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Old 01-22-2021, 03:05 PM   #1
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don't write with a pencil,
scribe with the mental's
violent potential,
mine is essential.
- your mind is a rental,
who pays the rent?
say again?
A-LI-ENS?
maybe them.
you don't know you're crazy then
- you don't know your radiance.
join the ranks of lazy men
if you don't do the work.
i puke a verse of putrid words
until the verb usage flares
like kuja teared through the view of earth.
synodic, synoptic darkness of the lunar year.
bring light. i'm a luminary.
pinch to double-check i'm still human here,
show me a pauper about whom the affluent care.
we are sick, but no influenza.
just proposed influencers.
juxtaposed, the truth subverts.
stunted growth; you're soon interred.
fuck it though, Eŋg move the earth
with a gust of wind when i let loose a verse,
think lucifer can do the worst?
no greater enemy in the universe
than the loss of human worth
- who can hurt you more than yourself?
God gave me wings but instead i flew to dirt,
digging through... my mood deterred,
assume you were - through the glare -
someone with whom you could share
an embrace with. maybe that's basic.
love isn't lost,
just been too long since you faced it.
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Old 01-23-2021, 09:12 PM   #2
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Reads more like a freestyle than a fleshed out Eng piece.
But still fairly dope in parts.
Reader learns a couple new words.
Swear I could have seen another piece of yours rhyming universe.
If I'm wrong, sorry.
Still a decent drop.
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Old 02-11-2021, 04:51 AM   #3
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Agree that this reads more like a free than a fleshed out piece of yours, dusting off the rust?

Either way I enjoyed this for what it was. Some cool lines here and there, ff9 reference with Kuja? Really dope reference that make sense to the topic at hand too.

"no greater enemy in the universe
than the loss of human worth"
^ word

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Old 03-01-2021, 08:37 PM   #4
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word. i'm rusty but not dusty.
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Old 03-24-2021, 02:31 PM   #5
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Not much here content-wise imo I’m not too versed on your old pieces but you seem like a very skilled writer to me. The flow was impeccable, I liked the multis and scheme throughout, can’t lie though getting through this was a headache, just all the word twisting and what not was sort of a roller coaster ride and though I enjoyed it, it tossed and turned my brain in directions it hadn’t been in awhile so thank you and fuck you all in the same lmao

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until the verb usage flares
like kuja teared through the view of earth.
synodic, synoptic darkness of the lunar year.
bring light. i'm a luminary.
pinch to double-check i'm still human here,
show me a pauper about whom the affluent care.”

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Old 03-24-2021, 05:36 PM   #6
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Old 03-26-2021, 11:37 PM   #7
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This was smooth from the start to finish
Like you could say this at an actual open mic
The imagery was popping out here & there
My favorite section right below here

synodic, synoptic darkness of the lunar year.
bring light. i'm a luminary.
pinch to double-check i'm still human here,
show me a pauper about whom the affluent care.
we are sick, but no influenza.
just proposed influencers.

^^^nicely worded and structure right there
You always bring something fun to the table
It's interesting to see where your works lead to
Keep it up
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Old 03-30-2021, 08:44 PM   #8
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i wrote this

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Old 04-06-2021, 12:01 AM   #9
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think lucifer can do the worst?
no greater enemy in the universe
than the loss of human worth
- who can hurt you more than yourself?
God gave me wings but instead i flew to dirt


damn that's good.
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Old 04-13-2021, 03:42 PM   #10
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respect @oats

ain't seen you this way for a good minute.
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Old 04-13-2021, 11:16 PM   #11
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stop takin praise for my work nigga

before i tell sinacog to smite you

matter of fact

ive had enough

set up it nigga

topical battle, about the oceans floor & heavenly sun rays & flowers & shits like that

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Old 04-14-2021, 06:38 PM   #12
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Yes, indeed.

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violent potential,
mine is essential.
- your mind is a rental,
who pays the rent?
say again?
A-LI-ENS?
maybe them.
you don't know you're crazy then
- you don't know your radiance.
join the ranks of lazy men
if you don't do the work.
I feel like you're indirectly touching on the subject of social engineering. It seems to me that the mass majority of the world is under a zombielike spell.

In any case, everything quoted above was straight fire!



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pinch to double-check i'm still human here,
show me a pauper about whom the affluent care.
Bars! Very poignant statement/question.

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we are sick, but no influenza.
Yeah, but fear is the virus.

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just proposed influencers.
juxtaposed, the truth subverts.
stunted growth; you're soon interred.
fuck it though, Eŋg move the earth
with a gust of wind when i let loose a verse,
That last line reminded me of both DOOM and Jay Electronica.

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think lucifer can do the worst?
no greater enemy in the universe
than the loss of human worth
- who can hurt you more than yourself?
Dope.

Overall (and per usual) this joint was fire. It read free and fluent, unrestrained and unabashed. Like a constant stream of intuitive consciousness. I fuck with it, Eng. Real shit. Plus it was entertaining.
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Old 05-19-2021, 01:42 AM   #13
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Your flow is still butter as usual. Yu gud with dem werds, mun.

join the ranks of lazy men
if you don't do the work.
i puke a verse of putrid words
until the verb usage flares
like kuja teared through the view of earth.

Nice.
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Read through this a few times now, the rhythmic pattern’s that enjoyable.
Loved these the most:

pinch to double-check i'm still human here,
show me a pauper about whom the affluent care.

- who can hurt you more than yourself?
God gave me wings but instead i flew to dirt

But really, everything read natural and came off as organic with clever turns of phrases. Sort of weaving in and out of interesting train of thoughts. Write more?
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Old 07-01-2021, 11:53 AM   #15
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Old 07-10-2021, 06:39 PM   #16
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Eng this was great. The command of ideas and the flow mixed together. I liked the first two waves crescendo with the double check to see if I’m still human here was ether. Please keep writing
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@Eŋg

throw me 5 lines you dustbag

i'll write off it, & vice versa

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