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Old 02-09-2019, 10:43 AM   #1
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that bolt-cutter, soul-buffer.
for the hearts in their cage
call him constellation-palm
start seeing stars with a shake
know it's dark, but heart's the message
Already been to Mars, so mark it off the checklist
I can give you stars to start a necklace
..when man is thinking. The sand is sinking,
1st Eye enhanced delinquent, its, this, dance,
That, brings, it. Ashes/Phenix
About to flip your light on, listen
Nothing's random, it's right on rhythm
The mind spawn's vision
That surpasses any eye-kahn's image
"I've" gone missing, it's a hell of a fit for y'all
What's the level? Vitriol.
Once the petals rip and fall upon
Your threshold's inner all
Don't just stare in the abyss-
Skip a rock or Swan-dive
These chance-branches I'm clipping off the bonzai
Consider God a fall guy for your polluted habits
Confusing magick with some illusive rabbit
Either you're in tune.. Or you're not
Lunar-bots- gloomafied slop got a muse distraught
Oh, the tomb is my yacht
Useless jots knotting psychotic dichotomy when the music stops
Spark doomed- cartoons gottem glued to box
Whats in your spirit-bank? Better pay attention
Rep is fake. Reptile-snakes trying to replicate the angel's essence
Don't even know the trap that you've stepped in
Pipe down- class is in session
Foolish school kids have their soul gradually lessoned..
Teachers? Half of them pedi's
They're casting selections
There is no bigger act than elections
Gotta laugh though, so upset? i poke and jest
This floating web's glowing hex when soul's connect
The right words can steer'a legacy
That ear-ecstasy.
See myself all round like theres mirrors next to me
But round here, the edge is NEAT
Inferno le purs, realizing this journel is yours
Such internal discourse
Pinballing on the path of the eternal-lit torch..
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Old 02-09-2019, 10:16 PM   #2
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Don't just stare in the abyss-
Skip a rock or Swan-dive
These chance-branches I'm clipping off the bonsai*

sick.

The right words can steer'a legacy
That ear-ecstasy.
See myself all round like theres mirrors next to me

ungh.

a glimpse inside yourself for the 2k19. ever-niche, always you. damn man its good to see you posting.

hope all is well.
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Old 02-10-2019, 06:56 AM   #3
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You opened raw...Nice piece.
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Old 02-10-2019, 03:43 PM   #4
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Shit's crazy. Put it in the HOF @Diode
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Old 02-13-2019, 08:59 PM   #5
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1st Eye enhanced delinquent, its, this, dance,
That, brings, it. Ashes/Phenix


Interesting use of commas for hesitation

Useless jots knotting psychotic dichotomy when the music stops
sick line

The whole thing is nice and rhymey. Good stuff. I think I like it better than your new one, which I may comment on in the future.
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Old 02-13-2019, 10:21 PM   #6
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it's good to see you're still alive.
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