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Sinus Infection
A warrior landlord on a chrome horse
Who came to enforce the law upon thy tenants Pay rent or get split with the flaming sword of “Divine Vengeance” My mind visits the prison realm that binds benign spirits To the flesh of the dying chemist who chose science over magic To try living life as a mortal with defined limits (describe physics) “I’m nigh finished”, sighed Einstein when he lied about his life’s mission The spacetime collision made by a god with omniscience The plot thickens. The Mother Box is not tickin. I’m stuck in a hot kitchen of gluttony Bruce Lee kickin his way through a maze full of Butterbeans “It’s troubling”, uttered Palpatine to Darth Maul I’m not yaw...I’ve crawled from the depths of Tartarus To show you all what a martyr is. Swallowed flames And gargled lit bottles of arsenic, carbonated water & vodka, bitch Pardon my vernacular and awful French, talkin shit Like permaculture enthusiasts. I’m usually the booziest Loser in a room full of lunatics, swigin Louis the 13th While Lieutenant Dan dances in the gloom of a lunar eclipse Louisiana vampire with a flu-bite, stay cocooned in a tomb Until you fruit flies are consumed by a crude type ...of Coronavirus Hazmat suits and crucifixes for the few survivors Dump the rest in a pool full of fuel then produce a fire But better be immune to the fumes of the human fibers Or book a room on the Moon when they nukin China — The Lewd Messiah Or Truthful Liar?
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Good to see back around. This was good stuff last 10 lines was fire tbh
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02-05-2020, 12:43 PM | #4 |
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Love the vocabulary in your works and just how you string together your bars, just makes it a lot more readable when a concept carries through you know? Also the pop culture references are dope as well. Keep writing I'll keeo reading
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Just wanted to say, glad to see you still writing. This was different to what I seen from you but it's been a while. That Tartarus/arsenic part stood out to me because of the unique, very unconventional reference and everything after that was a highlight to me too. Great read per usual. Hope you share more.
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This was bipolar madness but dope...it felt like to different ideas sma3shed together in the middle which was pronounce after the Bruce Lee/ Butterbean line. Overall, u ripped it doing ur thang bro.
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Just uppin' this...Yo @ACTIVATE SELF, can you please be more on board fam...Shit helps me rhyme.
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I can definitely try to
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Read the last line and killed myself.
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Then this post was a success
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