11-01-2014, 11:17 PM | #1 |
Arm the Homeless
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 4,104
Battle Record: 22-24
Champed - Art of Writing League
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I was a hipster before hipsters were hipsters, man.
Make a happy thought.
Watch the sun set so slow. The sky blushes pink When it’s kissed by the sun. I guess it’s a bit bashful. Maybe that’s a bit rash though. Nah. Maybe we’re just a bunch of assholes. Nature isn’t complicated. It’s simple if you think about it. We’re the oddities. Pour yourself a drink and down it. What else is there to do? Life’s whatever you make it. I’m lousy at building though. Failed arts and crafts in high school. My teacher thought I was a little slow, But I was just high and cool. Sat with the cool kids and made fun of the faggots. I bathed in their tears and came up as the Kraken. I’m still hollow. Chasing my way through the crowds. Killed a bottle of Jameson before I paid for the rounds. Had one too many and I’m laying down. So drowsy. Doctor gave me medicine. Told me I’m too sick. I wish I wouldn’t have let him because I miss being lucid. I miss you too, you bitch. What the fuck did I do BITCH!? Maybe that’s a little rude. Shit… I could’ve had it all. A butler with a funny accent. Laying on a lovely mattress while fucking my bunny actress who only loves me for my money and fat dick. Every day is sunny when you’re mad rich. No such something as sadness. Instead I drifted onward to madness. Wrapped in my thoughts. It would seem I’m unraveling at the seams. This is only a dream. It doesn’t matter. |
11-03-2014, 06:45 PM | #2 |
Mic Check
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HEY. THIS WAS WEIRD. BUT I LIKED IT?????
u keyed this while drunknstoned. i know the feels. did u ever read mine like this? i dont remember the title but it was FEELINGS shit too bruh, lol. its my last open mic if you want to peep haha. u mighta fed it actually don't remember, duh. why the fuck arent we collabing Ur cool.
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11-07-2014, 04:48 PM | #3 |
The Clown Prince
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,025
Battle Record: 35-45
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We’re the oddities.
Pour yourself a drink and down it. What else is there to do? Life’s whatever you make it. I’m lousy at building though. Failed arts and crafts in high school. My teacher thought I was a little slow, But I was just high and cool. Sat with the cool kids and made fun of the faggots. ^^^ Enjoyed this little section right here that whole part pretty much set an already smooth tone but it also made me laugh as well, and after I get into the section about being lucid I fell out of my seat, it just flowed so well, I enjoyed the part afterwards too this translates as more of a song to me, it plays out that way so well I feel like you should have just kept going while you could anyway, nice drop Zen, always a pleasure reading something of yours... even if I have to look for it -_-
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11-20-2014, 08:26 PM | #4 |
Don't believe the hype
Join Date: Feb 2013
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Real character coming through here, felt organic his voice legit. Not common here.
"Nature is simple if you think about it.We're the oddities" Yea...funny to me. Man is the only creation that breaks the laws of his creator. Trees, the sun, bees, grass and the wind all do there thing, not once breaking the ordering commanded them. Just a thought. |
11-21-2014, 06:48 AM | #5 |
Kill.It.Nonstop
Join Date: Jun 2014
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The part about nature an the whole intro was real nice...worded flawless...gives u a good picture...the transitioned into the oddities section nice...enjoyed the read...kinda on some EM type shit
Good drop |
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