10-01-2019, 08:06 AM | #1 |
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When I spit the planet moves in an outward motion
Causin' eruptions in earth more powerful than oceans Creatin' ice storms to leave this world frozen Then create potions like ancient druids & witch doctors Concoctin' a truth serum to feed to Army officers Extractin' information like right clickin' zipped folders Leavin' a burden on they shoulders as heavy as six boulders I made them tell me where they hidin' this Bin Laden bastard 'Cause they holdin' all the answers like Asian kids in advanced classes As death dances, I spit over beats from the Devil's organ & just for fun bitch, I'll jump in the wind & try & catch me some caution More corrupt than law enforcement or teenage abortion & grimier than Siamese twins & two dwarfs in a foursome My warfare tactics are awesome, When compared to Gengis Khan I'll track you in 'Nam, Attack & pour gas on your palms Throw a lit match @ you & then hack off your arms Rob you for your ammo & guns, Fill my bag with your charms Send you back to the farm & make you work for the machine Which creates all the Evil & Hate this world has ever seen This is the very same machine that done created Hitler & envoked Salvador Daly to paint Satan's pictures I spit tainted scriptures, Recovered from shipwrecks Delivered straight to my doorstep encased in a thick chest Picture Picasso doin' 3d art, The locks are more complex The history of man never started with religion It started with Africans procreatin' with Indians Which makes me sick to my stomach when I think of the word Pilgram Which is a group of rapists who killed women & children They impregnated the ladies & created them Germans Who gave birth to the Devil's own personified version I'm sendin' this virus airborn like paratroopers with flu's I'm definately a nessecity like bulletproof suits in Peru Fuck a diguise or obtainin' lies, I'm only pursuin' the truth. |
10-01-2019, 03:33 PM | #2 |
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When I spit the planet moves in an outward motion
Causin' eruptions in earth more powerful than oceans Creatin' ice storms to leave this world frozen This is not how the earth works Then create potions like ancient druids & witch doctors Concoctin' a truth serum to feed to Army officers If the world has expanded and become completely frozen how are u operating this druid potion organization? Extractin' information like right clickin' zipped folders Leavin' a burden on they shoulders as heavy as six boulders Right click just brings up the menu...wow also 6 boulders is very heavy I made them tell me where they hidin' this Bin Laden bastard 'Cause they holdin' all the answers like Asian kids in advanced classes Bin laden dead even or maybe especially so in your expanded glacier dystopia As death dances, I spit over beats from the Devil's organ Somehow u still rapping amidst this global crisis and now to the tune of the devil's organ & just for fun bitch, I'll jump in the wind & try & catch me some caution I understand some have been known to throw caution to the wind..... However I'm not sure I see the feet in engaging the wind to procure the caution once discarded.....I would imagine caution would leave with you quite cooperatively More corrupt than law enforcement or teenage abortion & grimier than Siamese twins & two dwarfs in a foursome Teenage abortion corruption is at an all time high....wait wut....grimy is not a replacement verbiage for fetish? My warfare tactics are awesome, When compared to Gengis Khan I'll track you in 'Nam, Attack & pour gas on your palms Throw a lit match @ you & then hack off your arms Gengis khan by far the fiercest military general In the Vietnam war.....also ...wouldn't lopping his arms off stop the fire that u set to his palms? Seems counterintuitive to your purposes here Rob you for your ammo & guns, Fill my bag with your charms Send you back to the farm & make you work for the machine Which creates all the Evil & Hate this world has ever seen Old MacDonald farm has helped children recognize animals and their characteristics for a century... put some SPECK on the farm This is the very same machine that done created Hitler & envoked Salvador Daly to paint Satan's pictures Salvador Dali* unless u were referring to Carson Daly's Guatemalan cousin...Salvador Daly.....I'm less familiar with his work but I'm sure it's fascinating I spit tainted scriptures, Recovered from shipwrecks Delivered straight to my doorstep encased in a thick chest So like....pirates find your spits in sunken tombs and drop them back at ur place like a return to sender issue? Picture Picasso doin' 3d art, The locks are more complex The history of man never started with religion It started with Africans procreatin' with Indians Which indigenous people are we referring to as Indians rn? The the southwestern Asians!? Which makes me sick to my stomach when I think of the word Pilgram Pilgrim LMFAO Jesus ur timeline took a jump here Which is a group of rapists who killed women & children Solid definition They impregnated the ladies & created them Germans Who gave birth to the Devil's own personified version This is the most fascinating history lesson I've ever had the pleasure to read ..... Apparently the Germans were created by Bostonian pilgrim's or to the lay...pilgram....raping native Americans from the nauset tribe in Massachusetts ... The devil's personified version of what exactly by the way? Are you aware what personification is? I'm sendin' this virus airborn like paratroopers with flu's I'm definately a nessecity like bulletproof suits in Peru So your rhymes are a virus now....also not entirely sure I can concur on the necessity of bullet proof tailored suits in Peru.....seems wildly innacurate Fuck a diguise or obtainin' lies, I'm only pursuin' the truth. Start with history......you have missed a large amount of truths in your incredibly and strangely limited view of history..... Also ...you're an incredibly stupid person ? How is this possible ? The rhyme schemes were rudimentary, the content was laughable, and the transition of focus and ideas was erattic at best. Genuinely you should not write again. |
10-01-2019, 08:57 PM | #3 |
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Thanks for the feed...
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10-06-2019, 04:05 AM | #4 |
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Lmao at least he broke it down in detail
Good shit
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10-06-2019, 09:12 PM | #5 |
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Yeah I'll give him that lol...
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10-08-2019, 02:27 AM | #6 |
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His feed was on point here and there. A bit harsh but on point. Thought the concept was cool, enjoyed what you were trying to do but certain things Ghost1 said definitely detracted from the piece. A little bit of research and making sure shit makes sense all the way through would have made this a solid well thought out piece tho, instead it stands as a cool enough piece that needs some more work to reach the dopeness scale.
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