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10-07-2019, 10:53 PM | #1 |
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JAY TAUGHT YOU HOW TO MOVE IN A ROOM FULL OF VULTURES, IM GONE SHOW YOU HOW TO SURVVE AS A LION IN A CAGE FULL OF POACHERS/
Doing 35 years in that Bing, where's that team?
Dudes aren't who they seem...fucka friend Arm wrestled the long arm of tha law and got penned Trying to feed tha fam with the pyrex, Now in a jungle full of niggas Wondering who gone die next Pifff |
10-08-2019, 02:07 AM | #2 |
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Thought I was on Discord for a second. Overall nice literacy, great use of metaphors and painting a picture of a troubled young teen using assumptions on what real life is all about neglecting self reflection on past mistakes etc., not many can put themselves in a situation so far removed from their own life that they can write six sentences about it based on other forum personas based on rappers again that couldn't afford to send their script to Hollywood so they talked about it over a beat instead as therapy for how not gangster they actually are but record companies be like, no, you cant feel that way, be gangsta cuz, you real af bruh, come on, dont cry, we dont sell that here, this beat goes hard sound hard and so they do and wear the clothes they want etc. Also enjoyed the intro which you used as the title for your poem. Good shit, you should join a local writing team and see if you make the cut. pz.
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10-08-2019, 02:11 AM | #3 |
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Arm wrestled the long arm of tha law and got penned...
its pinned.. and that was an ok line rest sucked |
10-08-2019, 02:42 AM | #4 |
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you've got a weak jab its
time to fuckin retract it I flow its a meek habit see thats it... placement is hard placement and scars i'll break your glass jaw and rub your face in the shards |
10-08-2019, 07:41 AM | #5 |
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This is part of a DMX verse you fucking fools
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10-08-2019, 08:39 AM | #6 |
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10-08-2019, 08:41 AM | #7 |
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Hoe ass nigga
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10-08-2019, 09:44 AM | #8 |
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10-08-2019, 11:38 AM | #9 |
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10-08-2019, 12:21 PM | #10 |
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Peace be upon u
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10-09-2019, 05:58 PM | #11 |
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10-09-2019, 06:44 PM | #12 |
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Pretty sure it's not DMX.
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10-09-2019, 07:00 PM | #13 |
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Yall did well,
But can you tell me who it really is? |
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