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Old 02-03-2020, 08:44 PM   #1
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A warrior landlord on a chrome horse
Who came to enforce the law upon thy tenants
Pay rent or get split with the flaming sword of “Divine Vengeance”
My mind visits the prison realm that binds benign spirits
To the flesh of the dying chemist who chose science over magic
To try living life as a mortal with defined limits (describe physics)
“I’m nigh finished”, sighed Einstein when he lied about his life’s mission
The spacetime collision made by a god with omniscience
The plot thickens. The Mother Box is not tickin.
I’m stuck in a hot kitchen of gluttony
Bruce Lee kickin his way through a maze full of Butterbeans
“It’s troubling”, uttered Palpatine to Darth Maul
I’m not yaw...I’ve crawled from the depths of Tartarus
To show you all what a martyr is. Swallowed flames
And gargled lit bottles of arsenic, carbonated water & vodka, bitch
Pardon my vernacular and awful French, talkin shit
Like permaculture enthusiasts. I’m usually the booziest
Loser in a room full of lunatics, swigin Louis the 13th
While Lieutenant Dan dances in the gloom of a lunar eclipse
Louisiana vampire with a flu-bite, stay cocooned in a tomb
Until you fruit flies are consumed by a crude type ...of Coronavirus
Hazmat suits and crucifixes for the few survivors
Dump the rest in a pool full of fuel then produce a fire
But better be immune to the fumes of the human fibers
Or book a room on the Moon when they nukin China

— The Lewd Messiah Or Truthful Liar?
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Old 02-04-2020, 12:03 AM   #2
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Old 02-05-2020, 09:02 AM   #3
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Good to see back around. This was good stuff last 10 lines was fire tbh
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Old 02-05-2020, 12:43 PM   #4
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Love the vocabulary in your works and just how you string together your bars, just makes it a lot more readable when a concept carries through you know? Also the pop culture references are dope as well. Keep writing I'll keeo reading
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Just wanted to say, glad to see you still writing. This was different to what I seen from you but it's been a while. That Tartarus/arsenic part stood out to me because of the unique, very unconventional reference and everything after that was a highlight to me too. Great read per usual. Hope you share more.
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Old 02-14-2020, 10:44 PM   #6
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This was bipolar madness but dope...it felt like to different ideas sma3shed together in the middle which was pronounce after the Bruce Lee/ Butterbean line. Overall, u ripped it doing ur thang bro.
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Old 02-15-2020, 01:41 AM   #7
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Just uppin' this...Yo @ACTIVATE SELF, can you please be more on board fam...Shit helps me rhyme.
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Read the last line and killed myself.
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