pieces Just ok Idk this battle was ok thought I was going to see better lines from both actually. After breaking down and rereading I give the slight edge to JB. |
09-19-2018, 10:13 PM | #6 |
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u fucking won that shit too? Looool... yo I’m not even rattled
it’s always repeatedly ‘over ya head.’ I’ve seen u vote in my battles -This is ok. I’ll kill this dude and take all his dough. fucking w/des was ur mistake might have been my birthday yesterday but today u getting lit up for the cake -Again, just ok. Seems to easy. lines all fall apart at the tipping point. I could care less what this fag brought he may have killed it on flex, but des don’t give a fuck about a black thought -Cool gunbargunbargunbar...can we get some wordplay or a funny pun? every single bar got a shot in it... verse reads like the night u turned 21 -Ok and mine reads like the day that u died bitch. get checked fast & run to jesus cuz I’m taking black off the board with these angles and stacking up the pieces -Cool but I feel like the Checkers thing I only got from context clues. I know you said “checked” but it took me a couple times to see it. So, no misses here, Des. But nothing stood out as dope. Just a solid consistent verse. If it’s a problem - I’ll fix it quick. This shotty’ll lift a bitch/ 12 to the side of ya dome! I got the gauge in ya ear like a hipster chick/ -Ok. Kinda simple If you act tough...I’ll catch you in ya Dodge Pickup and let Sparks fly/ 2 MACs dump! If you CDs Flash n front of ya RAM, it’ll be a hard drive/ -So, I see you trying to make more connections and I like that because in the past a flaw I think you had, at least in my eyes, was just being too simple. So, the overall concept would be good but there wasn’t enough creativity to take the line over the top. You tried to get more creative with the tie ins here. The problem is the overarching concept itself kind of missed for me. Think you could’ve dropped me w/o the whole Ram/Hard drive thing and maybe it would’ve hit more. Keep trying stuff like this tho. You ridin deep? I’ll send ya whole squad to heaven when the cal lift up/ I’ll solve the problem when I subtract em and send em to the other side like algebra/ -I thought this was cool. Don’t give a fuck if ya team with you. 30 in the clip...I’ll let something mean hit you/ Dome shot from a banana clip....the ‘curve’ going to his head like self esteem issues/ -Wasn’t feeling this. Infrared scope when I’m creeping up. One to the chest’ll have u bleedin scrub/ You think ‘Black light’? I’ll pull a beam out on the scene n have you seeing blood/ -I liked this. Self nameplays are normally frowned upon but this one was cool. Everything tied in nicely. A bit more up and down than Des but still a solid verse. Super close, gize. Props to both. I had to read it another 3 times after breaking it down. But in the end I have JB. Simply because I think algebra and black light were my favorite lines from the battle. So, I’ll lean JB but this is closer than where votes stand now. Vote-JB |
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09-20-2018, 11:35 AM | #8 |
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u fucking won that shit too? Looool... yo I’m not even rattled
it’s always repeatedly ‘over ya head.’ I’ve seen u vote in my battles ok personal but bars critiquing bars are always just ok at best I’ll kill this dude and take all his dough. fucking w/des was ur mistake might have been my birthday yesterday but today u getting lit up for the cake cool, haven't seen this concept lines all fall apart at the tipping point. I could care less what this fag brought he may have killed it on flex, but des don’t give a fuck about a black thought ok gunbargunbargunbar...can we get some wordplay or a funny pun? every single bar got a shot in it... verse reads like the night u turned 21 dope and mine reads like the day that u died bitch. get checked fast & run to jesus cuz I’m taking black off the board with these angles and stacking up the pieces cool 7 vs If it’s a problem - I’ll fix it quick. This shotty’ll lift a bitch/ 12 to the side of ya dome! I got the gauge in ya ear like a hipster chick/ ok If you act tough...I’ll catch you in ya Dodge Pickup and let Sparks fly/ 2 MACs dump! If you CDs Flash n front of ya RAM, it’ll be a hard drive/ mac/truck, CD/see deez, RAM/truck are all played. putting them together doesn't make any of them suddenly good. Also, you end it by making it about computer hardware and none if it applies to computer hardware in any way lol You ridin deep? I’ll send ya whole squad to heaven when the cal lift up/ I’ll solve the problem when I subtract em and send em to the other side like algebra/ dope, probably been done but I haven't seen it and this was worded really well Don’t give a fuck if ya team with you. 30 in the clip...I’ll let something mean hit you/ Dome shot from a banana clip....the ‘curve’ going to his head like self esteem issues/ nah Infrared scope when I’m creeping up. One to the chest’ll have u bleedin scrub/ You think ‘Black light’? I’ll pull a beam out on the scene n have you seeing blood/ cool 5 v/ destro he was more consistent. JB alegebra line might've been my favorite but the weird cluttered mac/ram/cd bar was really bad and wasn't feeling the curve one. cool read though |
09-20-2018, 11:41 AM | #9 |
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09-20-2018, 12:03 PM | #10 | ||
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Fire battle Damn def battle of the week Impressed by both here Got JB by a small edge cuz I laughed out loud at self esteem bar Des killed this shit tho I could see either winning
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09-20-2018, 12:20 PM | #11 |
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Des Opener was fire. Black thought flex bar was crisp and dope as a nameplay. Cake was light. But that closer and the bar shots... I mean I appreciate the personal angle in bar shots but that's mad played bro you know that you been around here long enough.
No hate though those bars work but concepts seem lackin. You knoq your bar is way higher then this. Jab opener was ok. Then Wording set up everything went wrong in ram cd Mac bar. I did appreciate the creativity though.algebra bar is absolute fire but... Doesn't rhyme in the slightest to me.. don't see how it can rhyme for you yanks either. But meh fire idea and punchline was worded well. Curve and self esteem issues is really good but the whole dome wording is stale on me a bit. I'm being pernickety with that a bit just would of used a different word here or in first bar. That's preference. Closer coo but could of been executed to be harsher. Ahhh tough one. Des had two very meh concepts for me two fire bars and a light jab. Jab had some cool creative stuff and algebra was fire to.me but then was married by no end rhyme. Total miss in the Mac ram lark for me. Opener wasn't that hard on rereading. Curve was cool. Tough tough tough. Going to give des the nod here. He didn't have an outright miss but is a total pervert for using the bar shot bar in 2018 lmao. Vote Des Good battle both |
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Even tho it was nothing but gun bars I think JB got this. Des wasn't bad just coulda done more w/ his verse imo Close but v/ JB Tryna see more outta JB tho like some wp/personals |
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09-20-2018, 01:22 PM | #13 |
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5-3 JB
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